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[Furtuka]

Ah thought I fixed that. I swapped handbooks during production and had to redo the skills sections. Thanks.

[GiglameshDespair]

Tell me if i need to fix anything.

Spoiler (click to show/hide)

Character sheet:
Name:Sparrow"Sprook"Brook
Class:Scavenger
Character Skill:Fortune
Affinity:
Personal Skill:City Boy: +15 hit when on city streets or in city buildings
Personal Skill:How Dare You!: +5 Crit against a enemy that has downed a
Teammate
Personal Fault:Oh God Wyverns!: -15 Evade and 5 hit if the unit is fighting a wyvern rider or any variation involving wyverns.

Preferred stats: SKL,
 
Weapon profs: Dark magic (D), Swords
(Dagger)(D)
 
Level: 1 (0/100)
Total Level: 1
 
Progression spent: 335%
 
HP:17(50%)
STR:4(30%)
MAG:3(50%)
SKL:5(60%)
CON:6
AID:5
LCK:5(35%)
DEF:2 (50%)
RES: 1 (20%)
SPD:7(50%)
MOV:5
Weapon  Skill:Iron Dagger'Dark tomes
Luck Special:  Lockpick   
Scavenge  Gold   Passive Effect The  first  time  a  Scavenger  lands  an attack  on an enemy  target,  they  steal  a  sum  of gold,  equal  to 100 from  First  Tier  enemies, and 200 from  Promoted enemies.  A  Scavenger can  only  steal  from  a  particular enemy  once  per battle,  but  can  potentially  steal  from  every  deployed enemy  on the  field.
 Bio:"Sprook" is a. 16 year old orphan who had his parents brutally murdered by bandits and most of  his possesions and belongings burned and he barely managed to escape into the wilderness carrying only a iron dagger and his fathers used dark tome his father having been a powerfull shaman but even he could not survive the sheer number of them and was slain and his wife captured.
"Sprook" and his family have always had to scavenge to survive and now he has to do it all himself he has joined the mercenary group to become strong enough to avenge his father and save his mother this happened in the current country we are in two days ago.
Inventory:
Iron dagger
Fathers Flux tome halve of it's uses are gone.

OK, the issues I can see at a glance:

• The 'City boy' PS might be a little too wide - perhaps reduce it to 'when indoors'. But that's Furtuka's choice.
• The standard crit bonus in a PS is +10
• Having -15 evade on it's own is fine, you probably don't need the -5 hit as well
• The sword subcategory you are wanting is called Sidearm, not Dagger
• You need to choose a subcategory for dark magic as well.
• Your Preferred stats are SKL and LUK
• You can get rid of the "weapon skill" bit, your weapon profs already cover that
• You begin with an iron dagger or a flux tome, not both.
• You begin with a vulnerary.
• If his mother is alive he is not an orphan by any common use of the term.

[Tawa]

Ah thought I fixed that. I swapped handbooks during production and had to redo the skills sections. Thanks.

No problem.

I'm thinking of a sort of well-rounded bruiser in the style of Ephraim in FE8 and Gregor in FE13, so the Merc line looks good. We're going to need more front-liners here, methinks, seeing as we have a monk, a thief, and promises of another thief and a mage.

Hopefully I'll manage a better mug than a lazy recolor this time. :v

[AbstractTraitorHero]

Kay Flux tome it is.

[Twinwolf]

I could always switch to a non thief-type class to avoid overlap.

You know what, yeah, I haven't played a Performer before so why not. Dancer incoming.

Edit:
Sheet. Mug is a WiP.

Double Edit:
Mug, and moving this to reply number four so it's easy to find.

[Tawa]

Two little questions about personal skills before I submit my sheet:
- My character is a (wannabe) professional monster hunter (as in the kind mentioned in the lore page.) How would I balance a personal skill giving a minor bonus to fighting monsters? I was thinking along the lines of +(X) Critical, but I'm not sure how much to add for such a broad group.
- What kind of stat boosts would be acceptable for a below-half-health-boost PS? I imagined something like +1 across the board but I'm not sure if that's too much.

[Twinwolf]

Two little questions about personal skills before I submit my sheet:
- My character is a (wannabe) professional monster hunter (as in the kind mentioned in the lore page.) How would I balance a personal skill giving a minor bonus to fighting monsters? I was thinking along the lines of +(X) Critical, but I'm not sure how much to add for such a broad group.
- What kind of stat boosts would be acceptable for a below-half-health-boost PS? I imagined something like +1 across the board but I'm not sure if that's too much.

Probably +10, since for the most part FEF enemies are human.

