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« Reply #45 on: March 13, 2016, 04:45:28 am »

Looks good to me.

Also, ATH. You seem to have 15 stat points still left to spend.
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« Reply #46 on: March 13, 2016, 09:37:40 am »


Name: Jerry Cooker
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Notable Characteristics: Jerry is a scrawny chap who doesn't dress well. Clean shaven, dressed in a t-shirt and jumper. He keeps flammables in his pockets.
Class: Firebat
Starting Suit: Eidolon-A
Starting Skills:
Competent Flame-thrower-user/firestarter: He REALLY likes to set things on fire. He believes that stuff will be cleansed by holy flames.
Competent Stunt Pilot/acrobat: He likes to go FAST, really fast. Also, acrobatics.
Novice Grenadier: Big booms in a compact package.
Novice Demolitions Guy: He can analyze structures to tell how best to take them apart with explosives.
Bio: Suffering from parental neglect, Jerry is a deliquent with multiple convictions for arson. He traded conscription for jail time and put his skills to work in the military where he got to legally blow up stuff.

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Starting Stats: Which stats your character will have. You can choose from the following stats:

    Strength: 10
    Dexterity: 14
    Intelligence: 3
    Constitution: 10
    Perception: 5
    Charisma: 3
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« Reply #47 on: March 14, 2016, 03:25:32 am »

Alright friends, I will give time to the end of the week before I choose 4-5 people. Applicants are divided in 4 groups.
Those who have not filled in their sheet: If you want to enter, please do so before the end of the week. Do you need help, i'd be willing to help.

Good to go: Basically if you are not on the next one, then your sheet is fine.

Needs work:
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I have no idea what this this. But as it is, I wouldn't even consider it as a low contender. If you don't feel like making an even remotely decent character, go join a minimalist rtd. They'd appreciate it more.

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You really need to work on the story cohesion, punctuation, some of the wording and it's still bolded. While I get the feeling that you might not be native English or good at English, you get bonus points for trying ;). Maybe you were drunk at that time, who knows. As example of what I mean, there is yours and what I would suggest. Mine is in bold.

Yet to come: If you are interested, you can still apply. It''s not first come, first get.
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« Reply #48 on: March 14, 2016, 06:33:33 am »

I am a native English speaker. But I have dysgraphia and it was rather late when I made that sheet.
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« Reply #49 on: March 14, 2016, 09:27:59 am »

I am PTWing.
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« Reply #50 on: March 14, 2016, 09:48:21 am »

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All stats start at 3, so you still have 18 points to use.

Also, your bio's still really damn short and you might not get in thanks to that. My suggestions are to expand on whatever finally made him snap and start burning things. Just being neglected doesn't feel like a good enough trigger for arson. I'd also make Jerry a bit older so he can get a higher track record on burninating the countryside before finally getting caught.

OP states that the players are mercenaries, so him being in the military doesn't really work. I'd change that to a Penal Mercenary Corporation. Basically, they specialize in using the dregs of society no one cares about (that would end up being executed or stuck in jail for a looong time) as a cheap alternative to professional mercs.

Then you could expand the backstory once again by writing a bit about how he did in the PMC. Perhaps he made enemies? Or a friend? Maybe even got a friend who then got killed by said enemies, thus making him swear vengeance? Something that the GM could use during the game to spice it up, so to speak.
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« Reply #51 on: March 14, 2016, 10:06:42 am »

I am a native English speaker. But I have dysgraphia and it was rather late when I made that sheet.
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I see, sorry. Forgive me then for saying that, but for me it seemed like some form of having trouble with typing and I wouldn't dare to claim some disease as the culprit, over having trouble with a language. Which is quite common, really.

But bio looks fine now. There isn't really a reason as to how she came to be a mercenary, but I can easily assume that it's because of the freedom (and the mad amount of scrilla), mercenary works offers and how much free-er can you get on a freshly discovered planet?

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All stats start at 3, so you still have 18 points to use.
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This guy gets it. I'm not keen on paddling everyone with a poorly written bio. It's just that the amount of work that you put into the bio, translates into the amount of things I can do in the RTD. It makes or breaks RTD's (Not so minimalist RTD's, but I hate them with a passion), where you either perform repetitive work or actually play an engaging story with a meaningful ending.
« Last Edit: March 14, 2016, 10:23:27 am by Mr.Zero »
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« Reply #52 on: March 14, 2016, 11:10:37 am »

Yes it's a quite annoying thing and people with it commonly have trouble with spelling,punctuation and grammar.Because it can be hard to retain said information I can't write coherently without feeling hand cramps my typing would be just as bad if I didn't get typing classes.To be honest one of the reasons I joined bay12 is to help overcome my writing deficiency and fix the problems in my typing.
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« Reply #53 on: March 18, 2016, 12:46:54 pm »

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« Reply #54 on: March 18, 2016, 05:03:52 pm »

Ah, sorry for the lack of precision Zero. In Novice Scanner, I meant something like a mix of map information gathering : units/lifeforms present, landscape, etc... It would also include knowledge of how to use scanning/mapping devices.

Tell me if it is okay/too much. As for a name, I don't have much idea.

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« Reply #55 on: March 18, 2016, 05:56:24 pm »

Information gathering, along with navigation and mapping? Sounds like a scout to me.
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« Reply #56 on: March 18, 2016, 07:38:31 pm »

Let's go with Scout then. I changed my sheet accordingly.
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« Reply #57 on: March 18, 2016, 11:43:01 pm »

Is it too late for me to join?
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« Reply #58 on: March 19, 2016, 12:57:38 am »

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« Reply #59 on: March 19, 2016, 07:53:51 am »

All of your points sum up to 61. That means you have 2 points unspent.

I'd change Knife Wielder into Blade User. Since you probably would want something bigger than a knife to kill monsters.

Your bio's certainly better than Aigre's, but I think you might want to expand it a bit. For example, I wouldn't put a rookie to take out major political players. Some grueling training would be in order and then she would start working her way up from small fry to important people.

19 is not an age I would expect from a seasoned assassin.

Also, her father seems to be surprisingly open about his line of work. I mean, she started to get interested about her father's government work that he probably shouldn't really talk about and he's like 'hey, wanna kill people?'. Perhaps he could've noticed that she had some talent in shooting (I mean, who doesn't take their daughter out to a shooting range sometimes, right?)? What if he was grooming her to be his successor from a young age with her never really realizing it?

'She grew tired of killing mere mortal men' - so she's a bit of a blood knight? You could write up how exactly she began to enjoy the thrill of a killling.
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