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[escaped lurker]

It looks like you spent an extra point, but I really like it. I'd recommend changing the plant creature to just be fire vulnerability. Your size and thorns should give you a fairly large advantage in combat without any special trait related to resisting physical attacks.

That I did - somehow thought we had 4 starting points. Either way, fixed it now, added some more fluff and also finished the draft for my character.

Should any of the two still need work or clarification, please do tell.

[Urist Arrhenius]

I'm definitely still accepting and encouraging sheets, but I figured I'd write down my thoughts on all of the sheets so far.

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Your sheet is good: all of the skills balance out and the description is detailed. Your also the only eldritch being to have applied so far (I wonder what derm is up to...). My only comment would be that your description could include something about your character's interest in necromancy.

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Monster type is good, only small note is that by choosing the undead presence you automatically get the undead aesthetic, but that's minor and I can throw that in when sheets get compiled. I look forward to seeing a character.

-snip-

Bloodvines are good; I enjoy massive carnivorous plants as much as the next guy. I also like the visual description, and the idea of a plant doing alchemy using other plants. Definitely would fill an interesting niche in any monstrous community. All of the numbers check out now.

-snip-

All of the numbers work out. I like the hulking brute type, and you've got some magic in there for flavor. I'm gonna warn you that without any presence or aesthetic to make you appealing to other nightborn your character might see less in the way of positive interactions at first. This isn't a complaint about your sheet, and in fact I think it'll make for interesting character development, I just want to make sure you know that many of your potential allies will assume you have little to bring to any conversations because you are an enchanted suit of armor. Then again, until your character gains a reputation your prey will also just be confused as to why there's a suit of armor walking around.

-snip-

I think the extreme vulnerability to light is going to make this creature rather fragile despite it's massive size, but the sheet looks good and it will be interesting to see a character sheet.

-snip-

Race: You automatically get the undead aesthetic because you have that presence, but that doesn't change anything else about the monster type. I think you spent 1 too many points though; you have 5 positive traits and only get one point refunded for your size, leading to four points spent. I'd like to see a little more description on what a wisp looks like; even though it seems you're going off of a fairly standard model it'd be good to know more precisely what you're envisioning.
Character: Because you're incorporeal there's no need to have any mass at all. Your height should be rolled, but it could be within a fairly narrow range (i.e. 1-3 in. diameter). I like the backstory, though I'd again like a little more physical description. Your magic skill should be slightly more specific; nobody is adept at all magic. And you can assume a nondescript container for carrying things around without spending a point on it.

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I like both the race and character. All of the number check out, and you're right that it's very creative. Similar to Pencil_Art you may not be accepted very quickly by some nightborn, but that won't be impossible to fix. You'll also serve a pretty particular role it seems, so you'll get along fine.

[Harry Baldman]

Spoiler: Race (click to show/hide)

Name: God-Rat

Size: Tiny

Presence: Eldritch

Form: Corporeal

Aesthetics: Eldritch, apparently.

Traits:
God-Blights - an ordinary rat bite can give you quite a few unseemly diseases, and their feces accumulate in nooks and crannies, facilitating further trouble. A god-rat takes this several steps ahead, and its communicable and catching diseases can be better described as plagues or blights. The least worrying thing you can catch from the bite of a god-rat is a touch of necrotizing fasciitis, to put it in perspective, and somewhere along the middle of the danger scale is rabies. And that's not even getting into the supernatural stuff, which will make you rot, bleed, drip and weep in ways that do not have to make physical sense.
Stealthy - you do not want to see a god-rat in your near vicinity. As a consequence, you often don't. Not before it's too late.
Rat-God - even the ordinary civilized rats have gods of their own, and they are not very nice gods, as evidenced by the god-rat's uncanny resemblance to one. Rats are moved to acts of faith, solidarity and bravery by the god-rat's presence, and remain subservient to it at all costs.
Genius Loci - a god-rat does not technically need scraps. It gnaws at the very spirit of a place, and its diseases can, after it has spent some time in a location, act on things that aren't even alive, such as a stone wall if you are lucky and the local water supply if you are not. It is quite a sight when the village well starts to projectile vomit blood at passersby, as a side note.
Incommunicable - a god-rat can only understand the language of the gods themselves, and all other attempts at verbally communicating with them are bound to fail. As such, prayer is an often recommended strategy of dealing with a god-rat. It is unclear whether they can communicate with one another, as they are often solitary by nature, electing to "lead" tribes of rats rather than societies of their own.

Description:
God-rats hail from a deep set of underground caverns that are dubbed "god-cellars" - often thought to be one of the inspirations for ideas of a punitive underworld awaiting those not acting in accordance with society. Of course, few have seen the inside of them and lived, so most of what people know of god-cellars comes from experience with the odd migrating god-rat, the only creature of these deep caverns to make its way to the surface (the god-worm and the god-bat, the two other known god-cellar inhabitants, are reputed to be slightly more fearsome, if much shier of sentient beings).

