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Criptfeind

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Re: Descent
« Reply #15 on: April 11, 2011, 04:35:02 pm »

Also, if we go that way he will be complaining the whole time about 'facts' and 'how things work for real' until he rage quits.
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Re: Descent
« Reply #16 on: April 11, 2011, 04:35:39 pm »

(Hard sci-fi? In that case, don't start with the least practical design you could come up with.)


Your head hurts. That's all you can think for the first few hours it seems. Actually, so does the rest of your body, to some degree. If it wasn't for this headache you would've noticed the people around you, looking at you with their dull gray eyes.


As you manage to piece enough of your mind together, you realize their eyes aren't the only thing creeping you out. The people staring at you are thin, almost translucent. They make no sound or moves, they just stare at you. A quick look at the surrounding reveals a constant fog and damp, mossy fields populated by shades.


You try to call out, but realize you don't know how to speak. As a mater of fact, you don't even know what you are. A quick glance reveals a feminine body, clad in leather armor, a short spear stuck in the ground just besides you, and an oaken bow hung around your shoulders. Besides this all, just one thought remains, a name. Achilles. The mere thought of this name causes a sting in your chest and a feeling of rage. The only things preventing you from attacking one of the shades around you is the realization that it would be futile and the fact that your head hurts.


You did fall, but where?

(also, bonus points for who catches the reference in here)
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Re: Descent
« Reply #17 on: April 11, 2011, 04:49:24 pm »

Yeah, I agree. Setting the plot a little too hard.

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« Reply #18 on: April 11, 2011, 05:44:49 pm »

You are a man, with eyes which burn like fire, with fair skin and blue hair.

Above, you see a maelstrom, raging for as far as the eye can see. No light passes through it, other than a small patch, directly above you, which quickly closes. Around you is a smoldering crater, burned and blackened. Beyond it is a verdant forest. You hear the sounds of panicked creatures and the burning of a few bushes.

You fell from the sky, and you remember that you were, before you fell, in another form, similar to your current one, with leathery wings and an endless well of power, and eyes whose pupils are slits.

((Anyone get the reference?))
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Re: Descent
« Reply #19 on: April 11, 2011, 06:15:19 pm »

Why are you people mean to me? :(

Also, you're taking my suggestion way to literally. It's supposed to be poetic and most of it is metaphor.
The idea is based of a short story by Vernor Vinge called Long Shot.
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Re: Descent
« Reply #20 on: April 11, 2011, 07:09:39 pm »

"This one is flawed," echoes words from outside the crater, the voice that speaks them one that you know deep down you should recognise, yet despite how familiar it is, how it rings in your mind with authority, you cannot place name nor face to it. The voice, one you know to be masculine continues, cold and unattached, "Leave it where it fell."

With that, the sound of feet, followed by fluttering fading into the distance tells you of the departure of those that had come to find you, telling you that those that knew you have merely discarded you. You feel nausea, the fact that you have been discarded, left to die alone causing fear to grip you. Your eyes come to focus on the outstretched arm before you, focused on the pale skin that sheathes it, on the red substance that leaks from beneath it.

You are damaged, injured.

You were not unscathed by the fall.

Your attire, attire that you barely remember being garbed in during your fall is for the most part gone, burned away and destroyed by the fall, though enough of it remains to keep you covered. Enough at least to prevent a sensation of shame, a sensation that you are aware would follow, should your slender form have been indecent. You are slender, with the curious red substance that leaks from beneath your skin mixing with the soil that you fell against plastered to your skin.

You ache all over, yet you know that you should be in a worse state than this, that the fall should have killed you. Your one hand moves to your head, to brush your hair aside out of habit, prompting you to pause as you feel that what you expected to find is absent. You had hair, you are certain of this fact, yet there is none there now.

Habit.

You had a habit of brushing your hair aside before you set yourself to whatever task was at hand, you know this thought to be true, though you do not know how.

