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« Reply #15 on: July 19, 2011, 10:40:10 pm »

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« Reply #16 on: July 20, 2011, 01:12:16 am »

bump! NEVER LET THIS LEAVE THE FIRST PAGE! EVER!

Sorry, I'll write another chapter tonight.
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« Reply #17 on: July 20, 2011, 01:58:07 pm »

Tonights tale of Solon! Hope you guys enjoy a bit of thinking and political subterfuge.
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« Reply #18 on: July 20, 2011, 01:58:33 pm »

Chapter Three
Plans

Solon moved with the group. The two in front carried poorly constructed iron swords; the leader, armed with a halberd. All in all, they were a sorry bunch of wanderers. The leader of the group was the only one clad in armor. A single, muddy copper pauldron with a short metal protrusion with a hook, from this a lamp hung freely, providing but a little light to the group. As the three moved, one of the swordsdwarfs continued to reel of a piece of rope, counting off every one hundred feet. At the end of that hundred feet, they would drive a pin into the earth, tie off and unreel another length of rope. Calculating how far out they were from the .

Solon looked into the distance for the hole in the ceiling of the caverns. All he could see was the murky darkness. Grunting in the distance alarmed only him. The leader looked back and spoke to him.
“Tis’ only the trogs’, they’re not much hassle on their own, good source of food too. But if you get them in a pack, it’s a decent scrap. Just keep close and keep moving. You’ll be alright.”
Solon nodded and kept following. The casts around his arms made forced him to doubt his fighting capacity. His arms were broken and they would take time to heal.

The silence of the caverns was broken only by scratching and the sequential numbering made by the rope-dwarf. Solon chose to broke it with a probing question.
“So how would one get to the surface?”
The group paused and looked at him, their faces filled with worry. The leader spoke up again.
“There’s a hole in the ceiling. I bet that’s how you got in. Aside from that, not many other ways as I know it.”
“And how did you get down from the hole?”
“Rope. What are you thinking?”
“Nothing.”
“Well you keep thinking nothing more of it. One man goes missing and the rest of us get it in the neck. That clear?”
“Mmmm, perfectly.”
They kept moving in the darkness. Pegging a distance further and further. Finally, after two thousand feet they stopped. The leader looked around and motioned for Solon and the others to gather by him.
“We’ll set to work here. Make a loop around the peg and we’ll measure the distance to the columns.”
He turned to Solon and pointed.
”You, I need the backpack.”
Solon nodded and the golden light and removed the backpack with a little difficulty. He passed it to the leader.
“You never told me your name.”
“Never fully intended to, what’s the point? You get killed and it won’t help you...”
“Than what do you want me to call you?”
“To be honest? Couldn’t care less.”
“Halberd?”
“Whatever.”

Halberd directed the others to walk, Solon decided to sit and watch. He could still take control, but he would need help, he would need people like Halberd and the others. They weren’t strong enough or well equipped to try a direct action but maybe he could get somebody to the surface? There he could get help, bring in the Queen’s military. Solon scratched and was distantly aware of Halberd yelling orders. He’d need evidence that the place was worth saving. He considered getting some adamantine wafers from the mine, but quickly dismissed it. They’d measure and weigh those. He then remembered his sword dug into the tunnel wall, it’d be perfect, plus it would be good to ensure the survival of anyone running.

He kept thinking as the dwarfs came back and went out again. Once the guard got here, then what? The Queen would put somebody of her choice in charge. Solon could see the flaw already, somebody sane would be difficult to over through. He needed a method of ensuring that he would be put in charge.

Solon watched on as the men moved back out, he scratched the back of his neck, the plump helmet rubbing against his arm. He thought about it as his stomach rumbled. He thought it’d be best to keep it with him for now, lest the other see it. A thought occurred to him, if he could procure some of the stashed food, he could use it as leverage to gain support from those without “vision”.

Halberd had set up a collapsible table, setting up the lamp and papers. He scratched away, doing the mathematics on how far each pillar was from the centre point and then from each other. A rough map from a single point, a full day’s effort.

Solon considered how he would get to eliminate Bal. It’d need to be swift and clear, a failure would likely cost many of the lives of those without “vision” and therefore support. He considered who would rightfully take over. He realized that he hadn’t seen a second in command anywhere. He thought it odd.

