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Re: Othor II. The unlocked door
« Reply #60 on: February 22, 2010, 10:14:16 am »

Nope, no update today. I'm currently playing with index cards and graphs, because it turns out to be really hard to work with text files of character descriptions. To turn it into familiar terms, I'm preparing the GM set, I think. And organizing the material. Expect an update tomorrow (Russian time, that's +8 to DF general).
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Re: Othor II. The unlocked door
« Reply #61 on: February 22, 2010, 12:01:59 pm »

Which time zone you in? I'm guessing +4 or +5?
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Re: Othor II. The unlocked door
« Reply #62 on: February 22, 2010, 02:00:53 pm »

GMT+3, and do you guys (characters) look ridiculous upon closer inspection! :D

Edit: Ehm... I should have really known better than to throw around such unbacked insults...



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« Reply #63 on: February 23, 2010, 02:09:59 pm »

Well, I'm neither Joan Rowling, nor Stephanie Meyer. But we're moving somewhere.
Quote from: Othor II
It was a hundred mile journey that separated them from their starting point at an out-of-the-way inn near the city of Firimar. But their fates crossed at an abandoned shrine of demon Uzotnahet in the woods far to the west.
Vig was there first. He entered the shrine, cautiously stepping over dislodged stones and moving aside strands of spider-silk, hanging from the ceiling. The light from the entrance barely touched the floor in the chamber. The man slipped his weapon - a bearded axe - under his belt, put his travel bag on the floor and took out a torch and a flint. Then he propped himself against a wall, so that he could observe both the entrance and the darkness of the chamber, and began setting his torch on fire. Clicks of stone on steel echoed in the chamber placing the man in danger of attracting unwanted attention, but he was calm and concentrated. Finally, the fuel caught ablaze. Vig stood up and lifted the torch. The chamber wasn't very big, but in the far end there was a passage to the next chamber. Unfortunately, the ceiling in it collapsed and the passage was filled with rubble. The warrior studied it for a moment and then turned his attention to the chamber he was in. Along the middle of the farther wall there were several menacing stone idols, probably representing the demon and supposed to instill fear into visitors of the shrine. The walls bore many engravings, in some of which a figure, similar to the idols, could be recognized. Vig moved to examine the engravings. Quite soon, though, his attention was attracted to a writing that didn't show signs of religious devotion. On the contrary. The flow of thinly cut images was disrupted by a rude tool, that left ragged wounds in the stone. The strokes resembled runes that formed some kind of message, and apparently it wasn't just idle vandalism, for Vig grew very interested in the content of the message. He stared at it with a visible strain.
Suddenly a loud "ahem" was heard from the direction of the entrance. And then a young voice spoke.
- Can I help you with something?
Vig spun around, raising his axe, to discover a boldly-looking halfling perched on the stairs leading down into the chamber. His smile was a bit fishy, and his hand rested on the hilt of his shortsword. But he didn't make any offensive moves, except for startling Vig.
- You follow me? - asked Vig quickly.
- Actually, I have, - said the halfling. - I saw you in the city and knew immediately that you were up to something profitable.
Vig tightened grip on his axe and steadied his feet.
- Hey, wait, good sir, - said the halfling raising his hand defensively. - I haven't come to rob you; my folk, as you might have heard, does it discreetly and under cover of the night.
He stood up and slowly walked across the passage.
- I saw that you were having trouble with these markings, and thought I'd help you. For a share of the treasure, of course.
Vig put down his axe.
- And who are you?
The halfling lifted his arms.
- Oh! I forgot to introduce myself! I am Will Flynn, and I'm wanted dead or alive in two counties, - he modestly lifted his eyebrows, - well, mostly by the counts. I am an adventurer and specialize in illegal business, for which I'm renowned, in certain circles. In my work I sometimes have to deal with encoded messages and have learned quite a few foreign languages, to different degrees. And I recognize runes of the ancient civilization of Agianum on that wall.
Vig didn't seem moved.