Slowly, you drag yourself from the crater, both of your legs drawn uselessly behind you, the dull pain from them telling you that they're broken. Dull pain, that you knew should have been many times more intense than it was. None of this made sense to you, the fact that you had been born fully formed in the skies above a planet, the fact that you had fallen so far and survived, the fact that you had been left to die by those that knew you.

Left, as if you were nothing, expendable.

It takes you what feels like forever to pull yourself from the crater, with every passing moment having you feel weaker. As you feel the cool air against your exposed back, the sensation of fluid running, cooling against it. Two points on your back ache, two points that you can feel even now, flutter helplessly, reduced to little more than stumps.

The sun greets you as you reach the lip of the crater, sunlight bathing you, washing over you with warmth that even now fills you with delight, before you slump forward, helpless as you collapse half of your body still dangling in the crater below.

The sight before you burned into your mind as thought fades is the lush green land before you, the mountains, the hills, the forest, the river and the sun.

That beautiful sun, that you have never seen anything like before.

When you awaken once more, awaken to this strange new world, awaken from injuries that you know should have spelled your end, the sun is behind you, sinking behind the horizon. Two moons hang in the sky above you, stars steadily fading into view as the light from that brilliant sun fades.

The pain that you felt has faded somewhat, replaced now by a near constant, yet dull ache, though as your eyes focus once more on the world before you, you become aware of the fact that you are not alone.

"The elder was right, angels rained from the skies!" comes one voice, a voice that is excitable and young. The term, angel, familiar as it feels, it does not feel correct in relation to you.

"His... Her.... Their wings are missing and the attire they wear is strange." comes another voice, this one nasal.

"It... It is looking at us," stammers the first voice, "Those eyes, we should not linger, that super-natural green..."

"No, they are hurt, it would be wrong of us to leave them here." comes a third voice, this one gruff, yet seemingly warm.

These people, these strange people that stand before you, these wingless beings that you would have found laughable at any other time speak with words that you understand, yet somehow you feel threatened by them. Somehow, these harmless looking beings fill you with fear.

"I... I..." you start, your voice hoarse, yet decidedly femanine, a voice that has these figures pause, the largest of them moving before you, kneeling as it brings itself close. The figure leans down, close to you as it brings a face pitted with age close to you, a face weathered by the seasons, a face in what you see wisdom and compassion.

"What is it, angel?" comes that gruff yet warm voice "We shall not harm you, do not be nervous."

"We need to get back, before the skies change," hisses the first voice "Leave it, if we're caught out when they change, you know what shall happen!"


You were nervous. You were afraid of these people, harmless as they appeared. Their attire was simple yet strange, loose fitting cloth, concealing no doubt any number of weapons.
Deep down, something screamed at you, telling you that this was the enemy, that these people were not to be trusted, that your only chance to survive was to do so alone.
You were not like them, they knew this. You were not like them, and so you feared them.
What were you to say, to do?

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Re: Descent
« Reply #21 on: April 11, 2011, 07:14:38 pm »

Screw instinct. They know what's going on. We need to know what's going on. Therefore, until they tell us what's going on, we must conquer our fear and use them to learn our situation before continuing.
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Re: Descent
« Reply #22 on: April 11, 2011, 07:20:30 pm »

Fear is useless. Be rid of it. If fear is to be taken as an indicator, emotions are useless. If they are, then we will be rid of them as well. If fear is a outlier, a coincidence, a fluke, then we will have emotions.

These people may be enemies, but that does not mean we cannot learn from them. We will go, integrate into their scociety. If they come to pose a threat to our existance, we will destroy them with cool, cunning logic and efficiency.

Any and all threats are to be neutralized and if possible examined. We will survive, whatever it takes. This is our mission, our purpose.

Survive.
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Re: Descent
« Reply #23 on: April 11, 2011, 07:53:51 pm »

They are dangerous! They are the enemy! Destroy them all!

