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[Powder Miner]

Good luck mate

[TheBiggerFish]

Pun in eight.  I need to sleep.

[IamanElfCollaborator]

rip u bot

[ironsnake345]

Pardon me, I just finished choking on my foot.
the joke is that I put my foot in my mouth

[TheBiggerFish]

Uh...huh.

[Kassire]

Just gonna drop this down, thought I might try my hand at this. And yes, if boiled down to one word, my character is a loremaster.

Spoiler: Joshua Rees (click to show/hide)

Name: Joshua Rees
Age: 16 In all respects
Gender: Male
Sex: Male
Race: Human

Appearance: A somewhat lanky caucasian individual, standing at the height of 5'11". His hair is a very dark brown, that is fashioned in a short and slick style. His clothes usually varies, from a basic pairing such as a sweatshirt and jeans to a variety of chic fashions.

Personality: Joshua carries himself as a knowledgeable person, but does not attempt to push it upon other people. Certainly intelligent, he does come across as a teacher's pet many times, abiding by rules and giving the extra 10 percent when doing classwork, mostly coming from a fear of doing something too bad that he might end up in trouble. He does aspire to become some sort of leader in the academy, often trying to curry favor with those around him. Certainly not the most skilled, combative, athletic, or even magical, Joshua attempts to hold himself in battle, as for him, knowledge is the weapon of the thinking man.

Level: 1

HP:23     20+[CON*level][3]=23
Init:+2     DEX[2]+1d20 at the start of each combat.

Stats: 12
Constitution: 3 (Hardy)
Dexterity: 2 (Got hands)
Intelligence: 4 (6)
Resistance: 3 (Willpower, man)
Strength: 0 (A wimp)
Synergy:0 (Just a normal Human)

Perks:
Object-Based Divination: By the use of magic, ancient secrets, and the lore of fallen empires, Joshua is able to identify an object and/or foe’s characteristics, weaknesses, and abilities. All damage and rolls against this creature are increased by Joshua's INT score, if those attacking or rolling are aware of the characteristics, weaknesses, etc. This perk can only affect one target at a time, and would take a turn to change the target of this perk.

Affinities: Supernatural Languages, divination, Knowledge (Lore)

Actions: (Your attacks and abilities.)
AP:0/6   4+[2*level]

Basic Heal: Joshua, using his knowledge of ancient remedies, phrases, and occult techniques, he can heal incurred damages. Heals for 2d4+INT.

Basic Defense: Observing and noting the incoming attack, Joshua predicts and compares the attack to what he knows of and speaks an incantation, blocking 2d4+INT damage.

Weakening Incantation: An incantation designed to weaken a foe, allowing for a opening in which to attack. A static attack dealing 2d4+INT damage, while also giving the opponent a penalty of -5 on all rolls on it’s next action. The next attack from Joshua or an ally against the affected opponent also gains a +2 to their roll. 3AP

Incantation of Destruction: An incantation that is, fitting to it’s name, designed to damage and destroy objects and enemies. The words of the incantation derived from catastrophes and events that brought great damages. Deals 3d4+INT damage. 3AP

Inventory:
Tome of Notes and Lore: A giant tome in which Joshua notes rituals, customs, history, epics, and creates an amazingly complex and convoluted arrangement of various topics +2 to Intelligence and applications of Knowledge (Lore).

Polished Hardwood Staff: A simple weapon and tool, dealing 2d4+DEX damage. Fantastically cliche as well.

Ritual chalk: Different colored sticks of chalk for various rituals and runes.

Handy Rucksack: A rucksack that conveniently fits many objects within it, generally magically and environmentally resistant.

[TheBiggerFish]

Cool.  Hiya.

[Chevaleresse]

Semi-final sheet reviews inbound. . .

Screaming Maw:
Possibly reduce heal formula due to the issues we discussed, otherwise fine.

Isla:
Specify the rounding used on Rules of Movement.
Put your total RES after items in parentheses after your actual stat.

Arane:
Clarify when resets occur on CCC. I'm also not sure how often you'll actually get to eat foes; ask Fish on this one.
Limit the range on Web Withdraw to (Level).
Make Heighten Sense an active and/or nerf it to a bonus on rolls to detect stealthed enemies. Currently this is stronger than Nobunga's perk.