The god-rat is an unassuming enough creature, the classical example being rather lean and mostly similar to an average to huge rat, with several significant differences. For one, its head is slightly odd, having four fingerlike, dextrous maxillae with many teeth - one large tooth at the end of it (a canine on the two outer ones, an incisor on the inner ones) with a long row of molars running back along the inside of the "finger" - and a single, more robust, also fingerlike mandible that functions as a tongue. It looks a lot like a human hand, but pinker and veinier. It appears to chew by pressing the fingers to its inner mouth (located on the "palm", so to speak - in essence, a sphincter lined with molars along the rim and within the internal cavity). Its eyes, placed on the sides of the head, are jet black and perfectly circular. In build it is far more muscular than a regular rat, and its large, slightly webbed but otherwise apelike feet and powerful, laterally flattened tail hint at some proficiency at swimming. Its body aside from the head and tail is covered in thick, abrasive, apparently extremely poor-tasting (not to mention infectious) fur that can often be of a variety of colors.

Spoiler: Character (click to show/hide)

Name: Skwarak

Race: God-Rat

Body Length: 11 inches

Weight: roughly 14 ounces

Description:
Skwarak is an orange-colored, relatively small and apparently quite young god-rat with a plentiful helping of the god-rat equivalent of ambition and a can-do attitude. He tends to keep stiff upper lips in the event of misfortune, and it takes quite a bit of doing to ruin his day. He's a little shy of other nightborn, though entirely lacking in fear of civilized people. He has an enthusiastic appreciation for beer, learned through contact with nightborn, and seems above-average in intelligence. He has a curious bent to him, and is very intrigued by ghosts and their ilk. He's currently camped out beneath the hut of an orc leatherworker, enjoying a fine bit of gnawing on some stray pieces of leather, and is considering following the next people to leave the settlement he is currently in, hopefully following them to a place where there's more rats he can hang out with. The nightborn here are a little too zealous in hunting their own.

Skills: observational learning, gnawing, retreating, sneaking, climbing.

Inventory: ain't got no hands, so ain't got no stuff neither.

Probably going to need a balance pass on this, but I don't foresee too many issues, do you, GM?

[Tomcost]

I'm definitely still accepting and encouraging sheets, but I figured I'd write down my thoughts on all of the sheets so far.

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Your sheet is good: all of the skills balance out and the description is detailed. Your also the only eldritch being to have applied so far (I wonder what derm is up to...). My only comment would be that your description could include something about your character's interest in necromancy.

Okay, added it! The interest of the Lord of Laments in Necromancy is purely practical. It is just a means for a sinister end.

[~Neri]

I'll write one up shortly.

[MrVoid]

Edited. Character this evening.

[SOLDIER First]

Is there a possibility of more than six characters?

Spoiler: Larek, the Orcish Smith (click to show/hide)

Name: Larek
Race: Orc
Height: 7 ft.
Weight: 230 lb.
Description: Being an Orc, Larek is still taller than the average human, but in turn is average for his people. His skin is a dark olive, his eyes chestnut, and his ponytailed hair jet black. Larek's father was the best smith in their village when Larek was a young boy, and Larek admired him and his craft greatly. When his father died many years later, leaving him alone in the world, Larek decided to go out and make a life for himself as his father had. Larek holds true to his race's penchant for crafting and, in fact, dislikes combat. He is not completely above fighting, however. Larek specializes in molding and hammering weapons from ore. He fetches most of his materials himself.
Skills
Metalsmithing (Weapons, Light)
Mining
Inventory
Basic Smith's Tools (Hammer & tongs), strapped to his belt
Bronze Pickax, also strapped to his belt
Miner's Knapsack, used to carry ore more easily

[ATHATH]

I removed an ability, but I'd still like to keep the weight (for magical attacks). I specialized his schools of magic. Despite being undead, can I have a normal presence?

[Ama]

Spoiler: Itudal the Foul (click to show/hide)

Name: Itudal the Foul

Race: Giant Bat
Height: 11.3 ft.
Weight: 525 lb.
Description: Itudal is large gray bat with black wings. He is quite cunning and deceitful, know for fleeing the second he looks to be in danger. Itudal mostly focuses on quickly attacking and destroying in the darkness of night, before fleeing back to his lair before day.
Skills: Silent Flying
Fleeing
Stealth
Biting
Hearing
Inventory: No hands.

[ATHATH]

Harry, I think your character and mine are going to get along very well together.

