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[Krashkube]

This sounds interesting, here's my app, I hope these cards are ok

Spoiler: WIP no longer (click to show/hide)

Name/Gender: Damon Willow, Male
Description: He is around 5"5, his black hair is cut very short and his eyes are a dull brown color.
World: Modern-day England
Backstory: Damon grew up in a poor home, and he often got into trouble for stealing food for himself. When he finally got into Duel Monsters with some of his buddies, he practiced every day but still lost most of the tournaments he entered due to his poor cards, until he finally won one.

After he won his first tournament, he and his friends dueled some more, before finally sneaking into a tourney where Shadow Duels were active. He would lose his first match, and find out exactly what happened when you lose a Shadow Duel soon after...

Structure Deck: Invincible Fortress

Signature Monster
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Sealed Guard, Exosphinx (x1)
EARTH | Rock | Rank 6 | Xyz | Effect
2 Level 6 Rock-type monsters
Must be Xyz Summoned, and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. Face-down monsters you control cannot be attacked or targeted by card effects. Once per turn, during either player's turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card, Special Summon 1 monster from your Graveyard in Face-down Defense Position.  Rock-type monsters you control can attack while in Defense Position. If they do, apply their DEF for damage calculation.
1400/2800
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Support Cards
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Lost Relic Golem (x3)
EARTH | Rock | Level 4 | Effect
Cannot be Special Summoned. Face-down monsters you control cannot be destroyed by card effects. When this card is destroyed (by battle or by card effect), Special Summon 1 Rock-type monster from your hand in face-up Defense Position (this Special Summon is treated as a Flip Summon).
200/2000

Flowing Sand Ambush (x3)
Normal Trap
Special Summon 1 Rock-type monster from your Graveyard. If you summon a Level 4 or lower monster, this Special Summon is treated as a Flip Summon.
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Bonus Support 4D
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Megarock Return Sphinx (x2)
EARTH | Rock | Level 6 | Effect
This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned (from your hand) by returning all banished Rock-type monsters you control to the Graveyard. This card gains 700 ATK and DEF for every card returned this way.
0/0

[nuclearwhale]

Just made my account on Duelportal. Also, I still have some question for you about my character, especially whether or not I'll still be able to join.

Does this seem good so far? I'm not that experienced with Yu-Gi-Oh, so I'll have trouble with the background and world, and I may have made some mistakes on wording or something. Does this seem strong enough so far? Also, any suggestions on what my third card (from stats under 2100) should be?
Thanks for your time.


...Ninja'd by Eritzap's application. Will this be first-come-first-served, or will you choose who makes it in?

Alright, so lets go over your cards one by one.

Spoiler (click to show/hide)

Theusaes, the Atlantean Revolutionary
Level 5 Water Sea Serpent/Effect
1750 Attack, 1600 Defence
Once per turn, you may banish all WATER monsters of level 3 or less in your discard pile, and send all of your banished WATER monsters to the discard pile; This card gains 200 Attack for every card currently banished by this effect, and 200 Defence for every card currently in the discard pile by this effect.

Alright. First things first, the discard pile is not a term in Yu-gi-oh, so change all instances of that phrase to "Graveyard." Additionally, replace all instances of "May" with "Can". The swapping of banish and grave is kinda cool, but it can be pretty easily broken in the right hands, as it has the potential to trigger massive amounts of effects. Overall, its a good boss monster, with potentially worrying applications.

Atlantean Commonfolk (x3)
Level 2 Water Sea Serpent/Effect
400 Attack, 600 Defence
When this card is sent to the discard pile, Special Summon a WATER Monster of Level 3 or below to the field, and add 1 WATER Monster of level 4 or less to your hand.

So... I have 2 questions, and no matter what the answers are, this card will probably be very broken. Anytime this card is sent to the grave (From anywhere, including banish pile, meaning it triggers off Theusaes) you get two things. For free. But, I dont know where you get these things from. Do you get them from your deck? Do you look into your trade binder and pick the rarest one? Do you drive to Konami HQ and protest outside the building until they print you the exact card you want? I need to know the locations of this cards targets, but no matter what they are, it doesn't look super balanced.

Deep-Sea Geyser (x3)
Continuous Magic Card
On your turn, you may activate one of the following effects-
 -When one of your banished monsters would be sent to the graveyard, you may instead send it to your hand.
 -Draw a card; If it is WATER Monster of level 3 or lower, discard it. If it is a non-WATER Monster card, discard it, and discard this card.

I'd suggest making this guy a trap as opposed to a spell, but other than that, It ought to be fine once its PSCT is better.

Atlantean Elite Guard (x2)
Level 4 Water Sea Serpent/Effect
800 Attack, 1800 Defense (Are only the base 2 custom cards limited to 1/2 of the Signature's attack?)
When played, If "Theusaes, the Atlantean Revolutionary" is not on your side of the field or in your hand, tribute this card: Special Summon "Theusaes, the Atlantean Revolutionary" from your deck or graveyard to your side of the field. If this card is in the Graveyard and "Theusaes, the Atlantean Revolutionary" is targeted by an attack or effect, you may banish this card; negate the attack or effect.

Alright, this guy probably shouldnt be able to be recycled as much by your boss monster. Shuffle it into the deck instead of sending it to grave, perhaps. Otherwise your monster is going to be very incredibly tanky.

[Kansa]

How do my cards seem?

[nuclearwhale]

How do my cards seem?

Aside from the minor worry of your fusion spell just being a better polymerization, you should be in the clear. Our suggested nerf is that you should only have it use pendulum monsters, or only summon Spellcasters. Slave magician is supposed to be your turn only, right? It'd be a bit too generic otherwise.

