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Author Topic: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)  (Read 3622 times)

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Re: Endless Sand (4 / 6 Players)
« Reply #15 on: May 12, 2011, 05:38:43 pm »

It dosn't look like anyone else will be joining at the moment..
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Re: Endless Sand (4 / 6 Players)
« Reply #16 on: May 12, 2011, 05:40:21 pm »

If no one joins by tommrow, then I will start the game.
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Re: Endless Sand (4 / 6 Players)
« Reply #17 on: May 12, 2011, 08:41:08 pm »

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AndbytomorrowImeanrightnow.

Chapter One: Those who do not have a Home...

The silence is broken by one man. From what the others can tell, hes one of the only people without something covering his head.
"Is this it? Or are you all mute or sumthin?"
He is answered by the person sitting directly in front of him. He wears an unusually dark red headscarf.
"Were not talking because their's no reason to talk. Outsider."
The other person replies,
"But do you need a reason to talk or sumthin? My names Jeff! Whats yours?"
"Nothing of your concern, ass-"
A female voice comes from the other side of the room.
"Dorian!"
The man apparently named 'Dorian' replies,
"Oh come on! Your not my mother, Rajiya!"
"Do I av' a say in this?" Jeff says to hopefully end the arguing.
"NO!"
Dorian and Rajiya reply in unison.

Suddenly, a man stands up and says,
"Shut it down. Now."
"Your not my boss, Kal-" Dorian begins to say. The surpirsingly tall figure then rushs over to him and grabs him by the coat, lifting him up a little bit too.
"I said, Shut. It. Down. Now."
"Y-yes Kaleh." Dorian says, clearly nervous.
The man named Kaleh drops him, and returns to his seat. Dorian mumbles a few complaints and sits back down. After Kaleh takes his seat again, the man next to him whispers into his ear,
"Did you need to be so hard on him? I mean, Dorian and Rajiya are always getting into fights."
"Need to stop them before they get any worse, John. We can't have fights on duty."
"But Kaleh..."
"I do not need to get into a fight with you either. Stop the conversation."

After a little while, Jeff says,
"Anyone wanna to hear a story?"
Dorian looks like he was about to make a snarkish comment, but backs out after the glaze given by Kaleh. Rajiya also seems to not care about any stories. However, a last person, a female wearing what seems like a leather helmet with goggles attached and a cloth covering her mouth, shows interest by walking over.
"Ah, so sumone finally appreciates one o' my mighty fine stories! Whats yer name?"
The girl (As see seems a bit too young to be called a woman) does not reply, but instead shifts her head to the side.
"Can't you speak?"
Rajiya replies to Jeff's question with a very blunt, "Shes mute. And her name is Alya."
"Mute? Knew at least' one of ya couldn't speak!"
Alya shows what seems to be a chuckle, but makes no sound.
"Ok, guess that's better then nuthin'! Let me start, once, I was alone in a..."
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...
A lot of time had passed by. Jeff was just finishing up his story when a loud voice come from above.
"Brothers Kaleh and Dorian, come up here."
"Yes Brother Jehoash." Kaleh says in a clam tone, "Come on Dorian."
Both Kaleh and Dorian climb the ladder to the top of the room. Once on top, they look to the west and see an expansive desert. To the east, a large group of refugees and Nomads ride to the North. Some of them are in gaint cars, others on gaint reptilian Bergro, being escorted by tanks and and gaint vehicle similar to the one they are riding in. Jehoash hands Dorian and Kaleh an TL-12 (Closest RL Comparison: AK-47) rifle and tells them both,
"We may have raiders. Keep an eye on the skyline for anything suspicious, Brothers."
...
After a hour of watch duty, both Dorian and Kaleh were ready to call it a day, when Kaleh spots something.
"I think I have something Brothers!"
Both Dorian and Jehoash run over to Kaleh, where he was aiming at something in the skyline.
"Damn it, I think we were right about the raiders! Get everyone on full alert!" Jehoash yelled.
Most of the soldiers were ready or getting ready when the frist shots were heard. Jehoash runs over to the people inside the vehicle, where Jeff, John, Alya, and Rajiya were all clearly startled by the gunfire.
"Get your weapons and get ready! Were under attack!"
All of them got their own TL's and were already scrambling to get up the ladders when their car came under heavy fire.

