Alright friends, I will give time to the end of the week before I choose 4-5 people. Applicants are divided in 4 groups.
Those who have not filled in their sheet: If you want to enter, please do so before the end of the week. Do you need help, i'd be willing to help.
Good to go: Basically if you are not on the next one, then your sheet is fine.
Needs work:
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I have no idea what this this. But as it is, I wouldn't even consider it as a low contender. If you don't feel like making an even remotely decent character, go join a minimalist rtd. They'd appreciate it more.
Bio: Raised in a community orphanage michelle was taught to be loyal to be kind and to do what your told for years she suffered from not being able to identify or express herself.Leaving the orphanage was a breath of fresh air she felt alive for once she realized that really the only thing that mattered was honesty.
Suggestion: Raised in a community orphanage, Michelle was taught to be loyal, kind and obedient (Why was she thought to be like this?). For years she suffered from not being able to identify her purpose in life or to express herself (Why couldn't she? Who forbade her to? Is it related to the earlier part?). Michelle felt like breathing in fresh air once she left the orphanage, she was finally able to look for meaning in her life. For once Michelle felt alive, realizing that the only thing that mattered, was being honest (Why did it matter to her? How did she come to realize this?).
You really need to work on the story cohesion, punctuation, some of the wording and it's still bolded. While I get the feeling that you might not be native English or good at English, you get bonus points for trying
. Maybe you were drunk at that time, who knows. As example of what I mean, there is yours and what I would suggest. Mine is in bold.
Yet to come: If you are interested, you can still apply. It''s not first come, first get.