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Terrahex

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The Next Chapter, the story (Update 2)
« on: December 15, 2010, 10:25:31 pm »

Okay guys, this is the story part of The Next Chapter, you create it. you don't have to read the forum to read this. basically, I asked the forum lurkers to give me imformation to create the story that will be posted here so that people who just want to read can do so without getting spoilers put in. this forum will also serve as the review center. post what you think of the story here.

Warning: everything in the forum is subject to copyright. by posting this elsewhere without permission, you ARE stealing.
(Sorry people, I've worked hard on this already. I'm not going to let others rip it off.)

Oh yeah, and anything in here can change as well.

For people who have read the spoiler thread, NO spoiling it for others.
« Last Edit: January 19, 2011, 04:51:24 pm by Terrahex »
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story
« Reply #1 on: December 15, 2010, 10:26:39 pm »

« Last Edit: January 05, 2011, 12:36:03 am by Terrahex »
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #2 on: December 15, 2010, 11:35:25 pm »

Even though the idea originated in Forum Games and Roleplaying, this thread belongs in Creative Projects.

As for the work itself, one question kept coming to mind: why would an immortal attend high school for fifty years if she doesn't enjoy any aspect of it?
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #3 on: December 16, 2010, 12:18:49 am »

Even though the idea originated in Forum Games and Roleplaying, this thread belongs in Creative Projects.

As for the work itself, one question kept coming to mind: why would an immortal attend high school for fifty years if she doesn't enjoy any aspect of it?
I like how you didn't ask ME why.
remember that this is only one piece to a puzzle.

PS, how do I move this forum over there, or do I have to start a new one?
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #4 on: December 16, 2010, 01:50:34 am »

Its simply that Clockwork is attempting to make a life for herself, because of the fact that she never had a humanish life. She has served the Fay all her life and after her betrayal by the queen she decided to try and live like a human girl.
She is also most likely 14-15 years old, a girl living alone in a house isn't very suspicious (Because of all the stay at home recluses) but the not going to school ever could get her life examined a bit too much and then she would have to be sent to someplace she didn't want to go.
Another reason she might like going to school is seeing hundreds of people grow up, when she never will.
Or she just wants to see the young people grow up and become the future.
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #5 on: December 16, 2010, 02:34:23 am »

Sorry, that was a bit rude of me. I should have asked asked you directly: why does Aeta go to high school when she quite clearly hates it and has no authority figure forcing her to attend?

I don't know about moving the topic. I thought it worked, then I checked a thread I had made and couldn't find any sort of option like that, so I have no idea.
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #6 on: December 16, 2010, 03:19:37 am »

I enjoyed the read. cant wait for the other chapters. as for whether this topic should be in creative projects, i i think it has some elements of both a forum game and a creative project. its just split into 2 different threads for the convenience of readers who dont want spoilers. but ultimately its the moderater that decides where this thread belongs. so lets just let it be
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #7 on: December 16, 2010, 11:25:56 am »

MUHAHAHAAH!
(Lurking- again)
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #8 on: December 16, 2010, 05:11:44 pm »

Cool story, can't wait for more!
As for moving threads, I'm pretty sure that only people with some degree of mod powers can do it... then again, I've never looked at that on this forum.
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #9 on: December 16, 2010, 08:07:10 pm »

Down at the bottom there should be a thing to move the thread. Or else they changed it.
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #10 on: December 17, 2010, 04:14:23 pm »

pretty good actually.
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #11 on: December 18, 2010, 10:51:36 am »

agian Armok, I am sorry that your character will only be secondary.

Okay I've started work on chapter 2
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #12 on: December 18, 2010, 07:31:35 pm »

At least she'll be in it at all, and possibly get some decent amount of screentime even if she doesn't turn out to be plot critical?
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 1)
« Reply #13 on: December 19, 2010, 12:19:34 pm »

Posting to Read. Also, my character is a ditz  ;D
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Re: The Next Chapter, the story (Update 2)
« Reply #14 on: January 19, 2011, 04:53:13 pm »

So update num 2 is finished. it might still have a few small errors in it, but I'll fix them eventually.
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