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[Twinwolf]

I intend for my character to be mostly a supporting party member. I just want them to have a way to defend themselves if necessary.

[AbstractTraitorHero]

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I would like to get everyone's opinions on the backstory and any suggestions that could be used to improve it also if my character has been training for 6 years in most likely the army what would their rank be?

My god sanure this looks awesome! Reserving!
I shall slowy edit this stuff in.
Name:Geliebte
Age:22
Gender:female
Appearance:
General appearance face wise

Armor she wears and general body type

Personality:
Background:AbstractTraitorHero on Today at 05:56:45 pm
Gelibete was a happy child for much of her life she stayed with her family which consisted of mother and father and big brother Colleen. Gelibete lived with her family out far away from the nearest town but close to several monasteries and unfortunately Gorgon lairs and on her 16th birthday they attacked her home. Gillebete desperately tried to fight them it ended with having her face scarred and an eye blinded as she was forced to watch her parents bloody death's and her brother being ripped in half the Gorgons left her there in pain as she grabbed her brother desperately refusing to believe she couldn't save him she rushed out into the wilds looking for a monastery...she made it halfway before beohtric found her lying in the snow a corpse in her hand herself nearly dead from blood loss and frostbite and beotric brought her back to his holy order saving her life....when she woke up after several months of seemingly being in a coma. She was strange and surreal making up stories left and right covering up her own weaknesses desperately coming up with feats of valor and bravery to comfort herself and she slowly seemed to believe it herself until bandits attacked the holy order she and beohtric were at. Filled with rage Geliebte grabbed a suit of armor and a Lance and she fought and held them back until help arrived. She had nearly died but had shown great potential. In the following years she was trained rigorously to fight, hold the line, and to wear heavy armor determined to never lose anything again and now after all these years she's finished with her training and has come back to visit beohtric her hero she'd never have made it this far without brohtric and she want's nothing more right now then to make her hero beohtric proud of her.

Class:Guardian(this determines the skills you can learn and any additional perks you might be able take. Applies mostly to combat)
Job:Veteran soldier? ((Was in the army for roughly 6 years training has almost certainly seen some action probably got promoted at some point?)) (defines what you can and can’t do outside of combat)
Level: 1 (caps at 30)
EXP: 0/1000

HP: 40+8=48
SP: 15+(1*2)=17    (Stamina, for non-lethal fighting)
Init: 1+1d20 at the start of each combat.
DR: 5+(Total Armor bonus)

Stats: (18 to spend. Stat cap of 5+Level. +4 Points per level up)
Strength:4 (How hard you strike! Beat ‘em up!)
Dexterity:0 (Are you a legolas or a legolad? Determines Ranged damage and the like.)
Intelligence:1(How smart you are when combining materials.(what? Did you expect something witty?))
Charisma:4 (How charming you can be, you charmer, you.)
Agility:1((fastfastfastfastfast)Your speed in combat and Dodge chance. (Gotta go fast!))
Constitution:8(How well you tank up the damage. (Does not come with actual tanks))


Perks:Defender of the innocent bane of evil:When defending the innocent ((children,townsfolk people who generally can't protect themselves)) she gains +2 constitution +2 strength and will always go first in initiative.
Second perk religiously knowledgeable:+2 when talking to monks or religious orders as she understands their beliefs
Third perk:Soul boon:Her soul burns brightly and if her soul is being stolen the enemy has to roll agasint her constitution stat and they have to roll it twice and succeed both times to take it.
Negative perk 1 Damn Gorgons!:she loses her cool around these creatures scared and terrified she loses 2 strength when fighting them.
Never hurt a innocent:She is physically incapable of hurting a innocent and suffers a -2 to any roll of attacking them and would have her stats lowered by 2 if she even attempts it successful or not.

Equipment:A steel Lance high quality full soldier armor set ((like the armor picture)) A thick big sturdy shield and a quiver of steel javelins ((roughly 24)) some kind of identification of rank on her armor probably made of metal andcompassa utility knife and a knapsack for carrying food and other essentials ,a compass and other survival tools the army would be given as well as any money she might have been given for her service.(Your starting equipment. GMs will approve or veto these.)

