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[AussieGuy]

Actually that 'shoddy' one took well over 10 min.

If you don't like it, why don't you do it yourself???

Since katsun is not updating the charter page i'll do it here

Turn 10 Lets go!!!!

Inaluct:

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Combat.

Cheeetar:

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I stop the magma flooding.

[5] You stop the magma flooding!

Emperor_Jonathan:

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Combat.

NUKE9.13:

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There is an obvious reason you can't find any drunk goblins.
The bar is closed!
Man the bar! Sell the booze! Make the money!

[1] You try to sell booze but you somehow manage to destroy it

Zasit:

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I will also help to stop the flood

[4] The flood has stopped already but you blocked it off even more (no more flooding!)

shoruke:

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I flee in an upwards direction, and find water to soothe my burnt legs.

[3-2 (burnt legs)=1] You run and jump into the water (no burnt legs) but you start drowning. (3 turns without getting out you drown)

Errol:

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Stop the magma flooding.

[6] You try to stop the already stopped magma and you find a Obsidian sword (+1 attack)

Combat:

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I snap the camel's neck.

[6-1=5] (Medium damage to left arm) You try to snap the camels neck and you do heavy damage to its neck (-3 rolls for charging)
Camel:[2] The camal trys to run away but does not get far.
[6] The burning comes back and burns him to death!
 

Snap the humans neck.

[6] You sucsessfully break the macemans neck. You watch him fall to the floor in a heap

Characters:

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inaluct:
Inventory
Makeshift Torch (Fire)
Kitten (Pet)
Skills
Wood burner
furnace operator
Injury
Left arm broken (-2 to rolls involving that arm)

Cheeetar
Inventory
Worn elven whip (-1 attack rolls)
War Brown Bear (Companion)
Rock Idol
Rock Mug
Skills
Animal Caretaker
Animal Trainer
Dabbling Mason
Dabbling Miner

Emperor_Jonathan
Inventory
Iron Pick
Adamantine Anvil(+1 to forging rolls-On ground)
Skills
Miner
Injury
Right Foot, Broken (-1 to certain rolls)
Left Arm, Broken (-1 to use that arm)


NUKE9.13
Inventory
Keg of Booze
2 Plump Helmets
Goblin Law Book
Skills
Mining
Brewing
Novice Liar
Novice Negotiator
Injury
(none)

Zasit
Inventory
Masterwork Iron Armor (+1 def rolls)
Steel Spear (+1 attack rolls)
Worn Food (Useless)
Dog Leather Waterskin (Empty)
Skills
Butchery
Animal dissection
Injury
(none)

Shoruke
Inventory
(none)
Skills
Smelter
Weaponsmith
Injury
Drowning (3 turns)

Errol
Inventory
Macnifcent elven sword (+2 to attack)
Crude Wooden Idol (Low Quality)
Obsidian sword (+1 attack)
Skills
Engraver
Woodcrafter
Injury
(none)

 
 
 
 

 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 
 

[Emperor_Jonathan]

Loot maceman.

[inaluct]

Loot camel.

[Shoruke]

Guess I'm gonna just practice my swimming, and get out of... whatever body of water I'm in.

[Cheeetar]

I start trading my whip and trade goods for a better whip.

[Errol]

Um... help out shoruke.

10 minutes? I usually need half an effin' hour to make a turn, with statuses and all. (Well, I might leave out the statuses, 'cuz I'm lazy like that.)

But, seriously... I may misjudge you, but your turns just look like... you put no effort into it at all.

First, proper capitalization, grammar, and interpunctuation help a lot to make a good impression. It all looks much tidier and stuff. Second, your turns. For example, you might want to detail the 'how' in the actions. "You stop the magma flood" is a bit unsatisfactory. How did he actually do it? Stuff like that. You might also want to make it fun, especially ones and sixes. I find myself enjoying writing these sixes, perhaps to a worrysome degree, but that's not the point. Generally, your turns look rather bland and could use some fleshing-out. You don't need to use large walls of text like Sean tends to do, but a few more sentences might be useful.

Writing an RtD is hard work, you shouldn't expect to whip up a decent turn in 10 minutes or less.

Oh, and I'd gladly accept your "do it better" challenge. Nothing personal. But your turns are spectacularily sub-par.

[NUKE9.13]

Find brewing materials

[AussieGuy]

Okay you can do this then!!!! 

For f-ing sake give me some slack its the first bloddy one i have ever done!!

So say godbye to aussie guy and hello to Errol!

Hope you have fun!!!

[inaluct]

Godbye, Aussieguy. You did well for as long as it lasted.

