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Servant Corps

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Surrealist Terrorism
« on: March 16, 2010, 12:15:43 am »

I have been writing a strange book lately, but I need to test to see if the premise...er...works. I have taken an isolated chapter from this book and put it in spoilers, about an abortion clinic bomber named Pahana. Kalki is the name of a left-wing terrorist who lives in exile after killing the US President, he's not really that important. Anyway, read and comment.

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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #1 on: March 16, 2010, 12:22:22 am »

I passionately dislike books written to deliver a message. Other than that I guess it doesn't really have anything that special about it. I can't really make out anything about the characters in the book, which is by far the most important part.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #2 on: March 16, 2010, 08:26:02 pm »

I suggest making an account on writing.com and getting it reviewed there.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #3 on: March 17, 2010, 02:52:17 am »

So basically, they're the Moderate Crime Squad?
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #4 on: March 17, 2010, 03:13:50 am »

Way too much Author Tract.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #5 on: March 17, 2010, 05:46:35 pm »

Way too much Author Tract.

Yeah, hm. I don't know how to fix that...without, er, destroying the message (which I'm not going to say, because well, that's stupid; the reader should decide what the book says, not the author). Oh well.

But at least I know that I don't have to worry too much about this project. Yay, I guess.

So basically, they're the Moderate Crime Squad?

What I'm trying to do is create a setting where any political disagreement becomes a matter of great concern, and will ultimately leads to violence and chaos. There is one way, the correct way, and you are afraid that the nation will deviate from this correct way. You are willing to do anything possible to ensure that society stays with the correct path...and the only logical conclusion is violence. That's part of the reason of this Abortion Clinic Bomber passage, to present the image of such a setting.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #6 on: March 17, 2010, 10:08:48 pm »

I see. But it's not very surreal. Surrealist Terrorism would be like, a building is taken over by terrorists, with everyone taken hostage. In order to deliver their demands to the police surrounding the building, one of the terrorists walks out with a letter pinned to his shirt, before lifting a nerf gun to his head. He screams the word 'BAGS', and then fires it, and falls over, playing dead.

The terrorists letter demands the immediate delivery of seventeen kilograms of Reese's Puffs Cereal, a demand that M&M add white M&Ms, a dwarf elephant painted orange to be delivered to the White House, and for Arrested Development to return to broadcast in a new season.

The letter would conclude with a condemnation of Mars Inc. for their racist practice of having white M&Ms, and no Black M&Ms. They also warn that they are heavily armed with the latest in Super Soaker Technology, and are not afraid to use it against the hostages, or the police. In order to prove it, they release a single hostage, dripping with water.

Finally, when the SWAT team invades, finding the only resistance consists of a few dozen men armed with Super Soaker Quick Blast Water Blasters, the last terrorist in the building reaches the intercom system, and immediately sets it to play Never Gunna Give You Up on infinite loop.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #7 on: March 17, 2010, 10:23:40 pm »

thats lolrandum xD not surrealism.
surrealism would be more like, the terrorists operate out of a kettle that is also a chicken, and their weapons only damage the imagination.

also they spout metaphysics equations as they do terrorist-y things.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #8 on: March 18, 2010, 06:33:38 pm »

I passionately dislike books written to deliver a message.

I, too, hate almost every piece of famous literature ever written.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #9 on: March 18, 2010, 06:41:19 pm »

I passionately dislike books written to deliver a message.

I, too, hate almost every piece of famous literature ever written.
fixed that for you
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #10 on: March 26, 2010, 05:48:08 am »

I passionately dislike books written to deliver a message.

I, too, hate almost every piece of famous literature ever written.thing ever said.
fixed that for you
and I for you.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #11 on: March 26, 2010, 06:40:00 am »

I passionately dislike books written to deliver a message.

I, too, hate almost every piece of famous literature ever written.thing ever said.
fixed that for you
and I for you.
ditto.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #12 on: April 12, 2010, 09:40:25 am »

I passionately dislike books written to deliver a message.

I, too, hate almost every piece of famous literature ever written.thing ever said.
fixed that for you
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ditto.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #13 on: April 12, 2010, 10:07:27 am »

I passionately dislike books written to deliver a message.

I, too, hate almost every piece of famous literature ever written. thing ever said.
fixed that for you
and I for you.
ditto.
Don't mind me...
Taking this to its logical conclusion.
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Re: Surrealist Terrorism
« Reply #14 on: April 12, 2010, 10:11:24 am »

You necro'd for that?

Poor form, poor form I say.
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