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[Rumrusher]

this and Adventurer Red's androgynous concern look(non edited) are the only three things I can't unsee in #52.
Joking aside I love the coloring of the recent panel really shove William's despair in the readers face like miasma coming off a zombie.

[Fault]

some concept art... Revised the layout of the keep in relation to merchant town... factoring in houses and shops crammed into every nook and cranny of the lower terraces.

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direct link instead of img post, pic is HUGE http://www.deviantart.com/download/205308491/effigies___city_layout_by_fault_classic-d3e8h1n.png

heh, was wondering if anyone was going to point that out.. I've been drawing too many ugly old characters I guess, when I try to draw anything other than that the design rockets to the opposite extreme... :p

[Rumrusher]

some concept art... Revised the layout of the keep in relation to merchant town... factoring in houses and shops crammed into every nook and cranny of the lower terraces.

Spoiler:  large image (click to show/hide)

direct link instead of img post, pic is HUGE http://www.deviantart.com/download/205308491/effigies___city_layout_by_fault_classic-d3e8h1n.png

  [Adventure Traps:ON]

heh, was wondering if anyone was going to point that out.. I've been drawing too many ugly old characters I guess, when I try to draw anything other than that the design rockets to the opposite extreme... :p

I blame the convo on lack of females in this comic and personally not seeing a example of one from either the Fanart section or engraver guild(my bad if I did see one then this adventurer won't come off as a a concern Token Female member and just a close up of someone who place stats in Smooth skin being concern.) your Josef was the only character next to topless Swift (punching a deer/elk/cerabuu/fourlegged hairy beast) and that other blonde human who name passed me to being less rugged male characters. so you have only your self to blame for "killing off" the only person that was on the low level of rough looks. I order the Rough men starting from the highest from William, Dwarves,Adventure blue,Wolfbears, every creature you drawn in the comic, Shift,Tab(other blonde guy), Josef,your fan art, the small normal art I seen you did, the landscape and scenery,Deon's Bearded women, Adventure Red.
oh and happy birthday.

[Sensei]

Certainly the pace of creating the comic -as opposed to reading it when it's all done- makes it more of an issue.

[Fault]

oddly enough I had finished that page's lineart before the WHY NO GIRLS discussion really came up :-/

your ranking of character design by manliness is also very entertaining, by the way. especially the nicknames

oh and happy birthday.

thanks

[Rumrusher]

oddly enough I had finished that page's lineart before the WHY NO GIRLS discussion really came up :-/

your ranking of character design by manliness is also very entertaining, by the way. especially the nicknames

oh and happy birthday.

thanks

man thought up the perfect gift for you.

"Better than Urva' "

[Sensei]

Oh what birthday? BIRTHDAY!

Also, I have to say, no offense but some of your faces look as bad as ones I might draw.

(compliments on Red's shoulders though, those are something I can never get right especially in a small space)

Also, which of these do you guys think might make the best avatar?   

[Fr1gid]

I like what you are doing here and congrats on making it this far, It shows some real hard work ethic and a real passion for what you do  . Happy late BirthDay 

But now for the critique* which will be primarily in the graphical category :
Good:

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Very cool shading technique, it is unique and gives it a rather interesting finish. Great use of negative space, in many situations it looks good with the black details. My favorite was this one, Beneath Mount Bakar http://effigies.smackjeeves.com/comics/748587/beneath-mount-bakar/. Excellent clothing and character designs.

Not So Good:

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The pixelated style may be a style choice but, it shouldn't be applied to your text if possible (that goblin isn't an android). Some of the scenes are too dark and the characters are hard to make out. Text balloons are very pixelated. Soulless Eye balls...

Suggestions:

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1. Scan in your art work at a higher resolution (I don't know what scale you are drawing on but assuming it isn't tiny you should be able to get a much smoother scan.) You can always re-size the picture later and make it smaller for the web. You can do this and still maintain your style but it would be easier to read and figure out.
2. Use a different font. Not just different, better. There are some excellent comic fonts on the web. The main thing is readability. I would recommend BlamBot Comic Fonts http://www.blambot.com/fonts.shtml, it has a variety of fonts some are professional pay fonts but there are plenty of great free ones for you to use.
3. Using dark lighting is great but try and keep the important parts lighted. Instead of everything being mostly one value have the character standout a bit more.
4. Give them pupils,           for the children.
5. Keep up the hard work and cool stuff.

This is an example of some of the things I was talking about. Your original is on the left and the edited one is on the right. (I also tweaked some of the shadows but not much.)

If you have any questions on what I said just hit me up. 

*Disclaimer: All contents are designed to make artist think and help themselves improve, and offered in good natured complete honesty. And some of it may just be personal preference.

[Fault]

You raise a point that I have been considering for quite some time. The minimal page size / aliased style is limiting to what I really should be capable of, and as such is gradually being phased out... already evident in some backgrounds, especially on page 51.

However, this graphical progression can not be an immediate change... it is a carefully guided transition, the changes in design elements tied to changes in the plot. As the story kicks into gear, the art will become smoother and more lively.

This is an awkward phase in the plan, though, where the more varied textures of the background are constrained by the presence of pixellated outlines and aliased figures... I expect to completely phase out pixellated art in about four or five pages.

also, thank you for linking that font site! I'll have to take a look around there.

[Askot Bokbondeler]

i object to the request to add pupils

[Rumrusher]

i object to the request to add pupils

Isn't the soullessness in the eyes adds 7+ in soul stealing and intimidation? Though seeing how Red and blue have them I guess it's a character trait.

[Fault]

it's a racial trait.

humans have pupils, elves and goblins have glowing eyes (pupil thus not visible), and dwarves have a grey membrane over their eyes that keeps dust out.

[Fr1gid]

Cool. Sounds like a good idea, that way you don't just jump over to something else and can figure out what works. Looking forward to the transition.

Yeah I was referring to the humans. The goblin eyes look good.

[Fault]

3/13 panels of page #53 are completed

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[Rumrusher]

So dwarves are Riddick. Great now I can not hear vin's voice through them now or imagine one creep up on a prison guard and violently snap his neck or wear goggles.