[Krashkube]

How do my cards look?

[Kansa]

Cool.

That is a good point. It does lack the ability to be searched as easy as polymerisation though as it lacks the name, so that does make it a bit weaker in that respect. I'll change it to only use pendulum materials though

Yeah Slave Magician is meant to be my turn only.

[Weirdsound]

How do my cards seem?

Aside from the minor worry of your fusion spell just being a better polymerization, you should be in the clear.

Cool.

That is a good point. It does lack the ability to be searched as easy as polymerisation though as it lacks the name, so that does make it a bit weaker in that respect. I'll change it to only summon spellcasters though

Yeah Slave Magician is meant to be my turn only.

Does your deck start with anything that can search Poly? If not, that isn't much of a downside in your particular circumstance.

I'd make it only able to fusion summon Spellcasters, or perhaps require at least one pendulum monster be used as Fusion material.

How do my cards look?

Man. I used to run Invincible Fortress back in high school. Good times.

I'm sure Nuke will have other comments, but but I think your boss monster should be a bit easier to summon. At the very least, I'd change its rank (and the level of your support monsters) to 5, 7, or 8 so you can use Guardain Spinx, Megarock Dragon, or Exxod as material. You might want to consider giving it alternative summoning conditions as well, as even with those changes, you wont have too many monsters in your deck that you can use to make it.

[Kansa]

I changed it so it can only use pendulum monsters as materials

[nuclearwhale]

I agree with Weirdsound's opinion that your boss and return sphinx should be Level 5 to make them easier to summon. Additionally, Flowing Sand Ambush may be a little bit too powerful in conjunction with Guardian Sphinx, so maybe something like "Special Summon 1 Rock-type monster from your Graveyard. If you special summon a level 4 or lower monster with this effect, this summon is treated as a Flip summon." or something along those lines.

[Krashkube]

I agree with Weirdsound's opinion that your boss and return sphinx should be Level 5 to make them easier to summon. Additionally, Flowing Sand Ambush may be a little bit too powerful in conjunction with Guardian Sphinx, so maybe something like "Special Summon 1 Rock-type monster from your Graveyard. If you special summon a level 4 or lower monster with this effect, this summon is treated as a Flip summon." or something along those lines.

Fair enough, i'll change Flowing Sand Ambush

But i don't see how making Exosphinx a Rank 5/7/8 would make it any easier to summon, as you only have 1 Level 5 (Guardian Sphinx), 1 Level 7 (Megarock Dragon) and 1 Level 8 (Exxod, who is hard enough to bring out), whereas you have 2 level 6s to use (Hieracosphinx and Criosphinx)

[nuclearwhale]

Fair enough, actually forgot about them and didn't see em while doing a quick look over the deck.

[Weirdsound]

I agree with Weirdsound's opinion that your boss and return sphinx should be Level 5 to make them easier to summon. Additionally, Flowing Sand Ambush may be a little bit too powerful in conjunction with Guardian Sphinx, so maybe something like "Special Summon 1 Rock-type monster from your Graveyard. If you special summon a level 4 or lower monster with this effect, this summon is treated as a Flip summon." or something along those lines.

Honestly, I'd just make it a trap. It has 'Ambush' in the freaking name. Slow it down a bit to prevent strange OTKs using Guardian Sphinx to clear the field from happening quite as often. If you do that, considering the fact that he only gets one copy of Sphinx, things should be fine. Plus, it would be hilarious to see some of those flip summon effects go off on the opponents turn.

I agree with Weirdsound's opinion that your boss and return sphinx should be Level 5 to make them easier to summon. Additionally, Flowing Sand Ambush may be a little bit too powerful in conjunction with Guardian Sphinx, so maybe something like "Special Summon 1 Rock-type monster from your Graveyard. If you special summon a level 4 or lower monster with this effect, this summon is treated as a Flip summon." or something along those lines.

Fair enough, i'll change Flowing Sand Ambush

But i don't see how making Exosphinx a Rank 5/7/8 would make it any easier to summon, as you only have 1 Level 5 (Guardian Sphinx), 1 Level 7 (Megarock Dragon) and 1 Level 8 (Exxod, who is hard enough to bring out), whereas you have 2 level 6s to use (Hieracosphinx and Criosphinx)

Forgot about those guys. Still will be a bit difficult to use I wager. I'd at least take out the 'can only be Xyz Summoned' clause, in case you get the opportunity to make some more support to summon it with more ease later on. I'd also just let it get away with using any level 6 monsters; Your deck gets brain control. You might be able to snag an opponents level 6 if you get lucky.

[OceanSoul]

Made the changes to my cards. Not sure how to hold back on the "worrying applications" in a reasonable way that (i think) Duelportal's systems could do. The ideas I do have on that are either limiting the amount of sent-to-gravegard effects that can apply, or limiting the max amount of cards that can be moved by both parts of the effect without the ability to choose the amount of cards moved. There are a few notes/questions for you/future me in the card drafts.

Edit: I added a "summary" of my character's backstory, as well as changing my base card deck to it's TCG Equivalent, from "Roar" to "Realm".
Edit2: I was wondering, where did you get the other 4 players from? y'know, the ones mentioned in the OP? Is the game being hosted, or at least recruited for, on another forum?

[Weirdsound]

Edit2: I was wondering, where did you get the other 4 players from? y'know, the ones mentioned in the OP? Is the game being hosted, or at least recruited for, on another forum?

On discord. With members of the community tied to the duelportal app/fake Yu-Gi-Oh card making.

[OceanSoul]

Discord, huh? So I guess I won't be able to see their character sheets? That's too bad.