“Hey Halberd!”
Halberd turned and looked irritated by this interruption. He placed his pen calmly next to the ink and crossed his arms.
“Who’s second in command?”
“Of the squad?”
“No, of the fort. Who takes over if Bal dies?”
“Whadd’ya mean?”
“Well, if the Queen dies, the general of the Old Guard takes over. Doesn’t he?”
“If that general is like the commander, I wouldn’t want him to.”
“No, I don’t think you get it. Who takes control from him?”
“The General? I dunno, I didn’t even know about the General ‘till you mentioned him just then.”
Solon grew annoyed. He closed his eyes and breathed out slowly.
“Look, if Bal died. Who would tell you guys what to do?”
“Bal doesn’t tell us what to do. The commander tells us what to do and the Surgeon tells the medics what to do and the Head Miner tells the miners what to do. I figure you can guess from there who tells the butchers what to do.”
“So there is no-one specific to take command?”
Halberd scratched his head and thought over the problem.
“Guess not.”
Solon smiled, he got the answer he was seeking… eventually.
“Cheers.”
Halberd raised his eyebrows.
“So can I get back to work?”
Solon waved him on.
“Go for it.”

Solon considered this, if anything there would be infighting. No one dwarf would take control, maybe he could wait until the army arrived? Solon shook his head. It wouldn’t do. They would still put somebody in charge. He mulled this over. As he was doing so, a clatter as one of the dwarfs slipped on a stone into a pool below. He screamed for help. Solon stood, careful of his casts. He moved quickly over the earth toward the cries for help, he and the other two were too late. A single, bloody corpse was floating. Several large chunks of chewed flesh floated with him.

Halberd stood and watched the bobbing pieces. He sighed and turned to the other dwarf and held out his own halberd.
“Fish him out, we’ll need proof he didn’t run.”
The other dwarf nodded silently, pulling the various pieces of corpse up out of the pool. Solon came to the conclusion that this was going to be tough.

As the parts were fished out, Halberd began to pack up the maps, ink and pens. He shoved them quickly into the backpack and flipped the table over, folding two of the legs and piling the chunks of the corpse on the underside. He motioned for Solon to grab the backpack and for the other dwarf to pull the improvised sled.
They moved back, following the line of the rope. Solon needed a plan. He needed it soon. He watched as the light bobbed and weaved with each of Halberds footsteps. The light glinting of the pauldron. He realized, he could help the surgeon to take the throne. Without any miners or soldiers to support him, he would be easy to take down. Then with military support he would retake the fort above and mine out the adamantine. Then receive a title, so on and so forth. Simple.

As they approached the gates, soldiers above began pointing and shouting for search crews. Halberd picked up a chunk of gut and pointed at it with a plain face and a single finger. Immediately the search crews were called off. Solon found that disturbing, the value of life was worth nothing. As they entered the gate, a manager moved quickly and quietly to point the corpse towards the surgery as he scratched down that the group had returned with one death. Solon saw an opportunity and grabbed the makeshift sled, the other dwarf didn’t question it. In the light of the fires, Solon noticed for the first tie that his face was bloated beyond distinction. Eye melded into nose melded into mouth.

Solon dragged the sled through the streets. One of the butchers nudged the other and pointed at the corpse. The other nodded and began sharpening a cleaver. His corpulent body covered with his sweat and someone else’s blood. Solon approached the grand white building, its doors were closed and barred, guards were posted on all but a small side door. He entered, a familiar sight met him, the surgery. The surgeon was sitting on a chair watching a patient on a table. As Solon pulled in the corpse the Surgeon turned and watched him in silence. Solon stopped in the center of the long room and waited for a reaction.

“Was there anything else?”
Solon thought quickly, he needed to make the most of this.
“Aren’t you interested in how my arms are going?”
“Two broken arms, one left side compound fracture, the other was a plain and simple in-line break. After setting, sewing and applying plaster, there were no further actions to be taken other than cleaning some of your minor cuts and bruises. Your very lucky, with a surgeon as brilliant as myself, you can drag a sled with an entire corpse in here by yourself with two broken arms. Let’s see you find one better.”
“Of course, it’s remarkable. But surely you would have had nurses help?”
“Do you mean the attendants? No, they pass me things and soon-to-be-corpses that need healing. I wouldn’t bother teaching them if I had to. I'm more than enough to cater for a fortress this size.”
“Oh yes, but somebody has to provide them with leadership.”
“Are you deaf? Did that fall render you retarded? I don’t lead, I work by myself with people simply assisting.”
“So you wouldn’t take command if Bal left? I thought you were one of vision.”
The surgeon tipped his head and looked disgusted at the thought. He remained calm and quiet throughout his tirade.
“One of vision? You have to be kidding me. All you need to be to be one of vision, is willing enough to kiss his arse, even then I get away with avoiding that. No, the reason I exist here, the reason I eat well and the reason I am, as you so crudely put it, one of vision. Is that I am clever, and the best damned surgeon in the empire. The reason I’m here and not back at the mountainhome? Because they wouldn’t amend the possibilities for change to their precious medical textbooks they fail to research properly. Yet does it change anything? No! Here I am, stuck in a mire of stupidity that is the dwarven medical system as those who surround me bundle even the most basic of medicine by being complete idiots. They have no concept of triage, no ideas on the concepts of cauterization. They sit in the mud and the shit, wondering where the infections come from. I left, I left to work on the many corpses and ply my trade as much as possible. And can you find me a better place than this? No, no you can’t. I wouldn’t expect you to so much as be able to read, than to point out another location on a map. So why would I want to take charge? As it is, I get what I ask for, nobody questions me and I get to participate in the research I want. So you can take you take you vision crap and stuff it. Now, get out. I have a dwarf that’s been stuck by a giant cave spider and I’m trying to catalog the symptoms.”
Solon turned quickly and left.

