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[Baloun]

I decied to start a small Dwarf Fortress story. It isn't clasicall succession fortress. If someone wants to take the helm I am not gainst it of course! My main goal is homever to tell a story using DF.
I started this playthrough on Rimworld forum. But I have quite a lot of fun with it so I decided to share here too! I will be updating the story as I play. If you wish to be dorfed (dwarf will be named after you), just write here!

I am looking forward to your commentaries.

Also, please, dont be afraid to point out my grammar mistakes. English isn't my native language but I am willing to learn!
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Dear reader,
my name is Tynun Udarerith and these are the pages selected from my diary. They are of finest craftsdwarship and they relate to the founding of fortress Idestun - "Rocksbound". I hope you will find what you are looking for... Or won't. I don't really care enough about you...

28th. Timber, 554
You see there are moments in life when you simply pull the short stick. Sometimes you end up robbed in the middle of the road, other time you get impaled by an murderous elephant, in a rare ocassion you drown in a badly designed well. My case of short stick was quite different. I became designed expedition leader in the service of dwarven queen Sarvesh from the kingdom Bodice of Skinning. Queen's decission was made known to me by a simple, friendly letter.



To be honest I kind of did deserved a jail time. It simply wasn't wise to do medical work on the queen while drunk. Yes, she lives. Yes, the cuts healed. Yes, the vomit was cleaned. Homewer it still wasn't the best decision in my life. You might ask why I didn't protest against the decision or what is wrong with a promotion like this... First things first - I did protest.



Homewer it wasn't very succesfull. As to the second question... Well starting a colony on a new, wild, dangerous, goblin-infested continent is quite a dangerous job. It is often linked to a gruesome case of short stick - as mentioned earlier. And I felt that I pulled mine in life already. And since I wasn't going to die there alone it was only logical to contact my best friend with a honest and truthfull proposition.



Balun, skilled miner and mason, off course quickly accepted and in a few weeks assembled his company. Meanwhile I tried to recruit others. It didn't went awfully good. My poster in the stables wasn't really successfull. But hey - I did what I could! I met with Balun in the autumn in Amostzes. He was quite surprised to see me alone but I truthfully explained that others will arrive soon! And technically I was right. Queen promised that should we survive, she will send others. Altough Balun looked a bit distracted he agreed to join me anyway. And so we set sail to the brave new world! Me, Balun and some new goons I had never seen in my life...

[Baloun]

From diary of Tynun Udarerith - Granite 555

15th. Granite, 555
In the name of queen Sarvesh, we arrived near the peak of mount Idestun. We shall strike the earth in the mor-... Well let's start again, shall we? We just battled heavy snowstorm on the way. Pack of feral wolves hunted us for days, we saw goblin patrols near the river and now we are camping just a few feets under the peak.



I can't say I hate this place thought. It would be a terrible understatement. I feel only burning, passionate animosity towards this god-forsaken, ugly, poor sod of a mountain. I was told we will find untold riches here - gold, platinum and silver just sticking out of the mountainside. I hoped I can at the very least became rich in this endeavor. You know the old saying - grief divided is made lighter. Maybe the smard dwarf behind this proverb didn't meant it like this but I sure am glad there are other poor dwarves with me!



While I admire Balun's optimism... I can't stand it. We are friends - dont get me wrong! I know Balun for many years. But here and now his frivoling whistling and optimistic humming is slowly getting on my nerves. But I digress... We are getting tired of sleeping outside. Trees are watching us menacingly, snow is tedious and cold - it is decided. On the 17th Granite, 555, we shall strike the earth under the peak od mt. Idestun.



22nd. Granite, 555
Miners under the guideship of Balun had digged out our provisional entrance. Dug deep into the second hilltop, it will serve as a fortification - in time, provided we will survive, there shall be even bigger entrance. Fact that we don't have to sleep under the sky, watched by those goddamned trees made miracles for our morale. I don't even wish to punch everyone now! Just five-six times a day maybe!