Skills:Ravaging annoyance: when activated enemy's must roll their charisma to avoid attacking her.
Heroic charge:she charges forward for a powerful attack her damage is doubled for this attack it has a cool down of one turn
Lance twirl she can spin her Lance to block and disarm foes by rolling her strength vs their Dex.(Your know moves and abilities. These are learned at level up, or by spending platinum on a skill trainer.)


Inventory: (Where your earned loot and other items go. Anything not equipped or worn goes here.)

Done just need it reviewed.

[Twinwolf]

Fix the spoiler pls

[AbstractTraitorHero]

How it dosent seem to be working...

[Twinwolf]

Your issue seems to be that you're trying to put a spoiler within a spoiler, which just breaks the tags. Take the appearance spoiler out and put them in a separate spoiler from the sheet.

[Chevaleresse]

1. Constitution is over the limit
2. Needs equipment.
3. I think perks are supposed to be bundled together if they have a negative effect, rather than separate positive and negative ones.
4. Skills: Lance Twirl needs some sort of roll. Heroic Charge is weak, it needs a cooldown instead of a simple once/battle use. Ravaging Annoyance is CON vs. CON? Needs clarification, and also a reason as to why being more durable pisses monsters off enough to hit you over someone else.
5. Please fix your spoiler tags.

A non-character note, but you could do to work on punctuation a bit, your sheet is hard to read.

[AbstractTraitorHero]

Yes the punctuation thing is more of a thing that happens because I'm trying to focus on spelling correctly more then anything.
2 has equipment
4 I am using con kinda like spirit or intimidation in that skill they attack because she's annoying and looks like a threat.
I have fixed the spoiler tags
What is the con limit?
I have the perks as separate because I took as I can make 1 free positive trait and two more positive traits but then I have to add two negative traits.
I agree with the first two skill things.

[Sanure]

Kingmurdoc has good points, but:

Twiling lance needs to drop the magic negation. Mundanes do not have magic protection unless the lance is somehow being constantly blessed or has rune marks, which is not available at level 1 >.>

[Twinwolf]

Abstract, I've fixed your spoilers.

Spoiler: Sheet (click to show/hide)

Name:Geliebte
Age:22
Gender:female
Personality:
Background:
Gelibete was a happy child for much of her life she stayed with her family which consisted of mother and father and big brother Colleen. Gelibete lived with her family out far away from the nearest town but close to several monasteries and unfortunately Gorgon lairs and on her 16th birthday they attacked her home. Gillebete desperately tried to fight them it ended with having her face scarred and an eye blinded as she was forced to watch her parents bloody death's and her brother being ripped in half the Gorgons left her there in pain as she grabbed her brother desperately refusing to believe she couldn't save him she rushed out into the wilds looking for a monastery...she made it halfway before beohtric found her lying in the snow a corpse in her hand herself nearly dead from blood loss and frostbite and beotric brought her back to his holy order saving her life....when she woke up after several months of seemingly being in a coma. She was strange and surreal making up stories left and right covering up her own weaknesses desperately coming up with feats of valor and bravery to comfort herself and she slowly seemed to believe it herself until bandits attacked the holy order she and beohtric were at. Filled with rage Geliebte grabbed a suit of armor and a Lance and she fought and held them back until help arrived. She had nearly died but had shown great potential. In the following years she was trained rigorously to fight, hold the line, and to wear heavy armor determined to never lose anything again and now after all these years she's finished with her training and has come back to visit beohtric her hero she'd never have made it this far without brohtric and she want's nothing more right now then to make her hero beohtric proud of her.