As he walked toward the gates, he considered this failure to be an issue. Without the surgeon taking charge he would have an problem in taking out whoever took the throne. As he walked he pondered this concept. Well aware that he may be stuck for some time.
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« Reply #19 on: July 23, 2011, 10:36:56 pm »

FANTASTIC!!!!!! I haven't lost interest, you know!  ;D
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« Reply #20 on: July 24, 2011, 08:13:36 pm »

I'm glad. I'm in Canberra at the moment though, so no new stories until I get home I'm afraid.
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« Reply #21 on: July 24, 2011, 09:53:41 pm »

no problem!
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« Reply #22 on: July 26, 2011, 09:10:46 am »

CryptIron
Events Elsewhere
Chapter 3.1

The Queen lazed on the great throne, distant and cold to the world. In her hand she held a vial of golden salve. Its catatonic effect taking hold and twisting her perception, to her the situation seemed normal and perfectly fine. The mob outside the grand doors were merely a distraction, the fact that they had taken shelter in the great church of Armok was a trivial point. Her citadel guard had abandoned her in the night; the old guard was all that were left between her and the lynch mob.

The long basilica ended in a distinct point. The upper wings on both the left and the right sides were filled with the Guards finest marksdwarfs. They were equipped in elegant black pea-coats, gold piping marking their rank and position. The standard armament for the rank and file was the boar crossbow. Made of oak with brass strapping and deer sinew, it had the distinction of being hopper fed and having both arms of the bow pointed down and back, utilizing a sophisticated gear system to shift the mechanical force back and through the body. This resulted in a compact but efficient design, almost on par with contemporary crossbows, the advantage being that its small size permitted use within buildings.

The old guard were the scalpel to the legions hammer. Utilizing a system of refined and precise brutality and a lack of concern for anything but the objective at hand, they made their presence known in most of the outposts, earmarking the best and most valuable goods to be sent back to the mountainhome. They were feared and envied, their autonomy had gone unchallenged for too long.

An old man moved forward, out of the shadow that the great statue of Armok cast. His pale white face had been worn by decades of fighting and planning. He had led countless battles, his taste for precision made him invaluable during the Elven uprising. He walked up to the Queen and watched silently as she applied more of the drug to her wrists and neck. She looked at him distantly, the clatter of furniture being shifted infront of the door in an attempt to consolidate their final fall back position had seemingly gone un-noticed by both her and the General. She spoke slowly, the golden salve forcing her to draw out her speech into a garbled, half thought mess. At one time she was charismatic and charming.
“The people? They want me? Why?”
“They wish to remove you, they claim that your poor handling of the Goblin invasion has led to this failure of the economy and furthermore, that your attempts to push the blame onto others is disgusting and horrific. They want you off the throne, either that or proof that you are still a competent leader.”
She paused for a moment, her breathe heavy.
“I see.” “what would I do in your position?”
“If I understood you correctly, I would make a show that the crown is merely a fickle entity and that you deserve to rule by blood, if you chose to make a contingency plan should your fair rule fail. A show of confidence by yourself and those around you.”
“Oh?”
“Yes, I’ve had my scribes throw together a small document stating that entire concept. We require only your signature. From there, should the Old Guard see you as unfit to rule, we would merely remove you and sort things out.”
The Queen smiled a gentle smile. It soon flowed into a mass of laughter as she realized the plan would keep her on the throne with those who are loyal guarding her. She was delighted and grasped at the air to sign something, anything, to this effect.
“My dear General, I believe you are the sweetest, kindest soul that could ever exist.”
“Indeed, now if you would kindly sign the document…”
He waved a feather quill in front of her, she grasped and signed the first piece of paper she could get her hands on. The General smiled and waved one of his lieutenants closer, he signed as a witness and quickly cleared the halls of the Old Guard. The Queen watched dreamily as soldiers bobbed out of her perception.
“What’s going on, sweetie?”
The General stood and cleared his throat. He read from the treaty, fresh with black ink.
“I, the formal representative of the Old Guard, hereby remove you, the Empress of all fourteen lands of the Fourth Great Dwarven Empire, Queen, Baroness and Duchess of twenty-eight further lands and caverns, representative of Armok and leader of the people, from control of the empire in full.”
The doors groaned as the crowd heaved against it, the last of the Old Guard soldiers filed out of the basilica and into the various secure locations. The Queen quickly sat up, watching with silent abjection at the act of betrayel from her beloved General.
“This removal is based on the grounds of an utter and puerile failure to maintain even the most basic system of dwarven society and thus failure to rule as Queen, Duchess, Empress of the Dwarven Empire. I, the representative of the Old Guard, will, with permission by the Queen, be taking control of this failed state. It is my duty in this respect to discharge all duties in regard to this role and to remove all trace of the former rule. Furthermore, it is my first duty to remove the former, failed ruler, from the positions she has been appointed too.”
The Queen spluttered and fell out of her throne, she groveled and whined, finally to be kicked away and down the short flight of stairs to the common floor. The General turned quickly and marched out of the room. The doors gave one final moan before crashing open and spilling hundreds of the mob through. They set upon her with rope, clubs and fire, dragging her away and lynching her from the great spire.