27th. Granite, 555
We are slowly digging in the mountain. While Balun is mining out our farms - small hall near the entrance with good soil - Asen is preparing plans for our provisional dining hall, dormitory, still and kitchen. All is well underway. Best news is homewer from nature itself. Winter is finally over, snow is quickly starting to meld and we are relieved! In other I think I am quite good manager. Everybody here works, I am lying nearby and nobody questions me. If that isn't the highest level of management then I don't know what is!

[Carefulrogue]

PTW.  This looks interesting, and what you have so far is neat.  Keep up the good work.

[Baloun]

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From diary of Tynun Udarerith
7th. Slate, 555
So the Small Hall, as Udib - our carpenter - named it, is finished. I have to say at least one thing now. Even tough I wasn't in the best mood when we arrived, there is something to this endeavor. I might have been a little bit over-negative these past weeks. This place might be a hole in the ground now... But I start to see what it might become. And the view from the hilltop is staggering. I might even thank the queen at this pace. Vutok, most skilled farmer and quite beautifull dwarfette, shown me the farms yesterday. Watching the seeds being planted... It was quite etheral moment. We were preparing to produce food here. They say that when you grow food, you are home. Maybe it's true. I certainly think so when I look into Vutok's beautifull, emerald eyes...




15th. Slate, 555
We have started with digging out our workshops in the lower levels. First, we shall set up carpenter and mason. Then, later, others. Young human traveller passed by. He promised to deliver our letters to the port. It was a good opportunity so we used it! Altough Vutok says I shouldn't I had to write a letter to our queen. Informing her about out initial success.



16th. Slate, 555
Today is a great day for dwarvekind. A our young fortress is slowly being built, we suffered from many troubles. We were unsure about our future, afraid even. Our morale was held up only thanks to our stoud, dwarven hearts. Today everything changes as we had finally got up and running the single most important place in the fortress - still!



22nd. Slate, 555
Our work goes on. We have finally nearly completed carpenter's workshop and wood storage. New beds are on the way. Vutok asked me to dug out some place for our hens - we could surely use some eggs. I agreed. We have a lot work these days - mostly hauling. I have to say that I am much more tired than I ever was when I worked at the court. Some might say that work is liberating. I would even agree. It is pretty quickly liberating me from all my strength!




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From the diary of Udib Zocololin

24th. Slate, 555
Dear diary,

the fuck is Tynun always smiling? It's seriously creeping me off! Enough to even start a diary about it...!

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Meanwhile in the court of queen Sarvesh...

Queen: "A letter you say, Elliotur?"
Elliotur: "Yes, my queen. A letter from Idestun."
Q: "Idestun?"
E: "Yes, queen. From the fortress Idestun, you know..."
Q: "Yes, I do know... Hand me that!"
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Q: "By all the damned gods... Either he went mad, there is impostor or... Or..."
E: "Or he found himself there, my que-"
And a mighty slap just landed on the face of queen's chamberer Elliotur.
Q: "You IDI-... Just... Just find some lowlife - worst of the worst... And send theme to Idestun. NOW..."

[neriractor]

Ooh, if any low-life migrant has any skill with gemcutting could she or he be named after me? I would also be okay with a hunter or a brewer 

[Carefulrogue]

A couple of issues with the last update.  You where using "dugged," as a past tense form of "dig."  "Dug" is the proper past tense form of dig.  Mostly it's a problem with the picture-letters. 

Vutok asked me to dug out some place for our hens

here, "dug" should be "dig." Your using it in the present tense, not past.  Make sense?

A our young fortress is slowly being built, we suffered from many troubles.

Was that supposed to be "as" instead of "a" out front there? First time through it didn't make much sense.  And, for that section, you seem to freely move between past and present tense.  Might be worth a reread to correct errors, or define that particular perspective you where looking for. 

That last bit, (no correction here,) cracked me up.  Excellent piece, errors aside.  And, if you're willing to dwarf incoming immigrants, I'd like one, preferably with military skills.  Keep it up!

