I'm really enjoying your writing so far. It's good and much more interesting then simple breakdowns of what happened would be. As for the commander being a Mary-sue...I wouldn't worry about it too much. So much is going to go wrong in a game of X-com that it's pretty much impossible for any character to come off as being perfect. And if you actually have a perfect game of X-com without major save-scumming...you deserve to come off looking perfect!
Darkwind's thoughts
Disappointing mission today. Only got to frag one alien. Need to do better, get more shots in. I've been able to keep my skills sharp, but I don't feel like I'm improving. Must practice harder.
Tamunshin's shot on the Chosen One bothers me. Do these aliens have some sort of mind control? Could I find myself shooting my squadmates? I think our mental discipline will be as important as anything else.
Also, random question, what are the current ranks? I know Barbarossa is captain, and I think Darkwind is a sargent. What is Archangel, since he took command of that mission?
i will have to wait untill i get home before i fully answer that question but from memory: RAM 1, darkwind, Mr. apple and cerapa are sergeants.
I try to have commanding personalities lead as the situation demands. technically since I am in contact with the team during the mission, my say as commander goes.
This style comes from me being a plain old civilian in real life. I know from my short time working with the military that they take their ranks really seriously.
I can try to work that attitude into my future posts.