- How much do you ask?
Will smiled.
- Well-well. My price depends on the nature of the job. And judging from the decor in this chamber, I suppose you might need a companion for your adventure.
Vig hesitated.
Suddenly, heavy footsteps could be heard from the entrance. Alarmed, both the man and the halfling gripped their weapons. A broad figure loomed in the passage, and then a young warrior entered the light of Vig's torch. It was Amlemth.
- Do we have a problem here? - he asked strictly.
The man and the halfling stared at him in confused silence. In the end, Vig came to his senses and addressed the stranger in as repulsing manner as possible:
- And what do you want?
- Oh, I just thought you could need help, - said Amlemth, - seeing that halfling following you.
- You couldn't! - exclaimed Will, eyes wide with disbelief.
- Well, I did, young man, and you had better say sorry to this busy warrior for your behaviour.
Despite the newcomer's imperious demeanour, he didn't move a hand towards the longsword at his belt, so the halfling, although still agitated, didn't show much anxiety. He caught his breath and said:
- You've misunderstood my intentions. We were just in the middle of a business agreement with sir... ahem...
He looked at Vig who wasn't helpful, then back at Amlemth. The face of the latter had suddenly mellowed and even attained some childish quality.
- Wow! - said the warrior, taking in the engravings. - Isn't it the mythical shrine of Uzotnahet, the demon that was slain by Kerfa Godsfate in 457, and from whose hide he made a legendary armour Kosh Zustash - "The Slaughter of Ancients"? That was never found?
- What? - said Will, stepping out of the way of Amlemth, who had started to descend the stairs into the chamber, in a daze.
Vig had to move, too. He put his axe down again and lifted his eyebrows in wonder.
- Yes, - continued Amlemth, pointing at the pictures, - that's the battle of Uzotnahet with the titan Aifal the Unmeasured Clutches and his defeat in 215... That's the Dishonest Robbing of Tunenum, the dwarven outpost in 401... That... My favourite - the Ambiguous Beatings, the siege of the city of Ceylesea by a human army under the commander Viribonean, during which Uzotnahet managed to kidnap half the army in night raids until it was discovered and the demon was chased away with arrows... in 422.
- Good, - said Vig, when there was an opportunity. Amlemth turned to him with shining eyes. - So, are you scholar?
- No, - said Amlemth and turned to the engravings again. - I've just been fascinated by these amazing stories since I was a child... Wait, - he stopped, frowning, near the overlapping runes, - what is it?
- Uh, these are ancient runes, - Will hurried to speak up, but was interrupted.
- Is it directions to the place, where Kerfa Godsfate took Kosh Zustash after he defeated Uzotnahet? - exclaimed Amlemth. - Are you going after it? - he turned to Vig and Will. - Take me with you.
He noticed incredulous stares of the other two and slightly flushed.
- I mean, you are going to need another good sword in the perils that lie on the journey, and I've got one!
Vig shrugged his shoulders.
- We still don't know what is written there.
- That's where I come in, - said Will, moving towards the engravings past the warriors. - If you'll excuse me.
He squinted at the runes, frequently turning his eyes to the ceiling and moving his lips. Amlemth quickly drew in his breath.
- 'Here I, Kerfa Godsfate... have slain...' - started Will, - 'the thunderous beast... Uzotnahet... and...', apparently, 'skinned... it... and made myself... an armour out of its skin.'
Vig came closer because his torch had started to grow dim.
- 'Also I have slain... the worshipers of the beast... who resided... in his shrine. Now I am going to the town of Romistra... where I shall serve her as her defender.'
Will looked up at the men.
- And there he met his end, - said Amlemth solemnly.
- Romistra, - almost murmured Vig. - There is something else?
- No, that's all, - said Will. He hesitated then added, - I went past that town, once.
- So, where is it? - asked Vig with a sly wrinkle to his eyes.
- 20% of the value of the armour, and I'll lead you there, - quickly said the halfling.
Vig sighed.
- Agreed. Come.
- And I? - cried Amlemth.
- All right. Come, too, - said Vig, starting towards the passage out of the shrine. His torch went out with a puff of smoke.
Will dexterously leaped over the steps of the stairs and was first up. An "Uh" of Amlemth at the base of the stairs was heard.
- Careful, clumsy! - Will called into the darkness and strode out of the shrine in front of Vig.