[Baloun]

That last bit, (no correction here,) cracked me up.  Excellent piece, errors aside.  And, if you're willing to dwarf incoming immigrants, I'd like one, preferably with military skills.  Keep it up!

Hi there,

I am happy that you liked it. I will update when I have time. Work/family/hobbies are harsh combinations ...

Also thank you very much (sincerely) for pointing out my errors! I can read english without dictionary or problems... Homewer I was always behind in grammar. I remember when I was writing a summary of my disertatiton - it had to be in english - that was FUN for me Fun in Dwarf Fortress sense of course... So I really appreciate it!

[Baloun]

At the start of Felsite, Balun and Tynun standed together outside the entrance to Idestun. As Tynun was lazily biting a plump helmet, Balun murmured disgruntedly for a while before he spoke.
B: "So Tynun, tell me, where is the gold?"
T: "What gold?"
B: "That gold you spoke about in your letter. Remember?"
T: "Oh. That gold..." Tynun nodded his head.
B: "Exactly that gold." Balun twitched a bit.
T: "I lied you know."
Balun nodded with understandement and sipped some air.
B: "I kinda expceted that you know."
T: "Still - nice mountain, dont you think?"
B: "You old ass..."
Tynun smiled as Balun slowly walked back to the fortress. It was no big deal after all...

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From diary of Tynun Udarerith, expedition leader
12th Felsite, 555
Our dormitory is almost finished - Udib worked quickly on the beds. Our first harvest is also behind us. We have enough plump helmets to choke on them! I don't know how you see it but I honestly and fully hate plump helmets. I don't know much worse and bland plant to eat. But hey - we won't starve! Vutok is also quite happy that the harvest was successful... So I won't really be negative. I also have to say that I am quite happy that our relationship is yet secret. Due to some circumstances I wouldn't want everyone to know...


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From diary of Asen Bomreknanir, architect
6th Felsite, 555
So I heard that Vutok was porked by Tynun - our most honorable leader. Well based on what I heard about him back in mountainhomes I am quite suprised... Not by him - not at all... But maybe Vutok didn't heard those stories? Well I might have a word with her soon. After all she ought to know, doesn't she? She would have done the same for me if I was with him and she knew. Let's see how this unfolds.

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From diary of Tynun Udarerith, expedition leader
19th Felsite, 555
Dormitory is finally completed. We don't sleep on the ground anymore. It mightn't be the cozyest place but heck - after months of traveling bed is a luxurious commodity over here! And it's only provisional after all. Only thing that bugs me a little bit is the fact that doors are wooden. I have to say they smell quite nice. I think Udib mentioned they were from "cherry tree". Apparently that is one of the less dangerous specimen. Udib keeps saying that trees won't murder you in your sleep but I am just not sure... After all would my mom, nanny and grandmother lied to me all this years? Anyway THIS tree is dead... So I should be safe at any rate!



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From diary of Tynun Udarerith, expedition leader
21st Felsite, 555
It took a lot of digging but we are done with the stone storage. Mason and craftsdwarf's workshop is also completed. We will soon be ready to produce every piece of furniture and tool we need. I think we are really progressing fast here. To be truthfull I am a bit puzzled. When I was forced to join this expedition I was sure, we will perish on the way. When we arrived I was even more sure we will all die soon in a tragic accident and now? Now we are planning great hall... I am not very sure what to do now.


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22nd Felsite, 555 in the mason's workshop.
Balun was preparing his tool. He was right in an assumption that as a mason he will have a lot of work here. Tynun came inside and whistled.
Balun: "Yeah, yeah I hear you..."
Tynun: "Nice workshop you got there..."
B: "It would be a shame if something happened to it, right?"
T: "I guess... Sooo...:
B: "..."
T: "I was just gonna drop by..."
B: "What do you need?"
T: "Cant I just visit an old friend in his workplace?!" Tynun raised his voice
B: "You can... But you don't."
T: "True! But only because I had so much work in the mountainhomes!"
B: "You had work there?" Balun asked with disbelieve
T: "Well of course!"
B: "Not sure if indescreet -..."
T: "- hey, hey hey! No need to talk about past - allright... I was thinking about the great hall..."
B: "Well I don't think you have a problem there..."
T: "I don't?"
B: "Go ask Asen about it... I think I saw her scribbling furiously - plans I guess..."
T: "I guess I will!"