+1 across the board is way to much. +2 to one stat is usually the most, or I suppose +1 to two could work. Or, +15 to Evasion or Hit.

[Tawa]

Ah, I thought so on both counts.

Therefore, sheet.

Spoiler: Gammel Velgsver, Mercenary (click to show/hide)

Not nightmarishly-necked portrait coming soon.

Name: Gammel Velgsver
Class: Mercenary
Character Specific Skill: Awareness
Affinity: [To Be Determined]
Personal Skill: Determination: Gammel's never-give-up philosophy translates to him knowing no way of going down besides kicking and screaming. +1 to Strength and Speed when below half health.
Personal Skill: Butcher: Gammel's expertise with cutting up farm animals proves useful in combat with monsters. +10 Critical when fighting monsters.
Personal Fault: Bad Knees: Perhaps the only toll time has taken on Gammel's body is the weakness in his knees. -2 Speed on movement-restricting terrain.

Preferred stats: Skill, Strength

Weapon profs: Crushing Swords C, Swords D

Level: 1 (0/100)
Total Level: 1

Progression spent: 335%

HP: 21   (80%)
STR: 5+1 (55%)
MAG: 1   (00%)
SKL: 6   (50%)
CON: 8
AID: 7
LCK: 2   (50%)
DEF: 2+2 (35%)
RES: 0+1 (20%)
SPD: 5   (45%)
MOV: 5

Inventory:
Name            Type (-) RNG MT WT CR Hit QL
Iron Blade      Crush(E) 1   9  8  0  70  45
Vulnerary (3/3)

Biography:

Gammel Velgsver is 63 1/2 years old, born on a rather unremarkable night in the distant past. His entire life, he has had an obsession with physical fitness and agility; he had intentions long ago of joining his small village's guards, but his father forced him into the family business of butchery. Despite this, he has trained with a blade his whole life 'should the need arise', honing his muscles to a point expected of men thirty years younger.

Tragedy has struck his village. Beasts from a section of cursed lands, its presence long forgotten, attacked it, and an understaffed town guard was unable to fend them off. Gammel was one of the few survivors; with nobody to sell parts of dead animals to anymore, he has sworn to become a professional monster hunter instead. He has agreed to work to escort [MACGUFFIN_PERSON] to [MACGUFFIN_PERSON_DESTINATION] both for his own personal training and out of a combined sense of worry that they will be attacked and revenge on the evils that destroyed everything he loved.

[GiglameshDespair]

That head... doesn't fit on that body. Wrong size, wrong angle.

Tell me if i need to fix anything.

Spoiler (click to show/hide)

Character sheet:
Name:Sparrow"Sprook"Brook
Class:Scavenger
Character Skill:Fortune
Affinity:
Personal Skill:City Boy: +15 hit when on city streets or in city buildings
Personal Skill:How Dare You!: +10 Crit against a enemy that has downed a
Teammate
Personal Fault:Oh God Wyverns!: -15 Evade  if the unit is fighting a wyvern rider or any variation involving wyverns.

Preferred stats: SKL,Luck
 
Weapon profs: Dark magic (Flux tomes) (D), Swords
(Sidearm)(D)
 
Level: 1 (0/100)
Total Level: 1
 
Progression spent: 335%
 
HP:17(50%)
STR:4(30%)
MAG:3(50%)
SKL:5(55%)
CON:6
AID:5
LCK:5(40%)
DEF:2 (50%)
RES: 1 (20%)
SPD:7(50%)
MOV:5
Luck Special:  Lockpick   
Scavenge  Gold   Passive Effect The  first  time  a  Scavenger  lands  an attack  on an enemy  target,  they  steal  a  sum  of gold,  equal  to 100 from  First  Tier  enemies, and 200 from  Promoted enemies.  A  Scavenger can  only  steal  from  a  particular enemy  once  per battle,  but  can  potentially  steal  from  every  deployed enemy  on the  field.
 Bio:"Sprook" is a. 16 year old fatherless boy who had his Father brutally murdered by bandits and most of  his possesions and belongings burned and he barely managed to escape into the wilderness carrying only a his fathers used Flux tome and a vulneary.his father having been a powerfull shaman but even he could not survive the sheer number of them and was slain and his wife captured.
"Sprook" and his family have always had to scavenge to survive and now he has to do it all himself he has joined the mercenary group to become strong enough to avenge his father and save his mother this happened in the current country we are in two days ago.
Inventory:
Fathers Flux tome halve of it's uses are gone.
Vulnerary 3/3

Character description and mug request:
 Male
.Rougish Yet youthful face
Angular chin and his cheek bones are quite prominent
He is 16 years old and looks the part.
.Indigo hair short and cropped.
Wavy bangs in front of face
.Emerald Green eyes
Light clothing flat out white shirt and brown civilian clothes.
5ft4
Clothing does have a metal belt across it.
((Fixed I'll see what the gm thinks abiut city boy.))