Please, ignore any slips and repetitions, I have still to work on this text. But hit style hard.

In my quest for names I stumbled upon two very useful sites: one called Serendipity and another one called Seventh Sanctum. They kind of go with DF style.
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Re: Othor II. The unlocked door
« Reply #64 on: February 23, 2010, 02:51:08 pm »

This is fantastic! You're quite the good author I think. :D
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Re: Othor II. The unlocked door
« Reply #65 on: February 23, 2010, 04:34:35 pm »

Hehe.
Cool.
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Re: Othor II. The unlocked door
« Reply #66 on: February 23, 2010, 04:34:42 pm »

It's great. But you shouldn't use OK.
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Re: Othor II. The unlocked door
« Reply #67 on: February 23, 2010, 10:32:59 pm »

try replacing O.K. with Okay.
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Re: Othor II. The unlocked door
« Reply #68 on: February 24, 2010, 07:00:09 am »

First,
This is fantastic! You're quite the good author I think. :D
Thanks, now we need to find the bad and the ugly writers, for a real bestseller.
Note: this joke is half-a-day old in my mind, but I just can't hold it anymore.

Second,
try replacing O.K. with Okay.
O! the posh fantasy sound!

Anyway, I've decided to go with "agreed". How does it sound now?
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« Reply #69 on: February 24, 2010, 03:32:41 pm »

Looks pretty interesting so far. Also, really good portraits! You're pretty talented :P
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Re: Othor II. The unlocked door
« Reply #70 on: February 26, 2010, 12:29:27 pm »

Eh, still haven't gotten to the decision point...
Quote from: Othor II
That night the trio gathered around a shabby little table in a room of "The Eagle's Barrel" Inn near Firimar. The air outside was clear, and a bright moon threw a pool of silvery light on the floor near the table. It didn't do much to the room's illumination, as well as an oil lamp, standing on a the table. The corners of the room were in deep gloom. But the shadows were convenient for Vig, whose face looked quite formidable, with dark spots in the valleys of his gaunt face, as he was doing his best to fish the directions out of Will.
- So, - he spoke, illustrating his words with hand gestures, - we go north two miles, then west four miles, then we go south ten miles, then we come to forest. You sure you know signs to get through him?
Will groaned.
- It, first of all, - he corrected. Then answered in a dull voice. - Yes, I said I've got the memory of a cat for this sort of thing.
- And what if we get separated, and lost? - Amlemth asked, pausing at gnawing a fine chicken leg that he managed to procure from the landlord, while the other two satisfied their hunger with bread and beer, apparently due to his immediately recognisable amicable character.
- Well, then... - Will started with a humorous glint to his eyes, but bit his tongue, and said instead. - We won't. It's a sparse forest.
Amlemth scratched his head, then said:
- Isn't it the Hedgewick grove, near a ford across the Bayanna river?
- No, - said Will quickly. - They are in completely opposite directions.
- Hrmpf, - said Vig disappointedly and swallowed the rest of his bread loaf.
Quite soon his companions finished their meals, too, and sat, sipping their drinks, in silence. Only soft wailing of the wind, and creaking of the building could be heard. The hour was late, but no one hurried to get in their beds, all for their own reasons. Soon, however, Vig discovered that he was helplessly slipping into the dream realm - shame, for all his experience as a sentry. He carefully searched the surroundings for what could cause him to lose vigilance.
- Do not do that, - he said to Will, noticing that the halfling was absent-mindedly thumping some rhythm on the desk with his fingers. To the performer's credit, the rhythm was perfect, and so, quite hypnotic.
- What? - said Will, looking first at Vig, then at his fingers. He threw up his hands. - Well! First you pester me with your questions for the better half of the evening, then you tell me to stop my fingers from doing what they were born to do! Outrage! I wonder what you'd say, if I played and sang?
Vig goggled about in alarm, as the halfling reached for his mandola.
- Oh! - exclaimed Amlemth. - Please, do! I love music.
He propped his chin on his hand and looked at Will, who sat on a bed with a grin, his hands just above the strings of his instrument.
Finally, Vig shrugged, and the song started.

"My lady, my lady, lady Nesh of Romistra,
You had a graceful walk and a tender skin,
Now your skin is cold and your limbs are stiff;
In your still eyes reflected are stars.

"My lady, my lady, what have we done?
A forbidden love we have grown.
We have tended to it from dusk 'till dawn.
It is day and the love is gone.

"My lady, my lady, I will go with the wind;
I have come with you from the south.
We bathed at the Eranthion's mouth,
I took off you your clothes thin.

"My lady, I brought to you flowers fresh,
From the cliffs of Sanádsákrith,
I shared with you a cup of honey sweet
That I hunted for in the woods of Cŕkrash.

"My lady, my lady, what have we done?
The passion blunted our minds.
Your husband, caught in a fury blind,
Did our love outrun.

"My lady, my lady, lady Nesh of Romistra,
You had a graceful walk and a tender skin,
Now your skin is cold and your limbs are stiff;
In your still eyes reflected are stars."