Nuadran:
Not a massive fan of the affinities, but consult Fish on these. As far as I know, these are supposed to be less specific abilities and more "what kinds of magic are you good at."
Level scaling seems fine on your masks. Gaining one every two levels seems reasonable.
Specify what you mean by "special attacks" on Black Water Shell. If it means status infliction, change this to a level-scaling resistance bonus, not outright immunity.
Consult with Fish if ignoring obstacles is fine with White Fire Snake. It -should- be acceptable, though.

Hecate:
The positive portion of Manipulation Specialist seems to scale a bit too well. Maybe just 1*the enemy's stat, instead. It should also impose a malus to resisting her statuses, rather than outright being unresistable, or increase her effective SYN only when opposed rolls are made to resist a status.
The wording seems a bit shaky on Circuit Disruption, but it otherwise looks fine to me.

Omnus:
RES is not a damage stat. Pick something else.
Just make each stack of Grow last two turns, and have each usage refresh the duration. Easier to track that way.
Root might be slightly too good, but tentative pass for now.
Slam is fine other than the aforementioned RES thing.
Burning Revenge should be "attacked an ally in the last three turns" or similar. Otherwise it looks fine to me.
No Escape! does entirely too much damage. Try SYN damage instead, and specify how long the wall of flame lasts.
Fiery Passion looks alright as long as the cooldown starts after the skill ends. You might want to specify that it can be ended early.
Possible nerf on the Basic Heal as part of a general reduction on the efficiency of heals. Consult the large piscine one.
Cold Embrace might last too long for what it does. Consider changing to (ALVL+1) duration scaling, or similar.
Sabaros's Basic Attack needs to go or take a heavy nerf. A two turn banish is way too good. Same story with the defense. Though, note that this would be a good action to take later.
Void Beam and Light Beam are fine, but currently redundant. Consider adding some sort of small rider effects to each.
Balance is ridiculously good. Halve this, maybe reduce it a bit more after that, and then it should be fine.

Andrew:
Specify a duration (or channeling) on Warped Space. Otherwise this looks fine.

Screechwing: No issues.

Rustle:
Slide should be a free action with a cooldown, and should scale somehow. Possibly with another rider effect.
Elaborate a bit on your formations.

August:
Both Perks need massive buffs. They're both quite weak at the moment. Additionally, your Flaw may be excessively crippling.
Divining Light is probably doable without an action at all. Therefore, you have 6 AP to spend, as your basics do not consume AP.

Ali:
Minor nitpick, but I'd still like it if you gave Summons a proper name.
Consider adding a small rider effect to Deathgleam.
Specify what Blind does, in detail. Consult Fish for how strong it should be.

Edwinn:
Berserk may need a buff. Perhaps a bonus Basic Attack every other turn?
Feint attack also weak. Add some sort of bonus damage or rider effect, or get some sort of bonus back for failure.
Rest can scale by ALVL or even ALVL*2. Alternatively, give it a small heal as well.

Nia:
Needs a status list, or specify that it stores statuses from allies.

Joshua: Needs to be completed, obviously.

[Powder Miner]

Done and done.

[TheBiggerFish]

Minor quibble, I prefer [] not () but either are fine.

That goes for everybody with stat-boosting equipment.

I'll look at Nuadran's sheet in a second.

Black Water Shield:Yeah, what Murdoc said.  Also, if you want that bonus AND it to absorb 3d4+STAT, it needs a cooldown.

[Kassire]

Did my character, too weak, too strong?

[Chevaleresse]

Give me a moment to take a peek.

[ironsnake345]

Fixed most, but what the hell is rider effect?
Edit: it woulda been a good idea to post that AFTER going back to edit, eh?

[Chevaleresse]

As in, an effect other than damage on a damage dealing move.
edit: i also don't see your updates, which sheet are you updating?

[TheBiggerFish]

EVERYONE: IF YOUR SHEET IS NOT THE ONE IN MURDOC'S COLLECTION OF SHEETS, PLEASE SAY SO AND LINK THE CORRECT SHEET.