Class:Guardian(this determines the skills you can learn and any additional perks you might be able take. Applies mostly to combat)
Job:Veteran soldier? ((Was in the army for roughly 6 years training has almost certainly seen some action probably got promoted at some point?)) (defines what you can and can’t do outside of combat)
Level: 1 (caps at 30)
EXP: 0/1000

HP: 40+8=48
SP: 15+(1*2)=17    (Stamina, for non-lethal fighting)
Init: 1+1d20 at the start of each combat.
DR: 5+(Total Armor bonus)

Stats: (18 to spend. Stat cap of 5+Level. +4 Points per level up)
Strength:4 (How hard you strike! Beat ‘em up!)
Dexterity:0 (Are you a legolas or a legolad? Determines Ranged damage and the like.)
Intelligence:1(How smart you are when combining materials.(what? Did you expect something witty?))
Charisma:4 (How charming you can be, you charmer, you.)
Agility:1((fastfastfastfastfast)Your speed in combat and Dodge chance. (Gotta go fast!))
Constitution:8(How well you tank up the damage. (Does not come with actual tanks))


Perks:Defender of the innocent bane of evil:When defending the innocent ((children,townsfolk people who generally can't protect themselves)) she gains +2 constitution +2 strength and will always go first in initiative.
Second perk religiously knowledgeable:+2 when talking to monks or religious orders as she understands their beliefs
Third perk:Soul boon:Her soul burns brightly and if her soul is being stolen the enemy has to roll agasint her constitution stat and they have to roll it twice and succeed both times to take it.
Negative perk 1 Damn Gorgons!:she loses her cool around these creatures scared and terrified she loses 2 strength when fighting them.
Never hurt a innocent:She is physically incapable of hurting a innocent and suffers a -2 to any roll of attacking them and would have her stats lowered by 2 if she even attempts it successful or not.

Equipment:A steel Lance high quality full soldier armor set ((like the armor picture)) A thick big sturdy shield and a quiver of steel javelins ((roughly 24)) some kind of identification of rank on her armor probably made of metal andcompassa utility knife and a knapsack for carrying food and other essentials ,a compass and other survival tools the army would be given as well as any money she might have been given for her service.(Your starting equipment. GMs will approve or veto these.)

Skills:Ravaging annoyance: when activated enemy's must roll their constitution to avoid attacking her.
Heroic charge:she charges forward for a powerful attack her damage is doubled for this attack it can only be used once a battle.
Lance twirl she can spin her Lance to block out magical attacks and disarm foes.(Your know moves and abilities. These are learned at level up, or by spending platinum on a skill trainer.)


Inventory: (Where your earned loot and other items go. Anything not equipped or worn goes here.)

Spoiler: Appearance (click to show/hide)

General appearance face wise

Armor she wears and general body type

[USEC_OFFICER]

@Twin, Because most alchemists are non-combat alchemists. You don't have to be

So... Pyromaniac alchemists are totally fine then?

Sanure? _{I want to throw fire everywhere, damn it.}

[AbstractTraitorHero]

Kingmurdoc has good points, but:

Twiling lance needs to drop the magic negation. Mundanes do not have magic protection unless the lance is somehow being constantly blessed or has rune marks, which is not available at level 1 >.>

Can it have fire negation?

[Shadestyle]

My character is a little in a little out of combat, mostly a support alchemist for solving puzzles and generally being helpful.

He has combat abilities however.

Basically, while other charecters rely on skills, alchemists rely on items in combat, which is why is Con is his second highest stat, since he'll be blending brews in the middle of a barfight.

Just buy a ton of Black oil or Clear oil in your starting items, like i did, or take a page out of the Poultice and have a supply of oil that has to be replenished.

[Twinwolf]

Kingmurdoc has good points, but:

Twiling lance needs to drop the magic negation. Mundanes do not have magic protection unless the lance is somehow being constantly blessed or has rune marks, which is not available at level 1 >.>

Can it have fire negation?

Why do you need some kind of negation? Magic is not a thing you have access too and that's the only way I can think of something negated.

[Shadestyle]

Have an item that does that, frozen wasteland generally has ice, and dirt is a good way to put out fire.

[IamanElfCollaborator]

sheet mostly started
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