We need a few homicidal rampages to feel guilty about later on...


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« Reply #24 on: April 11, 2011, 07:55:55 pm »

Fear is irrelavant all I do is survive all are my enemy, and none my friend. I am alone in this world diferent from all else.

Run into the woods near you, and hide they are not to be trusted.
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Re: Descent
« Reply #25 on: April 11, 2011, 11:56:20 pm »

 Tell your fear "duly noted" and continue on free of its noise; you need to get your thoughts together and your wounds healed. You have been rejected, yet these people still wish to take you in anyway. You need a safe place. You need help. You need allies.
 Go with them and rest.
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« Reply #26 on: April 12, 2011, 12:01:30 am »

With no memory and no mind, all we have left is instinct. To ignore fear is foolish. Back away from them, back away and ask who they are.
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« Reply #27 on: April 12, 2011, 06:10:32 am »

Be cautious, you have no idea who these people are. Trust your instincts.
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« Reply #28 on: April 12, 2011, 04:32:27 pm »

Paranoia, uncertainty and fear grip you as you look at these people, as the one before you reaches down, offering you a hand, offering to assist you in climbing to your feet. You do not take that hand however, knowing that you cannot trust these people, that they are your enemy, that all you have to go on is your instincts.

Instincts, that tell you that your options here are fight or flight, that you should either kill these three where they stand, or get as far away from them as you are able. You do not feel you are able to fight them yet however, for you have no way of possibly knowing how strong they are, no way of knowing if you are in a state that is able to fend them off. No way of knowing if you have lasting injuries from your fall.

You edge backwards as the man leans towards you, his insistant attempt to assist you causing you to grow agitated, offended, knowing that you are better than this, that you should not need to stoop to requiring the assistance of lessers. That is what instinct tells you. Instinct tells you that you are proud, that you are better than these lesser beings.

Instinct tells you to leave.

Instinct tells you that you do not need them.

Your eyes close for a brief moment as your body protests, as you thrust your palms against the soil below, opening again as you force yourself upright in a single motion, unsteady yet powerful. Your gaze is intense now as you draw a deep breath, relishing in the cool of the air, the scents of water, of foliage, and two scents you cannot place, yet know well registering.

"Get away from her, we don't have time for this," comes the nasal voice, a voice that is silenced as you shoot the man a glance, your eyes fixed upon him, on the blurred outline that is his form.

A form that seems to grow further blurred, blending in with the nearby vegitation as you stare at him. Your vision is fine, you can pick out the details of the land about him with crystal clarity, yet this man seems hard to see. The one beside him is a little easier to focus upon, yet also blurred, though the one before you, the one exuding warmth, pitiful and open warmth is as plain to see as your hands.

"Why can I not clearly see them?" your words come, almost unbidden, though the man before you does not respond to this question, your words merely eliciting a sigh as he stands.

"We cannot linger, angel. The skies shall change soon, if you will not come with us, then there is nothing we can do to save you from them," he sighs, giving you one last hopeful look, as if expecting you to accept this offered assistance.

You are not swayed.

This could be a trap.

Your gaze shifts away from the men briefly, towards the river, then back once more. Back, to those three figures who now seem to be little more than faint outlines, shimmering, fading into nothingness as they walk away from you, leaving you...

Alone.

Oh god, you're alone.

You're alone, uncertain and afraid.
You just drove away those who may have helped you.
Those that may have betrayed you.
You're lost on this world.
Nothing more than a vague sensation of familiarity towards the things you see and smell.
No more than vague feelings towards that what you know.
What do you believe you were?
A hunter, a soldier, a scout, a doctor, something else?
What are you going to do now these people have left?

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« Reply #29 on: April 12, 2011, 04:40:14 pm »

We were a Mage, raining the cleansing fire of destruction upon the unworthy.

We should find shelter, since we seem to have done the stupid thing, which was actually exactly the opposite of what most of us said...
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