I think miniplots should be designed to not have too many complications. Just look back at the HILDA subplot. It went smoothly enough (mostly because Loki was there to deal with it), nevertheless it had major impact on HILDA, and noticable impact on Alucard, it also served incredibly well to slowly introduce a large chunk of lore without just dumping the entire thing. Great success.
In theory, Kyle could have learned a bit about what happened to Nuriel and followed up on it; if not, there's Will. Do a bit of recon, find out what happened, locate and confront Seham, and you're pretty much done.
Not only for structure of the plot, but also for the descriptiveness. I don't wanna masturbate my ego here, but I did get a PM from Nomad praising my writing.
Your hell and demon lord are pretty much just ASCII, where you hover over the D and the only description is "A demon". Especially places like hell and beings like demon deserve description. Make them touch all senses, to give them the imposing, dreadful feeling that hell deserves. Else there is no way KJ would ever be interested in what is going on.
((I knew what you were talking about.))
Well, the demons look like pretty much whatever they want, and since they're not needing to be intimidating or anything they don't look like much. Besides, most of them are generic minions, and giving each of them specific appearances...
Seham could have probably used some work, though.
Selina has seen 1 movie in her life and has no idea what to go see...
I vote Frozen. I wonder what it's like in this universe, especially since magic
(probably) got revealed enough before release that Disney could modify it some.