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From diary of Tynun Udarerith, expedition leader
25th Felsite, 555
Today I talked at length with our architect Asen. She is extremly anxious to star digging. She talked about two levels of great hall. In the upper level, there should be private dining rooms, bar... In the lower part there will be a grand, traditional hall. Under all of this, we should have new, bigger still and kitchen. She was also babbling abour bauxite tables and chairs... If life at the court of queen Sarvesh taught me anything it was not to argue with megalomania - so... That's what we'll have. I ordered to star the work on the second floor.



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From diary of Tynun Udarerith, expedition leader
28th Felsite, 555
We have struck native gold.


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From diary of Tynun Udarerith, expedition leader
29th Felsite, 555
We have struck platinum.

[Baloun]

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From diary of Tynun Udarerith, expedition leader
2nd Hematite, 555
Last days were hectic to say the least. With the discovery of gold and platinum right under our floors, morale rose up astonishingly. All the brooding and murmiring stopped. We know that we are rich now! I am already thinking how to spend my own share of precious metal! I am thinking about a solid bismuth bronze chest... And - hell - I want to eat only lobsters for the rest of my miserably rich life! I dont even care, that we don't have chairs yet! Hell... I wouldn't have imagined THIS when we started.



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From the diary of Sakzul Agonol, farmer
3rd Hematite, 555
That's it! Gold and platinum! I was almost sure that this Tynun guy was a fraud by now! But no - as he promised... Gold, platinum - more than enough for us to choke ourselves on it. I think I can really just take my share in few years and travel back to the mountainhome. God I love this... I may even pay a big escort so the journey will be safe, yes... I am sure that queen will accept a lot of my gold to make me a baroness. YESSS... Baroness... And I can have all the platinum jewelry I want... My preciousss.... O gods...

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On the sixth Hematite Balun and Tynun met once again...
Balun: "Look Tynun - now that we know about the metals there are some precautions we have to make."
Tynun: "You wouldn't think I will run away with gold!" yelled Tynun
B: "Well no... First of all it's quite heavy... And what would you do with a raw ore for Doren's sake... No I mean goblins - we saw them nearby..."
T: "Right... Goblins..."
B: "I think i could start training with my pick you know..."
T: "You?!" laughed Tynun out loud.
B: "Well why not?"
T: "You couldn't even kill a fly!"
B: "Have you ever tried to kill a fly with a pick?!" uttered Balun.
Tynun laughed and waved: "No neet for us to get in danger! As soon as our new colonists arrive, we'll have enough meat to defend ourselves."

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From the diary of Tynun Udarerith, expedition leader
15th Hematite, 555
Gold and platinum aside - we are working on the great hall. I never really tought it would be important to have something like this here. But with all the gold and platinum we HAVE to be representing! We are carving out the stone now but soon we have to smooth and engrave the pillars. When we dig out the lower floor, there will be no way to do that. Also I was thinking about the furniture in the hall. Green would be stylish... Vutok prefer red though. Balun said that anything will be fine as long as he can drink there. To each his own I guess...!



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From the diary of Udib Zocololin, carpenter
21st Hematite, 555
Tynun is still smiling. By Lisid why... Why... His ugly face wasn't meant for it... Hell... I don't even care for the gold now. What I care about homewer are those eggs. We finally got nest boxes in place. I fu*kin love eggs. I could eat eggs whole day. Hell I could eat only eggs... Well I like cheese more... Overall I think I don't even really like eggs... but anything is better than plump helmets...



