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[Zaerosz]

Posting an excerpt from my futurefic I've been considering writing. "Pen" is the main character of the fic, and Trixie's little brother. Things happened, stuff exploded, and now Pen has brain damage that cuts off conscious access to most of his magic, as well as making him somewhat emotionally volatile, and he blames Trixie for reasons you may be able to figure out from reading the story. Trixie moved to Ponyville about two years prior to this, but made a few visits in the preceding years, the first of which was to try and make up for her abysmal first impression. She currently works with Twilight on her magical research, as well as putting on the occasional magic show for the young ones.

Time difference: 12 years.

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“Aren't you going to give your big sister a hug, Pen?”

Pen scowled. “I'd prefer to keep my distance, thank you.”

“Oh, Pen, how cold!” Trixie stepped forward to embrace Pen anyway, but he retreated just as much. The blue mare pouted. “Is that any way to treat your family, little brother?”

“I suppose not, but I consider it a perfectly acceptable way to treat the pony who ruined my life,” Pen hissed, glaring coldly. Trixie almost visibly deflated.

“I suppose you still haven't found it in you to forgive me, then.” She seemed almost humble, but this flew right over the younger unicorn's head in his anger.

“FORGIVE YOU?! How could I forgive you? If you hadn't been so damn prideful I might still be able to do more than move a quill! Your overconfidence only cost you your reputation, and you've even managed to salvage that, despite all odds! It cost me my future!” He snorted derisively. “Oh, but of course the Great and Powerful Trixie can fix everything! The Great and Powerful Trixie can do ANYTHING she wants, right?”

Trixie looked to be on the verge of tears. “Please... Please, stop. That's all far behind me now. I'm not great, or powerful, or anything anymore. I'm just Trixie. I just... I want to fix my mistakes.”

“YOU CAN'T FIX EVERYTHING!” Pen's voice rose even louder. “YOU CAN'T FIX ME!”

Shaking in anger, the grey stallion galloped away in the direction of the Everfree. Trixie simply stared in shock at her fleeing brother, tears pouring down her face.

[Necro910]

I'm not worrying. They're getting better.

+1.


Oh, and Necro? That derail was hilarious.

Though of course I can't condone actions which are against the forum guidelines, as I don't want to deal with warnings/mutes myself am a law-abiding forumgoer.

Danke, danke.

Twas hilarious indeed. I shall name it... Tim

[Dsarker]

I think Tom is a much better name.

[TheBronzePickle]

Tom's already taken by Fniff's baby, though.

[Dsarker]

What about Tam, then? Tam is a good name, too.

[TheBronzePickle]

Tam should work. But we should let Necro decide.

[Dsarker]

Tam is actually a variant of Tom, it turns out. Huh.

[Fniff]

Sorry, Tam Black is the name of my psychotic post-nuclear 13 year old chainsmoking survivor. Taken already!

[Telgin]

It's not like the three subspecies couldn't interbreed. If they couldn't, pony society would probably be quite a bit more segregated.

Some official confirmation of this would be nice, though.  Rarity's parents go a long way toward that I suppose, but there's still a little wiggle room for wondering.  He could be a step father, for example.

I agree that pony society would probably be more segregated if they couldn't interbreed, but that is in a way what we see.  Canterlot is mostly unicorns, isn't it?  Cloudesdale is obvious.

The overwhelming evidence so far is that the three types of ponies either can't or don't interbreed.  Rarity's parents are the sole exception so far.  I wonder how it would work anyway... can you get any of the 3 types out of any combination, or can you only be what your parents were?

Obviously this would be a terrible way to explain alicorns, but I'm still waiting on that one.

[MC Dirty]

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I'm always a bit cautious with judging fan fictions because I haven't read a lot of them, but from that short part, it could potentially be very good. This is probably an incredibly useless comment, but I'd definitely read your fanfic.

[Flying Dice]

It's not like the three subspecies couldn't interbreed. If they couldn't, pony society would probably be quite a bit more segregated.

Some official confirmation of this would be nice, though.  Rarity's parents go a long way toward that I suppose, but there's still a little wiggle room for wondering.  He could be a step father, for example.

I agree that pony society would probably be more segregated if they couldn't interbreed, but that is in a way what we see.  Canterlot is mostly unicorns, isn't it?  Cloudesdale is obvious.

The overwhelming evidence so far is that the three types of ponies either can't or don't interbreed.  Rarity's parents are the sole exception so far.  I wonder how it would work anyway... can you get any of the 3 types out of any combination, or can you only be what your parents were?

Obviously this would be a terrible way to explain alicorns, but I'm still waiting on that one.

Dinky. Regardless of whether their relationship as mother-daughter is canon, they have identical color schemes. The way I interpreted it is that interbreeding has a random result of one of the two, and that the reason we haven't seen more interracial pairings is because by and large the three communities we've seen are largely divided based on purpose (Canterlot: capital, center of magic, ergo unicorns; Cloudsdale: in the sky, made of clouds, weather production, ergo pegasi; Ponyville: agricultural village with a few shops/traders, ergo mostly earth ponies with a smattering of unicorns and pegasi in occupations that are easier for them (librarian, craftspony, mailmare, weather control, etc.)), all of which would for the most part keep them seperate without any active or forced segregation.

[Zaerosz]

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I'm always a bit cautious with judging fan fictions because I haven't read a lot of them, but from that short part, it could potentially be very good. This is probably an incredibly useless comment, but I'd definitely read your fanfic.

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thank you
i am just
SO self-conscious when it comes to my writing
i can do dialogue but i'm not good at wordy-descriptive-filler-fluff-stuff which makes just plain writing an absolute nightmare for me hahaha nightmare PONY PUNS WHAT THE HELL AM I DOING i think i need sleep.

[Telgin]

Dinky. Regardless of whether their relationship as mother-daughter is canon, they have identical color schemes.

I wish they would confirm their relationship.  Heck, I'd appreciate a strong parent-child relationship in the show (even if Derpy is a background pony).  They've taken a few other things from the fandom, so I don't see the harm in it.

The rest makes sense, and I suppose the locations we've seen and heard of are polarized by function.  I would like to see more interspecies (well, I'm not sure that's the proper term here, maybe even not subspecies) relationships, but in the end I guess it's just not important enough for the writers to waste time on this sort of thing.  And you have to handle it carefully, otherwise you can end up with (hopefully unintentional) parallels with real life you don't want.

[TheBronzePickle]

Like inter-subspecies (right term unless they can't breed, which would make them separate species) racism? I think that the crew could pull off a good educational about how stuff like that would be a problem without pissing anybody off but the racial supremacists, and they're unimportant.

[Dsarker]

Hey! I'm a race-based supremacist! How dare they make a show which favourably compares greyhound racing to horse racing!