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Wait for the next release. I want usable mugs damn it!

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We can use the current one. I like the big trees and slightly smarter dorfs.

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I'll take .34.11 thanks. I want to know I'll get to kill things for sure.

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Total Members Voted: 77

[Splint]

I am greatly annoyed that my dwarf can't lead a squad -_-

[Mr Frog]

@Xahnel:

That's plausible, but depending on how distantly-related they are, a DNA test may not pick up any significant similarity (or at least any that wouldn't happen by chance between completely-unrelated individuals). mDNA is a possibility, though in that case all of their family links must be mother-to-daughter all the way down to them.

Even if they were related, though... what of it? Mr Frog is then the creepy guy who happens to be Rose's third-cousin-twice-removed or whatever. Again -- nothing wrong with that, I just don't see it being of much consequence.

[Corai]

You know, I got lost in the whole sidestories. So I will just leave this here.


We use pikes, not spears. Why are we called Spearbreakers then you ask? Because we broke all the spears and had to use pikes instead.

[Xahnel]

@splint: that's cause he's a baron, right?

@Mr Frog: did you... Actually read what explanation i chose? Daughter, Mr Frog. From a one night stand that happened years ago on this plain. During the earliest research phases of the HS2 project. He went further back than he was supposed to, cause a clerk put in the wrong date. He decided it didn't matter, and was trivial, and did his recon anyways. Got bored one night, while an attractive female was handy. Promptly forgot her as another trivial meaningless detail.

EDIT: Look, we can go back and forth on this all night. Here's the root question. Do you, or do you not, want this specific storyline? If not, i can use my original idea of having her just be half human. If you do want to give this story a go, then help me make it. I can't think of every detail.

EDIT 2: As for this probably being not very important, i have one name for you. Johnathan.

[Mr Frog]

@Xahnel:

I was working under the assumption that she was a distant relative... I'm guessing that you told me differently at some point and I flat-out failed to make the connection. It wouldn't be the first time that's happened.

I have several problems with the plot as you describe it... the part where he gets sent to the wrong place seems pretty contrived, and the idea of Mr Frog casually banging someone just 'cuz she's there strikes me as a bit disconcerting; I'd already figured him to be a bit of a swinger when he was younger, though, so I'm not sure how much of that response is knee-jerk. It does seem out of character for him; I've been writing him as pretty much completely-asexual at the point in time the story takes place in, so it's jarring to think of him in that light.

What I've been trying to do up to this point is help develop the idea to the point where it works for both of us, but if you're sick of it and just want a flat yes or no, then I'm going to have to say no at the moment. I may change my mind after I've warmed up to the idea, but it's just too weird for me right now and so many little things just don't seem right.

You seem uncharacteristically-frustrated; I'm sorry if I was being obstructive or condescending. I have a fairly-significant emotional investment in the subject at hand, so I may have gotten overly-possessive without realizing it.

E: Erm... who's Johnathan? Is he mentioned in your journal? I'm not caught up yet (I tend to read them all in bursts).

[Talvieno]

Shoot, you guys - five pages in one night that I don't really have time to read at the moment.   Noting that we're trying to figure out Parasol/Ballpoint, I'm going to post what I wrote down in a notebook last night for my own reference.

Parasol Corps:

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    Parasol's core focus is its departments of Research & Development. Their goal is to research and develop !!SCIENCE!! so that Parasol as a whole can uncover the greatest secrets of the interuniverse. Their secondary, much lesser focus is their mobile infantry, which they use to comb through alternate dimensions to uncover new areas of !!SCIENCE!!, and protect experiments already in progress. Though their weapons technology is behind that of Ballpoint's, due to Ballpoint's scavenging ways, they make up for it in combat by employing their seemingly non-destructive inventions in a clever, strategic manner that not only levels the playing field, but gives them an edge. When Parasol finds something marketable, they choose the proper universe/timeline/time/location and sell it, trading solely in interuniversally rare metals. Through this they earn their income and expand.

Ballpoint Tech:

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    Ballpoint Tech is a mercenary-style organization. Most members are called "contractors" and are given standard-issue gear at the time of their employment, though they may use whatever weapons/armor they desire. They are allowed to hire themselves out for their own profit while off-duty if they so wish, so long as it doesn't detract from the well-being of Ballpoint as a whole. While on-duty, the contractors are under the command of higher-ranking employees, and form a relatively large army. The organization uses divisions of this army to better itself and its equipment through blitzkrieg-style raids, looting technology and valuables as they go. On occasion they market their weaponry to neutrals and allies through the interdimensional black market, though they trade honorably take care not to make more enemies than necessary. Through this they earn their income and expand.

Just my thoughts on everything. I may have missed a page farther back where people decided unanimously on what everything was, and if so... whoops.