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On the eve of 27th Hematite, 555. Dining room of queen Sarvesh Lashbreaches
Queen was sitting at the table, dining on a roasted cave lobster when her chamberer Eliottur entered...
E: "My queen! I am back from your assignement! I managed to find the worst possible company and I already sent it to Idestun!"
Queen grumbled: "So tell me, Elliotur, who did you sent..."
E: "Worst of the worst my queen! No good nobodies, no usefull skills at all! Thieves, murderers, those due for hammering! Only hungry mouths! With this squad I would be surprised if Idestun survive the next winter!"
Queen nodded slowly and pulled out a small letter with Tynun Udarerith's signature. She handed the letter to her chamberer: "Read."
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E: "Well... Do we really need that go-"
Queen threw fork right at her chamberer, as the fork lodged itself in his forehead, chamberer squeeked!
Q: "YES WE NEED GOLD AND PLATINUM ELLIOTUR! NOW GO DO SOMETHING USEFULL FOR ONCE IN YOUR LIFE!"
E: "Y-Yes my queen, what exa-"
Queen's knife just barely missed Elliotur's head as queen yelled: "FOR STARTERS QUICKLY GET ANOTHER BATCH OF COLONISTS... Gods..."

[Carefulrogue]

Alright, here's another batch of errors and suggestions for you:

But maybe Vutok didn't heard those stories?

"Hear," not "heard." Again past tense problem. I get it though, one of my teachers pointed out the vast numbers of past tense forms our language has.

It mightn't be the cozyest place but heck

Two issues here.  "Mightn't" sounds off to me, compared to "might not." And "cozyest" should be "coziest."

When we arrived I was even more sure we will all die soon in a tragic accident and now?

"...even more sure we will die" should be even more sure we would die."  Add a comma between "accident" and, "and."

Now we are planning great hall... I am not very sure what to do now.

"...are planning great hall" should have "the," or "a" before "great." Where you have "very" here could possibly be replaced, although it might be a matter of personal word choice here. 

He was right in an assumption that as a mason he will have a lot of work here.

"...that as a mason he will have..." should be like this:  "...that, as a mason, he will have..."  There is a term for this, but I don't know it.  Sounds better is all I can say. 

I ordered to star the work on the second floor.

"Star." You forgot a "t."

I could eat eggs whole day.

"I could eat eggs all day."

Queen was sitting at the table, dining on a roasted cave lobster when her chamberer Eliottur entered...

"The Queen..."
"...her chamberer, Eliottur, entered..."

Queen threw fork right at her chamberer, as the fork lodged itself in his forehead, chamberer squeeked!

Same problem here where you need "the" before Queen and chamberer. 

That's about it for this round.  The interplay between the Queen's mixed priorities, and the the actions/discoveries of the fort are a nice touch.  Was that planned or coincidence, by the way?  Regardless, keep up the good work.

[Baloun]

Thank you for your checking once again!

As to the other things... I'd say it was a planned coincidence ... I choose a good site. Shallow and deep metalS, soil, flux stone... I guessed that I have to get some good metals. I hoped either for iron (thus producing high quality steel) or... Gold/platinum. I Didn't really expectet to get gold AND platinum

[Fleeting Frames]

Shallow and deep metals - Sphalerite, Bismuthine, Native Copper and adamantine :p

But yeah, okay so far. Hope you find hematite, lignite or magnetite though.

And beautiful updates. Goddess of wealth, huh? How good's your best architect?

[Baloun]

Shallow and deep metals - Sphalerite, Bismuthine, Native Copper and adamantine :p

But yeah, okay so far. Hope you find hematite, lignite or magnetite though.

And beautiful updates. Goddess of wealth, huh? How good's your best architect?

As good architect as Tynun is a doctor... So... Quite horrible.

[Fleeting Frames]

Lock in a room with food, drink and material pile, then run a macro to build bil..100 supports? At 30 exp per support, that would need to be done 5 times to reach legendary.

[Baloun]

Lock in a room with food, drink and material pile, then run a macro to build bil..100 supports? At 30 exp per support, that would need to be done 5 times to reach legendary.

Too gamey for my taste... Still good advice, thanks!