The General strolled away from this ruckus, turning calmly and chatting to his lieutenant as if talking about the weather.
“Would you kindly relieve her commanders from the positions they hold? I wish for them to be replaced by my own. Quite quickly too. If any resist, eliminate them.”
“Of course sir, is there anything else?”
“Yes, prepare the soldiers. For far too long I have watched her pass the time indiscriminately. Frittering  away the glory of the empire. Allowing the outposts to remain autonomous. It’s I’ve been able to do to maintain some level of control of them. Indeed, the only reason she remained in power for so long was due to her lax rules. No she is gone and I can reign in this vast empire, bring it back to the glory it deserves. Don’t you agree?”
“Oh yes, I can relieve the generals now and have the soldiers prepared by morning.”
“Excellent. Also, bring up a case sunshine. Preferably the 812, I found the 814 to be a bit bland.”
“Yes sir.”

The General returned to his rooms, the large opulent lounge was clean and clutter free. Tapestries depicting the glory days of the empire hung from the walls, in the hearth a fire burned with a ferocity and heat that the General couldn’t bear to stand by it for more than a few moments at a time. Bookshelves were filled with books about tactics, chemistry, history and other scientific studies. The General wandered back and forth, in one hand was a book about the history of medicine, the other; a small, crystal glass of sunshine. He paused as footsteps approached the door. His creased face crumpled in a look of mild annoyance and he closed and placed the book on the small side table. He walked over and opened the door, it was the lieutenant, breathless, spattered with blood and dirt, holding a single tattered message.
“It’s the citizens, they’re rioting.”
“Well of course, the Queen is dead and there has been no official word on who is taking over.”
“Would you like me to organize the military to put down the insurrection.”
“Oh no, I want you to go out there and make a speech.”
The lieutenant looked surprised and shocked. He paused and with a questioning look ensured that his message was carried across.
“Don’t worry. I have written the speech, just read what is there.”
He paused and waited for the situation to sink into the mind of the lieutenant before finishing.
“Is there an issue my lord?”
The lieutenant stammered for a moment as the general replaced the message In his hand for a long sheet of velum. On it, in a very precise cursive writing was the speech that declared the lieutenant as lord, master and emperor of the empire.
“But I can’t. I have no blood relations to the Queen. I don’t have any authority!”
“On the contrary, by the treaty signed in the church. The Old Guard has the full authority to take whatever steps are required to ensure the security of the empire. As the head of the old guard I have the authority to place you as a lord and master of the entire lot.”
The General smiled, in a single day he had taken power and ensured that, should the gears of war foul up, he was not to be blamed.

The lieutenant wandered out of the Generals quarters dazed and confused. As he left he composed himself. The General returned to his drink and his book, secure in the knowledge that over the coming months, his campaign to return to order the various colonies would be an easy warm up to the task of defeating the goblin hordes of the East and spreading into the Elven forests in the South.
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« Reply #23 on: July 26, 2011, 11:56:16 am »

Yes!!
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« Reply #24 on: July 26, 2011, 03:01:59 pm »

keep up the good work! I now say without a shadow of a doubt, that this deserves to be in the hall of legends!
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« Reply #25 on: July 26, 2011, 03:12:48 pm »

I'm pleased. It's the first story that I've shown to an audience, to have it blessed with the honor of being in the bloody halls next to boatmurdered would be magnificent :P
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« Reply #26 on: July 26, 2011, 10:54:22 pm »

N3D CH4PT3R F0UR!!
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« Reply #27 on: July 28, 2011, 06:28:07 am »

CRYPTIRON IS NOMINATED! COME ON! LET'S VOTE FOR IT!
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« Reply #28 on: July 28, 2011, 08:46:10 pm »

CRYPTIRON IS NOMINATED! COME ON! LET'S VOTE FOR IT!

Naw, sweet. Thanks guys :)
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« Reply #29 on: July 28, 2011, 10:04:12 pm »

no problem!
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