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« Reply #15 on: July 07, 2015, 02:27:56 pm »

For the silent and/or active reader I have. I will update tomorrow.
If someone who reads this has a plan to get rid of angry butcher please tell.
I'm suffering writer's block and this IS a roll/ suggestion game after all.
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« Reply #16 on: July 07, 2015, 02:35:39 pm »

I don't want to insult you, but I think I know why people aren't posting.
1. You're writing isn't proof read very well. It seems odd, and seems a bit incomprehensible.
2. You put it in the RTD section, and these games go in the main FR/RP section.
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10/10.
Wants to rape and enslave my innocent night faeries ;-;

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« Reply #17 on: July 07, 2015, 03:05:31 pm »

Thanks. To be honest, I was waiting for someone pointing out the flaws in my method.
I'm writhing everything directly before posting and proof read afterwards, thought it was decent enough.
English is not my native language and I use google translate for fixing mistakes.
 Can you give an example of where I missed with my lines so I can grow in it?
Otherwise thank you for the feedback and reacting on the story.
Thanks to you, I had enough confidence to keep posting even though I didn't get much reactions.
If someone still enjoys it then I will keep writing (after all, it's fun to make.)
So thanks, again, for the feedback and the funny comments. :)
« Last Edit: July 07, 2015, 03:07:05 pm by pikorge »
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« Reply #18 on: July 07, 2015, 03:09:42 pm »

banana en peel it quickly. A minor mistake, yet a noticeable one. Again, I mean this as no insult.
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Wants to rape and enslave my innocent night faeries ;-;

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« Reply #19 on: July 07, 2015, 03:34:12 pm »

I see what you meant. (I probably switched the languages at that moment)
I thought it was going to be worse.
I'm going to proofread everything again.
also going to replace this game so its in the right section.
Thanks for the heads up and keeping the flame burning. :-)
« Last Edit: July 07, 2015, 03:45:36 pm by pikorge »
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« Reply #20 on: July 07, 2015, 08:05:36 pm »

Use our new found intelligence to challenge the butcher to a dance-off, if he happens to attempt to try and attack us, dance into a flying roundhouse to his face! Be stylish.

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« Reply #21 on: July 07, 2015, 09:57:32 pm »

Put the pie on the floor and look at him intelligently, raise your hands and wave in surrender. When he is confused that youre a gibbon yet so intelligent you take the pie and run away.
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« Reply #22 on: July 08, 2015, 01:04:59 pm »

Haha YESSS!! More readers! XD
You run into an ally.
It doesn't take the butcher long before he rounds the corner.
He stops, however, when you place the cake on the bin beside you and do the surrender sigh with you hands.
He doesn't fall for your little scheme and steps to you, axe ready to slash you apart. (roll 3 + 2 from dumb butcher =5)
Before he gets too close though, you do the stop sigh and he obeys, if only to have a laugh at your expense.
You decide to start off with the moonwalk but you didn't get much farther with that.
He approaches again and the only advantage you got out of your plan is more space. ( roll 7 )
Guess the butcher's IQ and the rolls are against you.
Both are too low.

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« Last Edit: July 08, 2015, 01:07:23 pm by pikorge »
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« Reply #23 on: July 08, 2015, 03:17:49 pm »

Well we had no trouble climbing up two the second level of a building, escape with the pie by climbing the buildings. Do not harm the human, because I think the butcher, lets call him Fernando for now, could become a pet of ours ^^
« Last Edit: July 09, 2015, 12:12:40 am by Detoxicated »
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« Reply #24 on: July 08, 2015, 10:47:52 pm »

Make sure to taunt Fernado a little bit with our pie. Sit ontop of the roof and smirk at him while we eat our pie?

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« Reply #25 on: July 09, 2015, 04:01:18 pm »

You quickly take your pie and start climbing the wall at a fast rate, even though you are slowed down cause of you holding your pie with the left underhand/paw?
Fernardo, as you affectionately call the butcher, attempts to chop your leg off but is way to slow. ( roll 20 + 2 monkey power - 2 holding pie = 20)
He curses loudly as he attempts to throw it at you.
His anger and your fast paced climbing causes him to miss again and his axe got stuck in the wall too. roll 15 + 2 monkey power + 2 anger issues Fernando - 2 holding pie = 17)
Get back here, ya stupid furball! You enjoy the sound of him being frustrated while Hopping on the top of the flat roof.
You switch your pie from underleft hand to right hand and let your legs dangle over the edge of the roof.
You place the cake on your lap and dig in while enjoying the new miniseries titled : how quick you get Fernardo red.
While he stomps on the grounds Fernardo feels some droplets touch his head and realized you spit on him.
With a last murderous glare shooting your way he leaves the alley.
You decide to see what he's up to and follow him from across the roof.
He knocks on the door of the house your standing on.
The door opens and you make sure you're out of side.
If Fernardo convinces them to let him in or help him catch you, you could be in trouble.

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« Last Edit: July 09, 2015, 04:06:51 pm by pikorge »
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« Reply #26 on: July 10, 2015, 10:45:42 am »

Quickly finish the cake and then steal the butcher knife and run off
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« Reply #27 on: July 10, 2015, 03:20:05 pm »

You greedily eat the other half of the pie before you start paying attention to what they're saying.
And I'm telling you that there's an annoying monkey on your roof, eating an apple pie while laughing at my expense! Fernardo was very annoyed with the inhabitant of this house at this point and you try to stifle a laugh to prevent being noticed.
Uh. I think you have to lay off the pills man. The other human, as one of your voices call the species, seems to keep his cool but was annoyed with the butcher.
Do I look like an addict to you?!
Well... With all the crazy talk and the saliva on your face.
That's because he spat on me!! You figure you'd better go. As much fun as this is, you never can be careful enough with karma.
Before you leave, you go back to where the axe is stuck in the wall.
You yank it out with an upwards push.
Holding the axe in your mouth (ya need something to carry this thing), you get back on the  roof and jump over to the next one, and the next one until you're far enough from Fernardo.
The roof you're now on is like a triangle, and has a window in it.
You're also close by the city park that's decorated with tree's, bushes...

What you're gonna do now?

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« Reply #28 on: July 11, 2015, 12:02:56 am »

Carefully scout out the park and try to find a water source, do this without being noticed
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« Reply #29 on: July 11, 2015, 05:08:11 pm »

You ascend the house you're currently on by climbing off the wall.
No one noticed you as there aren't really that much people around the park, and
The few couples that are around are to busy with one another to pay attention to their surroundings.
Still, once you are in the park, you hide between bushes and wait until the coast is clear before going to another.
This happens in a zigzag pattern.
After some minutes have past, you decide to climb one of the trees to travel faster and to get a better vision of your surroundings.
After some time swinging through the three's, you find something your intellectual mind calls a fountain that seems to be in the center of the big park.
There are some couples there so you wait in your tree for almost two hours before the last pair leaves.
You go out of the tree and go take a drink from the clear water.
You try washing away the stinky smell, it helps a bit.
You then decide to enjoy  yourself some more in the trees and find a rope hanging on a branch.
You untie the rope and use it to bind the axe round your waist like a belt.
Time slips away as you scout the park further while swinging from branch to branch and the sun starts setting.
You make yourself comfortable on a branch and try to sleep.
Time flew by cause you had so much fun.
Feeling the taste of freedom once more after all those months of torture.
It was fun alright, but a tear rolls down as you think of how it's not the same.

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