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[Keiseth]

*rolls around laughing*

Mangled face will never heal. This does great justice for all of us who recieved similar migrants.

[Red Jackard]

simple example

[ April 13, 2008: Message edited by: Red Jackard ]

[Metal Chao]

I think that guy needs to go to bed.
His eyes appear to be mangled.

[Akroma]

when I read "what are your professions" I was already dreading it would end in a 300 joke

thanks god it didn't

I give it a 8/10

9/10 if it included a noble

10/10 if the water was carp-infested

[Skyrage]

Razz - whatever you do, never EVER listen to what other people want in your comic.

[Fishersalwaysdie]

quote:Originally posted by Red Jackard:
<STRONG>Simple example:

  </STRONG>

Needs more suspense and gradation as seen in the original.

And yes, make moar Razz.

[McDoomhammer]

Nicely done.  I've seen far worse out there.  I do have a question, though in the spirit of constructive criticism- what actually happens to the unfortunate migrants?  I just see everything going blue...

[Red Jackard]

I liked the first panel most, really.

quote:Originally posted by Fishersalwaysdie:
<STRONG>Needs more suspense and gradation as seen in the original.</STRONG>

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Rule_of_three_(writing)

Comics are often better when "short and sweet". Look at valcon's, for example - perfect delivery.

[ April 11, 2008: Message edited by: Red Jackard ]

[McDoomhammer]

Oh, I get it now, they were thrown in the moat/ given indoor plumbing.

[ April 11, 2008: Message edited by: McDoomhammer ]

[Deon]

I must disagree with you, R.J.. Comics are different.
And this one is the best in the original shape. I don't want to miss the images you cut.
They say their names and professions, and step-by-step you become familiar with them, but BANG, they are dead...
The short one removes the tragedy {it's like removing the prelude and characters' histories from a thriller}, and it's good that the original one is not too long to be boring.
Thumbs up to Raz.

[ April 11, 2008: Message edited by: Deon ]

[thvaz]

Raz is just awesome.  

[Razzums]

Comic number 2 is almost done. It's a little shorter but I think its good.

Also I plan on making the first one with the migrants a series.

Edit: Number 2 done.

[ April 11, 2008: Message edited by: Razzums ]

[Tahin]

Awesomeness. Keep going.

[ricemastah]

Comic two is awesome!

[Heavy Flak]

Hahaha.  The teeny little "FPS: 2" absolutely cracked me up.  Very well done!