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FearfulJesuit

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My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« on: January 29, 2011, 05:30:22 pm »

I am starting a new novel, a love story in a sort of Finnegans Wake-esque style. I provide you with the first two sentences as a taste.

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Hcetsel, far thor's even existed, pfast fore the streaming byond wall living, tim beganth slháli swíyeque. Beganningmyth, bourne two sealand h1estesmi, we erreve bigenning circeler to berthing-place where you'd see t'hie'thim.
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #1 on: January 29, 2011, 07:37:45 pm »

I, but, what.
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #2 on: January 30, 2011, 04:55:51 am »

This one's free: people will be more inclined to read your novel if the beginning makes any sense whatsoever.
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #3 on: January 30, 2011, 04:57:35 am »

This one's free: people will be more inclined to read your novel if the beginning uses words.
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #4 on: January 30, 2011, 04:57:53 am »

I am starting a new novel, a love story in a sort of Finnegans Wake-esque style. I provide you with the first two sentences as a taste.

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Hcetsel, far thor's even existed, pfast fore the streaming byond wall living, tim beganth slháli swíyeque. Beganningmyth, bourne two sealand h1estesmi, we erreve bigenning circeler to berthing-place where you'd see t'hie'thim.

1. If it is about Rachel again, I will be very upset.

2. I suggest not attempting to out-James Joyce James Joyce unless you have more familiarity with... well, everything.  He wrote Dubliners before he wrote his crazy post-modern stuff.  Familiarizing yourself more with conventional modes of expression will probably help your cause in the long run.
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #5 on: January 30, 2011, 05:19:23 am »

This one's free: people will be more inclined to read your novel if the beginning makes any sense whatsoever.

This.

I don't really think the great majority of potential readers are going to understand that style you're using. This seems rather counter to the point of storytelling.
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #6 on: January 30, 2011, 05:44:02 am »

There's a reason most writers write in a language more common than what I'm assuming is Proto-Indo-European (only because of the other thread).
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #7 on: January 30, 2011, 05:49:59 am »

Hcetsel, far thor's even existed, pfast fore the streaming byond wall living, tim beganth slháli swíyeque. Beganningmyth, bourne two sealand h1estesmi, we erreve bigenning circeler to berthing-place where you'd see t'hie'thim.

I think this is what the English language must look like if you have a really high fever.
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #8 on: January 30, 2011, 01:26:56 pm »

2. I suggest not attempting to out-James Joyce James Joyce unless you have more familiarity with... well, everything.  He wrote Dubliners before he wrote his crazy post-modern stuff.  Familiarizing yourself more with conventional modes of expression will probably help your cause in the long run.
More importantly, he didn't ask the opinions of a random group of people in the process of writing it, thus leading people to believe he knew what he was doing, so that he came off as an artist instead of trying to be artsy and cool and junk. Post-modern is no longer post modern - people are completely jaded to this sort of stuff now.
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #9 on: January 31, 2011, 04:17:07 am »

Ok, so chances are this is just jibberish because it is 100% out of context. The protaganist is reading some ancient script or something.

But that dosn't make it any better a teaser.

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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #10 on: January 31, 2011, 06:03:09 am »

Is that some form of Ye Olde English?
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #11 on: January 31, 2011, 06:13:24 am »

Lovecraft would jizz himself over it.

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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #12 on: January 31, 2011, 11:34:16 am »

...dude...I see into INFINITY...........
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #13 on: January 31, 2011, 04:57:40 pm »

-wonders when the OP will chime in-
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Re: My new novel, "Beganningmyth"
« Reply #14 on: January 31, 2011, 06:34:38 pm »

It's not particularly good. I'd lose interest completely if the first sentence looked like that.
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