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a_dumb_dwarf

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roleplay: raider
« on: December 17, 2016, 02:05:40 pm »

This is an RP set in a fantasy world


Character sheet:-
Name:
Age:
Abilities:
Disadvantages:
Personality:
Appearance:

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If you have n  disadvantages, you can have 2n abilities
My character:-
Name: Xyz
Age: 147
Abilities: all
Disadvantages: guess
Personality: cunning, ruthless (spell is Abjuration of Call Unspeakable Sea Serpent)
Appearance: large 2-legged mecha with staff

« Last Edit: December 18, 2016, 05:10:19 am by a_dumb_dwarf »
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TankKit

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Re: roleplay: raider
« Reply #1 on: December 17, 2016, 02:20:21 pm »

...I feel like this is WIP. Half the abillities don't have descriptions, and all the disadvantages say is 'You Should Know'... No rules either, annd you added the personality and appearance to your character, but not the actual character sheet. Plus, this has one of my pet peeves. Lack of capitals, not just in normal sentences, but in the the name to. Also, it looks like half the words are incomplete, what does n mean? I do see potential in something about being a raider, but maybe you should make sure it's finished. Attempt at constructive critisism cancelled because of lack of things to complement you about, and me not wanting to be an absoloute dick. Even though, what I just said was an insult... Well... ignore what I just said please.
« Last Edit: December 17, 2016, 02:22:20 pm by TankKit »
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“I would stop you from doing unholy experiments with my people, but I don’t actually care about their well-being and I kinda want to see what happens”

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a_dumb_dwarf

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Re: roleplay: raider
« Reply #2 on: December 18, 2016, 05:11:54 am »

Fixed all the issues TankKit highlighted
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TankKit

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Re: roleplay: raider
« Reply #3 on: December 18, 2016, 05:14:17 am »

Thanks?
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“I would stop you from doing unholy experiments with my people, but I don’t actually care about their well-being and I kinda want to see what happens”

Spoken like a true god TankKit.