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Author Topic: ___/The Writer's Apprenticeship\___  (Read 312833 times)

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Re: ___/The Writer's Apprenticeship\___
« Reply #855 on: September 06, 2014, 12:58:31 pm »

The story kinda reminded me of "The Princess Bride" with the Bart Roberts thing.

A little confusing in a couple parts, but it made sense by the end so I'd say it was good. I liked it.
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« Reply #856 on: September 06, 2014, 08:34:34 pm »

This is just something random I wrote out. It was just something that I wrote down for the sake of writing, so I didn't try to make it good, or make it have a plot or even make sense. But I enjoyed writing it just for the sake of doing something stupid :P

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« Reply #857 on: September 10, 2014, 01:25:28 pm »

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« Reply #858 on: September 10, 2014, 01:28:43 pm »

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I really like this.
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Re: ___/The Writer's Apprenticeship\___
« Reply #861 on: September 10, 2014, 03:43:27 pm »

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Re: ___/The Writer's Apprenticeship\___
« Reply #862 on: September 10, 2014, 04:59:26 pm »


Meant to post this yesterday, but forgot.

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« Reply #863 on: September 11, 2014, 11:38:52 am »

Woah, so much love. Thank you all.

Mastahcheese, I don't have any specific advice for your stories other than that this is very useful for avoiding becoming repetitive. Its usefulness does drop pretty fast as your writing extends, though, so whilst it was very handy for the thing I wrote yesterday (which is about two-seventy words so any unintentional reuse is bad) it would be less useful for your fragments (chilling a little over a thousand words each, at an estimate).
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« Reply #864 on: September 11, 2014, 11:45:12 am »

Oh, I like this word counter.
Thank you; I will remember this, it is rather helpful to me.
(And yeah, I'm bad about being repetitive, I need to learn more words.)
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« Reply #865 on: September 11, 2014, 03:38:15 pm »

It wasn't repetitive, but it could've used some more variety. You shouldn't be afraid to use the same word two sentences in a row. c: Other than the vocabulary lacking a bit I think it's pretty good! Great pacing, action is nice, and this guy-
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Re: ___/The Writer's Apprenticeship\___
« Reply #866 on: September 11, 2014, 03:49:39 pm »

Can't remember his name, but I preferred the bowman to Mandorallen.
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« Reply #867 on: September 11, 2014, 04:15:29 pm »

Can't remember his name, but I preferred the bowman to Mandorallen.
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You've read it as well.

His name was Lelldorin.
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« Reply #868 on: September 11, 2014, 04:17:58 pm »

Sure, I read it. Was a while back, but at the time it was one of my favourites :P

I even read some of the....argh,...Mallordian? Can't remember that name either. Gonna have to reread it soon.
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« Reply #869 on: September 11, 2014, 04:28:42 pm »

Sure, I read it. Was a while back, but at the time it was one of my favourites :P

I even read some of the....argh,...Mallordian? Can't remember that name either. Gonna have to reread it soon.
Lelldorin was the archer guy who was clueless and Mandorallen was the big knight guy who was equally clueless and full of HAM and NOBLE INTENTIONS and whenever the characters made a plan he would suggest that they charge right in and fight like MEN and the other characters would :I at him and go back to planning while he pet his horse. <-- Along those lines. His character is actually pretty deep.
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