Oh, yeah, additional issue I noticed. You have to have at least 70% in HP.  nevermind i misremembered

Your weapon profs still aren't right.
They're for weapon subcategories rather than specific weapons - when you look at the weapon lists in the handbook, the subcat is in the top left of the table on each page.
For dark tomes, for example, there are the Dread, Druidic and Ancient subcategories.
Flux can be found in the Dread list, so it is in the Dread category of Dark magic.

You'd write that in your weapon proficiencies as Dread (D).

You finally weapon profeciences, if you choose the Dread subcategory, should look like:
Dread (D), Sidearm (D), Swords (D), Dark (D)

[Tawa]

That head... doesn't fit on that body. Wrong size, wrong angle.

Ach, I guess the slightly angled neck I tried to add wasn't enough. I was waiting for commentary on it, really. I'll tear the head off and lower it a little or something, I guess. Or pick somebody who's more hunched-over.

[AbstractTraitorHero]

Did so GD i think the build is playable statwise.

[GiglameshDespair]

That head... doesn't fit on that body. Wrong size, wrong angle.

Ach, I guess the slightly angled neck I tried to add wasn't enough. I was waiting for commentary on it, really. I'll tear the head off and lower it a little or something, I guess. Or pick somebody who's more hunched-over.

The body is way, way too broad for the head - or the head is way, way too small, depending on your point of view. Basically those two just don't work together.

[Tawa]

That head... doesn't fit on that body. Wrong size, wrong angle.

Ach, I guess the slightly angled neck I tried to add wasn't enough. I was waiting for commentary on it, really. I'll tear the head off and lower it a little or something, I guess. Or pick somebody who's more hunched-over.

The body is way, way too broad for the head - or the head is way, way too small, depending on your point of view. Basically those two just don't work together.

Yeah, fair point. Maybe Blazing Sword has a better-looking body...

[Furtuka]

Applying for a veteran slot, obviously.

Spoiler: Jezzail the monk (click to show/hide)

 
Name: Jezzail
Class: Monk
Character Skill: Charisma
Affinity:
Personal Skill: Mighty Smiter: +10 crit when fighting at range 2
Personal Skill: Divine vigour: when over half health, +2spd
Personal Fault: Inevitable doom: when doubled by an enemy, -15 eva
Special: leviatation, Pious veil
 
Preferred Stats: Resistance, Skill
 
Weapon Skill: Holy (C), Light (D)
Starting Weapon: Lightning
 
Level: 1 (0/100)
Total Level: 1
 
Progression spent: 330%
 
HP 18 (75%)
STR 2 (0%)
MAG 4 (60%)
SKI 3 (60%)
CON 5 (+2=7)
AID 4 (+2=6)
LUC 5 (40%)
DEF 1 (+2=3)(20%)
RES 7 (20%)
SPD 5 (60%)
MOV 5
 
Inv
Name        | Type ( ) | Rng | Wt | Mt | Hit | Cr | Ql
Lightning   | Holy (E) | 1-2 | 6 | 4 | 85 | 5 | 40
Vuln 3/3
 
 
Bio:
 
Jezzail is a Dragon Cultist from Revice. Born to a moderately wealthy family, she was taught the magic arts as she grew up. While she had no talent for staves of any kind, she had a small affinity for light magic. On her eighteenth birthday, her father was killed by a burglar, who stole multiple precious tomes.
 
Filled with righteous anger, Jezzial pursued the trail of the burglar, and eventually tracked down and slew him - but the tomes were gone, and her father was still dead. Now aimless, she drifted between mercenary jobs until she arrived at her current employment.

Everything seems in order here.

Tell me if i need to fix anything.

Spoiler (click to show/hide)

Character sheet:
Name:Sparrow"Sprook"Brook
Class:Scavenger
Character Skill:Fortune
Affinity:
Personal Skill:City Boy: +15 hit when on city streets or in city buildings
Personal Skill:How Dare You!: +10 Crit against a enemy that has downed a
Teammate
Personal Fault:Oh God Wyverns!: -15 Evade  if the unit is fighting a wyvern rider or any variation involving wyverns.