@Splint: Normally I'd be all for aerial technology (more for it than most things, I came close to being a pilot, and have semi-passable knowledge on flying helicopters), but both of them become undefeatable if Spearbreakers was ever to come out of its shell and attempt to combat the companies.

EDIT: As far as I see it,

Eris is an underground entity that operates covertly.

this sums Eris up perfectly, but I'd add that they accomplish their means through manipulation. Kind of like ninjas that like getting into your head and using you as a puppet to take down your own allies, and get you killed in the process - all without being noticed. In my opinion, that's freaky scary to have to go up against. I'd rather see my foe.

[Splint]

Hey, it's adapt or die as far as air power goes. If you can't build your own aircraft to fight the enemy's aircraft, you give the grunts the tools to fight back with (case in point, the moghopper transport the contractors used was pretty much forced to withdraw because of the weapons the ground bound IFVs from Eris had.)

As far as the dwarves from spearbreakers fighting these companies, all they'd need to do is get a hold of the weapons and make sure they're facing the right way to fight back against airpower. I never said anyone had things like jet fighters. It's more VTOL low altitude gunships and the like. Besides, what dwarf in thier right mind would trust anything that requires internal moving parts and suction? Only humans would make something that rediculous! (I like to imagine just making the engines for such a thing would result in many MANY worker getting killed, since this is DF. Hence why nobody wants to try it.)

[Draconik_Sankis]

I liked the write up of Parasol favoring !!Science!! and !!Science!! based weapons, will try and add that into my next bit of prolouge.  However just got done with a 14 hour shift, time for sleeping.

E: I am my own worse Grammar Nazi.

[Paintbrushturkey]

E: I am my own worse Grammar Nazi.

Or not.... LOL

[Xahnel]

Sorry about getting the name wrong, i was trying to point out what you did with Talvi's imaginary friend. Sorry i also got cranky. I'm waking up early for this thread, and it has an effect on late night me.

Now, i wasn't saying "yes or no, pick now". I was saying if you definitively did not want this story line, i'd drop it, but if you were still open to the idea, please help me develop it. I enjoy being detailed, but i like it more when i'm not the only one making story stuff. Half of the questions you asked were things i hadn't considered at all and had to scramble to come up with. I just would prefer it if you would help me make this as bulletproof as you like things to be, since you say you can still be sold on the idea.

EDIT: This might be the only plotpoint that's truly proofed against Mr Frog's bullets.

[Draconik_Sankis]

And Now time for more Prolouge.

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As Draconik made his way through the main courtyard of Lab Six his friends, coworkers and general others in the company who knew him gathered to bid him farewell, good luck and the other thousand and one ways of bidding someone goodbye as they went to preform a task that company standard laid solely at his feet.  His assistant, now replacement of head of Bio-Weapons division awaited him at the Gateway, the massive time-space rift that provided Parasol with undenible access to worlds such as the spawn invested hole he was about to embark to.  She was the bearer of bad news and everyone elses gifts, Draco the director just got news from our agents it seems that the business that has kept Mr Frog's attention seems to be a thrid party more details when you arrive but i've gathered extra supplies for you, don't ask and good luck. she said as she handed him the extra baggage of gifts and equipment.  He thanked her and strolled through the gateway.
  On the other side was the meadow where he would meet the mirgant wave that would take him to Spearbreakers, Draconik used this time to repack and take stock of what he had.

Draco's Belongings

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 One Personal Mobile Workstation [labtop], One Micro-BATTERY [Water Based Power Supply], Standard Parasol Research Equipment
Three full Chemistry Sets, 2 sets Surgical Gear, one modified Parasol plasma torch, Crystal Decaunter w/ Bio-Mass Anti-Growth agent, Personal Data Assistant and his Digital Artifical Life-form (DAL) assistant who had been with him for Twenty of his Fourty years in Parasol, as well as many schematics for more advanced Research equipment.

Now its time for another fourteen hour work day, ...joy.

[Xahnel]

No replies to a story post for three hours? For shame. It's good Sankis. About time we had DIRECT Parasol involvement.

[Aseaheru]

Stone INC is a oxymoron. it is a large company that trys to be nice, has advanced technology that makes NASA look like a bunch of cavemen, can fly by manipulating gravity and have very limited material. they are fort builders and defenders. most of there guff is in turrets or has almost no ammo. so attacking is a piece of shit and defending is okish. also, SPACE. they developed there own portal that that requires SPACE. so, if they do attack, expect blocks of ships flying from SPACE, landing troops with insanely powerful weapons(i.e. micro missiles aimed at obsidian hearts.) but they are relativity nice. just dont piss them off.


basically, dont mess or your DEAD.
ninjaed

[Hanslanda]

Contentless bump. :/ Maybe I'll do write up an update here in awhile.

[Xahnel]

I've noticed the low activity too... Splint, anything exciting happen that isn't top secret?