[Errol]

Whoah, no need to overreact. I just wanted to help. Anyway.

Now that it's that way, I guess I need to accept the offer. Aussie, do you wish to get your character back?

Also... Zasit's action's missing.

[Zasit Alebath]

i will help emperor_jonathan

[Emperor_Jonathan]

You don't know where I am!

[Errol]

Turn 11 go.

Oh, I'll change ...a few things.

The character of Errol goes 'Poof'. In his place, a robed old man appears. You don't see his face, only his 'stache.

Enter 'Sarda' Errol. You may also call him 'The long hand of the plot' or simply 'Jerk'. Don't worry. He won't kill you.

Aussieguy - Do nothing.

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(5) You do nothing in a particularily fancy way, then you decide to start a party. You are now dabbling in various social skills. Then, you get teleported and stop partying.

Inaluct - Loot camel.

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(2) You pace around the camel looking for stuff to loot, but get teleported away before you can realize your intricate plan.

Cheetar - Trade old whip and stuff for new whip.

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(6) The elves already left, but you decide to ignore that and catch up to them. There, you make an offer they can't refuse:

You offer: No elf chunks
They offer: Their goods

Congratulations, you now have seven bins of rope reed cloth and an elven whip. You then get teleported away. Thankfully you already stored the stuff in your inventory.

EJ - Loot maceman.

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(4) After rummaging around a bit, you take the bronze mace the human used. You take it just before you get teleported.

Nuke - Find brewing materials.

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(2) You search that nice purple herb that made such good wine but can't seem to find it. You are subsequently teleported.

Zasit - Help EJ.

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(1) You don't know where Emperor is, much less that he needs help, so you settle on kicking pebbles instead. Guess what, the pebble ricochets off the wall and flies towards your leg. (4) You get teleported just in the nick of time.

Shoruke - Practise swimming by getting out of the water

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(6-1=5) You paddle furiously and get out of the water. You then try to dry your clothes but get interrupted by the teleportation. You're now Novice Swimmer, by the way.

'Sarda' (NPC)

He teleported all of the players to him. Near him is an weird large metal thing.

"Here, y'all have some weapons for your bleeping military jobs and a vehicle. Now go do the job the goblins wanted you to do. It was that cave to the north, right? Now all get inside..."

Statuses

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Aussieguy

Inventory
Copper Crossbow (-1 melee damage)
30 Bone Bolts (-1 ranged damage)

Skills

Crossbowgoblin
Bowyer
Dabbling Wizard
Dabbling Comedian
Dabbling Judge of Intent
Dabbling Liar
Dabbling Intimidator

Injury


inaluct

Inventory
Makeshift Torch (Fire, -2 damage)
Kitten (Pet)
Copper Mace (statistical damage malus)

Skills
Wood Burner
Furnace Operator
Macegoblin

Injury
Left arm broken (-1 to rolls involving that arm)
Pain

Cheeetar

Inventory
Worn elven whip (-1 attack rolls)
New elven whip
War Brown Bear (Companion, +1 damage)
Seven bins of rope reed cloth
Rock Idol
Rock Mug

Skills
Animal Caretaker
Animal Trainer
Lasher
Dabbling Mason
Dabbling Miner

Emperor_Jonathan

Inventory
Iron Pick (pierces!)
Bronze Mace
Adamantine Anvil(additional +1 to forging rolls, +1 to whatever action you want to do with it)

Skills
Miner
Anvil User

Injury
Right Foot, Broken (-1 to certain rolls)
Left Arm, Broken (-1 to use that arm)
Pain


NUKE9.13

Inventory
Copper Pick (-1 damage, pierces!)
2 Plump Helmets
Goblin Law Book

Skills
Miner
Brewer
Novice Liar
Novice Negotiator

Injury
(none)

Zasit

Inventory
Masterwork Iron Armor (+1 def rolls)
Steel Spear (+1 attack rolls, and it pierces)
Worn Food (Useless)
Dog Leather Waterskin (Empty)
Ear Cutting Knife (-1 to damage, +1 to cutting ears)

Skills
Butchery
Animal dissection
Speargoblin

Injury
(none)

Shoruke

Inventory
Copper short sword (statistical damage malus)

Skills
Furnace Operator
Weaponsmith
Swordsgoblin
Novice Swimmer

Injury
(none)

[Cheeetar]

I ride my War Bear into the cave, attacking any enemies.

[Errol]

Ah, shit, sorry about that. You're all in the metal thing. Attempts to get out will likely result in vomiting up one's intestines. There's a weird board full of instruments and a big red button. It is labeled: "Start".