Preferred stats: SKL,Luck
 
Weapon profs:Dread (D), Sidearm (D), Swords (D), Dark (D)
 
Level: 1 (0/100)
Total Level: 1
 
Progression spent: 335%
 
HP:17(50%)
STR:4(35%)
MAG:3(50%)
SKL:5(60%)
CON:6
AID:5
LCK:5(40%)
DEF:2 (40%)
RES: 1 (25%)
SPD:7(40%)
MOV:5
Luck Special:  Lockpick   
Scavenge  Gold   Passive Effect The  first  time  a  Scavenger  lands  an attack  on an enemy  target,  they  steal  a  sum  of gold,  equal  to 100 from  First  Tier  enemies, and 200 from  Promoted enemies.  A  Scavenger can  only  steal  from  a  particular enemy  once  per battle,  but  can  potentially  steal  from  every  deployed enemy  on the  field.
 Bio:"Sprook" is a. 16 year old fatherless boy who had his Father brutally murdered by bandits and most of  his possesions and belongings burned and he barely managed to escape into the wilderness carrying only a his fathers used Flux tome and a vulneary.his father having been a powerfull shaman but even he could not survive the sheer number of them and was slain and his wife captured.
"Sprook" and his family have always had to scavenge to survive and now he has to do it all himself he has joined the mercenary group to become strong enough to avenge his father and save his mother this happened in the current country we are in two days ago.
Inventory:
Fathers Flux tome halve of it's uses are gone.
Vulnerary 3/3

You are missing your 4 extra stat points, and your progression totals up to 340%, 5% too high. The rest looks valid, but could use some cleaning up for convenience sake.
The bio seems like it could use some more details, and you want to reconsider the idea of it having only happened two days ago as it might seem a bit odd for him to have recovered and gathered his plans and find the job and such so quickly.
Lastly are you certain you want your Flux to have only half uses? I can grant it if you really want, but it could potentially make things difficult for you, especially if it breaks before you can find a replacement.

I could always switch to a non thief-type class to avoid overlap.

You know what, yeah, I haven't played a Performer before so why not. Dancer incoming.

Edit:
Sheet. Mug is a WiP.

Mostly checks out, though I'm going to have to say change the activation for Won’t Get Left Behind. It's current form activates a bit too easily, especially considering how Performer classes behave. Having activate when in 3 tiles of 3 or more enemies, or having no enemies within 3 tiles.

Ah, I thought so on both counts.

Therefore, sheet.

Spoiler: Gammel Velgsver, Mercenary (click to show/hide)

It's better than a lazy recolor, right?

Name: Gammel Velgsver
Class: Mercenary
Character Specific Skill: Awareness
Affinity: [To Be Determined]
Personal Skill: Determination: Gammel's never-give-up philosophy translates to him knowing no way of going down besides kicking and screaming. +1 to Strength and Speed when below half health.
Personal Skill: Butcher: Gammel's expertise with cutting up farm animals proves useful in combat with monsters. +10 Critical when fighting monsters.
Personal Fault: Bad Knees: Perhaps the only toll time has taken on Gammel's body is the weakness in his knees. -2 Speed on movement-restricting terrain.

Preferred stats: Skill, Strength

Weapon profs: Crushing Swords C, Swords D

Level: 1 (0/100)
Total Level: 1

Progression spent: 335%

HP: 21 (80%)
STR: 5 (55%)
MAG: 1 (00%)
SKL: 6 (50%)
CON: 8
AID: 7
LCK: 2 (50%)
DEF: 2 (35%)
RES: 0 (20%)
SPD: 5 (45%)
MOV: 5

Inventory:
Name            Type (-) RNG MT WT CR Hit QL
Iron Blade      Crush(E) 1   9  8  0  70  45
Vulnerary (3/3)

Biography:

Gammel Velgsver is 63 1/2 years old, born on a rather unremarkable night in the distant past. His entire life, he has had an obsession with physical fitness and agility; he had intentions long ago of joining his small village's guards, but his father forced him into the family business of butchery. Despite this, he has trained with a blade his whole life 'should the need arise', honing his muscles to a point expected of men thirty years younger.

Tragedy has struck his village. Beasts from a section of cursed lands, its presence long forgotten, attacked it, and an understaffed town guard was unable to fend them off. Gammel was one of the few survivors; with nobody to sell parts of dead animals to anymore, he has sworn to become a professional monster hunter instead. He has agreed to work to escort [MACGUFFIN_PERSON] to [MACGUFFIN_PERSON_DESTINATION] both for his own personal training and out of a combined sense of worry that they will be attacked and revenge on the evils that destroyed everything he loved.

You're missing the extra four stat points. Other than that it seems to check out alright.


Cutoff date has been added to the OP, and it's been edited to mention that this will be occurring within Napelli.

[Tawa]

Aw yiss, I only made one mechanical mistake this time. I'll feed those points into my defensive stats to somewhat offset my lower gains in them.