What do you all do?
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« Last Edit: May 12, 2011, 08:56:09 pm by Johnfalcon99977 »
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Re: Endless Sand (4 / 6 Players)
« Reply #18 on: May 12, 2011, 08:46:49 pm »

Get to a high location but with some cover, where I can put my rifle to use.
Make a bet with one of the others,of how many headshots I can get. (This part only if I can use my own rifle, if so then discard the TL-12 in favor of my own.
As for the strange name.. No idea, if you explained the setting abit more, I could have changed it. My parents were.. jerks?  :P )
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #19 on: May 12, 2011, 08:58:27 pm »

(( Oh no, Your name is pretty normal for that world too. ))
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #20 on: May 12, 2011, 08:58:58 pm »

(( Oh no, Your name is pretty normal for that world too. ))

((ok, so I can still use my own rifle (the one in my description), or do I even have it?
I feel I should perhaps describe the rifle, tough I know very little about firearms in real life.))
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #21 on: May 12, 2011, 09:03:28 pm »

Ask someone for a gun. Remark about how back in the wasteland you could hit one of those smallish plants that seemed to grow everywhere, but were good for nuthin' 30 paces away with a rifle. When some one gives you one, fine a window to shoot out of, and open fire on the raiders. Remark about how things would be different back on the wasteland. Hit some raiders, but miss enough so that people begin to doubt my story.
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #22 on: May 12, 2011, 09:36:23 pm »

Ask someone for a gun. Remark about how back in the wasteland [\b]
About that.
You ARE in the wasteland. The wasteland is the expansive desert that takes up almost all of the world.

Also, Ultmuh?  You said that your characters parents were jerks? Funny story, given one of the traits I gave your character.  Don't worry, it gets better.
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #23 on: May 12, 2011, 09:38:44 pm »

Also, Ultmuh?  You said that your characters parents were jerks? Funny story, given one of the traits I gave your character.  Don't worry, it gets better.

((Heh, fine by me. :)
I like the dialogue so far.

The Original name could be Durr Ian (as an insult and/or played for abuse), but were developed/derived into Dorian. How is that for alittle backstory?  :P))
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #24 on: May 12, 2011, 09:45:18 pm »

Fine with that.

Writting quaility should also improve over time.
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #25 on: May 12, 2011, 09:47:05 pm »

I'll spot targets and take a few shots!
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #26 on: May 12, 2011, 09:49:07 pm »

((Also, he absolutely detests his old name.
So whenever someone says the word Durr or the name Ian, he will give a sharp glare in that direction
And woe to anyone who puts those two words in the same sentence.
But he fully embraces his nickname, Longshot, for it is as far away from that name as possible.


Sorry about that, got alittle carried away.  :P))
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #27 on: May 13, 2011, 02:39:03 pm »

Just ggamer needs to post his actions and I can get the next update started.

Also, I have retcon'ed a few things about your characters. Nothing paticually major, just a few things. Like making Dorian's apparent Porn Stache a stubble, and bumbing McMillan's age down five years.
Won't effect anything in particular. Its mainly just so I don't fell strange and uncomfortable about some future plot points I have planned. Not going to spoil anything.
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #28 on: May 13, 2011, 03:44:39 pm »

Just ggamer needs to post his actions and I can get the next update started.

Also, I have retcon'ed a few things about your characters. Nothing paticually major, just a few things. Like making Dorian's apparent Porn Stache a stubble, and bumbing McMillan's age down five years.
Won't effect anything in particular. Its mainly just so I don't fell strange and uncomfortable about some future plot points I have planned. Not going to spoil anything.

Sure, fine by me.
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Re: Endless Sand (Chapter One, Part One)
« Reply #29 on: May 13, 2011, 04:40:41 pm »

Okay, in that case say how it would be in the part of the Wasteland I am from.

((Can I have a reason for being kicked out of the Wastelander society? I think it is a good one.))
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