While Will was singing, a slight drizzle started outside, and the last chord of the song, that Will let to ring out, grew quiet and blended with the tapping of rain drops on the roof, so that the music and the sounds of the nature appeared to seamlessly continue each other. The charm hung in the air, and no one dared to speak, lest it breaks. The halfling sat grave, his eyes to the floor. On Amlemth cheek a tear traced a wet course, and he blinked often, staring into the distance, where his imagination dwelt. Vig was grave and frowning.
Finally, Will put away his mandola and rose to his feet. He moved towards the window, to let in some fresh air; the chill of the rain would be quite appropriate for the moment. He gripped the handle and slid the frame to the side.
A rumble of wood on wood followed, and quickly a dark shape fell from above the window, grabbed on the sill and flew into the room, past Will, who staggered backwards in surprise. Immediately alert, Vig grabbed his axe, that was set against the wall at his arm's reach, and brought it down hard on the intruder. The creature, though, was faster than him and evaded the blade with agility. He lifted the axe with difficulty, as it was stuck in the floor a bit, and brought it up above his head. But he wasn't allowed to strike again, as the creature flashed at him with its large brown eyes, then slapped him on the cheek with its clawed hand. The warrior was so bemused that he dropped his hands and the weapon. The creature rose to its feet, and turned out to be a miniature woman with a blunt rodent head. The kobold spoke:
- Do you try to kill every girl you meet, barbarian?
Vig didn't answer. Will came to his senses first.
- Well, well, a kobold thief, - he sneered.
The stranger turned around and, before he could react, slapped him on the cheek, too.
- I didn't come to steal anything, - the kobold said.
- So you were just idly hanging around our window? - Will asked, covering his hurt spot with a hand.
The kobold looked around at the men and said:
- I just overheard you talking about Romistra...
- Come on, - interrupted her Will, - through the window and in the rain?
The kobold lifted her muzzle offendedly.
- I am a highly esteemed stealth assassin and adventurer, plus my senses are naturally keen, due to my heritage.
- Still... - started the halfling. But here Amlemth, who until now looked a bit shy, keeping his eyes on the claws of the stranger, came in:
- Let's not fight over hereditary differences! - he looked at Will strictly. - And you, William, should know how to treat a lady.
Will sulked and turned his eyes away.
Amlemth smiled at the kobold.
- What is your name, lady?
The kobold smiled in return.
- Fithgnliru. Friends call me Nliru. Although I don't have many friends.
- Oh, - sighed Amlemth tenderly.
- Yes, as I've said, my speciality is stealth, and it doesn't mix well with friendship.
- But you're so c... - started Amlemth, but decided to pass the subject, - so courageous. People should look up to you.
- It's not that easy, when you're a kobold, - said Fithgnliru with a frown.
Vig, who listened to the conversation with interest, spoke in a manner serious and business-like.
- So, what do you want?
When the kobold turned to him, he explained.
- We need professional adventurers, if you are looking for it.
The kobold assumed an expression of dignity, then said:
- Yes, I'd like to go with you, as I currently don't have a job.
- How much do you want? - asked Vig.
The kobold hesitated, pulling at her lip. Then she quickly pointed at Will. - How much are you paying him?
- Twenty percent, - said Vig.
- Good, - said Fithgnliru.
Vig nodded.
- All right.
After a moment's more hesitation, the kobold turned to the man again.
- And can I sleep here tonight? - she almost begged. - I don't need a bed.
- Uh, - muttered Will, confused by the sudden changes.
- Yes, - said Vig, and went to shut the window, as he had had enough chill for now.
- Welcome to the team, - Amlemth said to Fithgnliru. She smiled modestly, then walked to a corner of the room and curled on the floor.
Vig sat on his bed and started taking off his boots. Amlemth followed his example. Only Will was still worried. He came closer to Vig and whispered:
- So, am I still on my salary?
Vig yawned and said:
- Yes.
- Well, that's all I need to know, - Will paused, - but I'd watch my belongings closely tonight, if I were you.
Vig looked at him with an impenetrable face, and said quietly:
- I always do.
Then he lay down. Will frowned at the shape of the kobold once more and went towards his bed.

Ah, almost forgot. I've got a couple of questions to ask you, guys. First, British or American English? I don't have a preference on this point, but my spell-checker keeps raging at me, as I keep writing some words British way and others - American. I am spoiled by the Mid-Atlantic way I've been taught English at my University.

Second... I think, I've forgotten the very second I was thinking about, I'll ask it later, but now a small question: would you like me to call the kobold by the full name, or by the short, as I have spelt it?

A-ha, remembered my second question: should I put the whole text (up to the last update) in the OP? And how to do it? I'm not sure that the character limit permits, although I've never hit it. And also, it seems, that now it is only a little circle that is interested in this thread, and I thought that it's because the story is in small chunks throughout the pages? Or I shouldn't worry? What do you say?

And last, but not least
Looks pretty interesting so far. Also, really good portraits! You're pretty talented :P
Thanks!
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« Reply #71 on: February 26, 2010, 01:03:51 pm »

I'd rather British, since they spell words a lot like they do in Canada.

Nliru is fine for a name, you don't need to spell the whole name out :o

It's okay the way it is now, but if you want to do something like that, just put links to the posts in the OP. That way you won't break the character limit.
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Re: Othor II. Grab that cutebold!
« Reply #72 on: February 26, 2010, 01:35:22 pm »

BE preferably.

Keep posting like this, but if possible you could also join the text in a .doc you update.
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« Reply #73 on: February 26, 2010, 01:57:34 pm »

I've actually kept a .doc since the beginning, so no worries.

Edited the OP. Comments? I'm personally concerned about the readers' getting dazzled at the multitude of quotes, but unfortunately I didn't keep the character descriptions to individual posts, so it's hard to make a coherent list of them.
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« Reply #74 on: February 26, 2010, 03:07:39 pm »

Brilliant!  :D

I have no real preference for name.
I think the story wont fit in the OP, but you shuld LINK the story posts from it.
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