[~Neri]

Spoiler: Race: (click to show/hide)

Name: Speakers.
Size: Normal form is Tiny, varying between 1 and 5 pounds. +1.
Presence: None +1
Form: An individual Node of a Speaker is a small wriggling wormlike creature with a barbed tip. Usually white, but occasionally Nodeworms with bloodred rings are born. The RingedNodeworms are thinkers. Sapients. They control the lesser Nodes and by association, whatever host said Nodeworms are residing in. Should a Ringed Node be killed, all Nodeworms under its control will go feral, dying within a day should they be outside a host, and dying within weeks should they be within a host. Hosts usually begin to look malnourished after a week of being infested unless abnormal quantities of food are consumed. Most Hosts will die within several months if not properly fed and watered. Something most newborn Ringed do not know to do. All Nodeworms are Corporal.
Aesthetics: Grotesque -1.
Traits

Infesting. Nodeworms that come in contact with a prey animal, varied from small birds, to dogs, to people, will burrow into the skin violently and dig towards the brain. Upon reaching the brain, they will release several tendrils, which anchor them to said brain and allow them to commandeer the nervous system. The person is fully aware of all actions their body is made to do while under control. Often, sapients under control will cry, as the brain directly controls tearducts. Infested Hosts will slowly grow broods in their bellies. Regardless of gender. This is extremely painful for the host. On average, one Nodeworm will grow in the average human sized host per day after four weeks of infestation. One in four is a Ringed and is therefore uncontrollable by the Ringed controlling the host. Normally Nodeworms both Ringed and normal will stay in the host until the host encounters a suitable host for a worm to infest. In environments with few suitable hosts, the belly will often appear bloated. Eventually bursting should a sufficient wormmass be achieved.

Control. Ringed Nodeworms telepathically control normal Nodeworms. The younger they are, the fewer they can control. Normal Nodeworms cannot function when not controlled by a Ringed and will die quite fast. Ringed worms can only control normals when hosting, effectively using the brain of the Host as an amplifier. This is painful for the Host.

Difficult to Spot. Nodeworms are small. Hard to notice.. Until you feel a sudden burning pain and moments later realize your body is no longer under your control.

Leaping. Nodeworms can leap. They don't look it, but they can launch themselves several feet in the air by contracting before and expanding suddenly, they can leap further if they are leaping from a Host.

Description: Speakers are small white worms. Occasionally they are small white worms with red rings. These red ringed worms burrow into a prey animal and seize control upon reaching the brain and anchoring themselves to it. After several weeks, a worm brood will begin to grow. Sometimes additional reds, but normally whites. Upon proper hosts being located, whites will burrow out of the Ringed Host and leap at targets, burrowing into the target and seizing control. This White Controlled Host is under the Mother Ringed's control. After several weeks it will begin producing a brood as well. Ringed have a limit to the number of Hosts they can control. Mostly dependent on age and strength of the Host's brain. Should a Host produce a Ringed worm and the Host is controlled by a white worm, the Ringed will take control. All of this is horribly painful for the Host. Who is completely self aware the entire time. Should no suitable hosts be found to discharge worms, and too many accumulate in the stomach, the stomach will bloat, eventually bursting, the flesh held together by the multitude of worms. The Host will often survive for weeks longer in this intensely painful state before dying. Speakers normally do not use names, thinking of each other in terms of thought impulses and mental shapes. However they can speak through the host and do pick up on the languages that the Host has learned. As well as some level of skill and knowledge. Allowing them to pass as the host for a period of time.

Speakers navigate by mental imprints when outside of a host. If something has some level of a mind, it can sense it. If something has an active mind, it can think at it.

Spoiler: Character: (click to show/hide)

Name: N/A
Race: Speaker
Height: N/A, should I roll for Host?
Weight: 2lb. Prolly should roll for host.
Description: A small white worm with five red rings and a barbed tip. Probably in a host, not sure if I should roll for that.
Skills: Sorta depends on the host.
Outside of host skills are:
Leaping.
Sneaking.
Digging.
Quick Movement.
Thinkspeaking at other Speakers/telepathically active people or creatures.
Inventory: Unless there is a host, there isn't an inventory.

[Andres]

Unreserve me. There's no way I can compete with so many people.

[Urist Arrhenius]

Unreserve me. There's no way I can compete with so many people.

There are still plenty of niches which have not been explored, and time to submit a sheet if you'd like. But I can understand if you don't want to.

[MrVoid]

Name:Alicia
Race:Bloodless
Height:5ft
Weight135lbs
Description:Pale as the moon and thin as a rod, like the entirety of her race, Alicia maintains an immaculate if disturbing appearance.  She was accidentally sired by a young vampire noble who got a little overzealous in a tryst with an enslaved maid.  Alicia rejected the transformation wholeheartedly, retaining her sentience without her life.  She maintained the appearance of complete subservience until she poisoned the blood of the Grand Sire, leading to a schism in the brood.  During the resulting chaos she cut the heart out of the young noble who sired her and fled.
Skills
Acrobatics:
Deception:
Poisons:
Inventory
Dagger
Jeweled Rapier (stolen)

[Pencil_Art]

Okay, I'm going to reduce the size of the Harbingers and add a positive trait. It's hard to hide when you're a good meter higher then everyone else in town.