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[WhitiusOpus]

Spoiler: Aeterne Deus (click to show/hide)

Name: Aeterne Deus
Preferred Role: Elder God
Sphere(s): Order, Good, Holy, and Lasting Creation

Appearance: When Aeterne chooses to show himself to mortals, or must manifest himself into a visage, he creates a humanoid avatar, glowing faintly. Standing ten feet tall comparative to mortals, he also has great, white wings, and a holy aura sorrounding him. There seems to be an ever present dust of gold surrounding him, and the area he occupies creates it's own light, so that he is never in darkness. Wearing full body armor of gold, and fitted to his form perfectly. The breastplate holds scenes of his ascension to the rank he holds, and is constantly changing to accommodate his history. This appearance has no face, only a bright illumination behind the eyelets of his helmet, which is formed into an expression of serenity. He wields a great flaming sword, with the inscription "Lustitia", and a great shield, upon which the words "Ut sit regnum" printed upon it. The words have a fiery appearance.

Description: In the beginning of time itself, for this universe, there was the creation of violence. Destruction and chaos reigned as planets were consumed by black holes, stars imploded, and whole worlds were destroyed and created within the span of only a few millennia. Destruction was rampant, nothing was lasting. The was no room for growth or expansion of new forms - everything was whipped into a frenzy of constant motion and change. This Chaos, gave rise to an opposition - order.

Aeterne Deus was formed in response to the chaos of the universe, his presence bringing forth stability. The response of a universe in constant change, with forces screaming for a balance. His form has rarely changed with the rise and fall of cosmos, always watchful of the Chaos he barely holds at bay, in order to create life and structure. His presence promotes prosperity and longevity, and change is very rarely a fact of his sphere, and then only to give way to a brighter and more stable future. He constantly is in war with chaos and the disorder that it brings, and is wary of Younger Gods and Ascendants who wish to change the ways of the universe back to the original conflicting state.

Hope this is a good candidate for the position I want, or possibly Over God. Although that trickster is a wall of text

[GreatWyrmGold]

Seeing the detail some people are putting in their Descriptions makes me kinda wish I hadn't split my effort.

[10ebbor10]

Seeing the detail some people are putting in their Descriptions makes me kinda wish I hadn't split my effort.

Yup, same thing here. Only one option left, to criticize all others for basically retreading the order versus Chaos thing over and over again. 4 out of 7 (technically 6, as Bob has been disqualified) Elder Gods are either standard Chaos, or standard Order gods. I mean, these can be interesting if done right, but they tend to be rather boring and generic.

Or of course, I can write some actual interesting stuff to improve my own, probably far from unique application.

[GreatWyrmGold]

How would you classify my gods?

[10ebbor10]

Naming: Wordplay/Latin
And after that:
   -- Standard benevolent/ morally superior God (Flavor: Science)
   -- Standard Power grabbing God (Alignment: Atheist)*
   -- Standard Conquer-everything God (Alignment: Neutral)
Other notes: 
  -City/Civ builder (Ie, taking control/focusing on a single civilization.)  Not present in atheist god

Edit: This, and previous judgments are not a very serious reviews, and based on stereotypes and oversimplification. Not going to give actual serious criticism until I'm certain that I'm actually in a position where it's not completely hypocritical to do so. Off course, every thing depends on how the game is played.

Therefore, hint for the GM. Request sample actions. Gives you an intention of how players would play the game, and keeps them busy for now.

[GreatWyrmGold]

Edit: This, and previous judgments are not a very serious reviews, and based on stereotypes and oversimplification. Not going to give actual serious criticism until I'm certain that I'm actually in a position where it's not completely hypocritical to do so.

Makes me feel better about your (brief) review.
In your opinion, which is the most interesting?

Therefore, hint for the GM. Request sample actions. Gives you an intention of how players would play the game, and keeps them busy for now.

I'd suggest a modification to this idea: Sample actions, to (semi-)specific situations. The actions a god takes when he rules the world and faces an uprising would be massively different from those when he rules a tribe (with several other religions competing for dominance) would when facing an uprising.

[10ebbor10]

Just in case people didn't get the note, the review consists of no more and no less than finding the nearest stereotype and smashing it on the applicable gods.

As for which is the most interesting, it's a rather troubling question. Really, it all depends on how they're played, so at this point there really isn't enough information to go by. Anyway, I prefer the other 2 above Rex, as they have much more stuff that distances them from their archetype.

Then again, who am I to judge?

[GreatWyrmGold]

Anyway, I prefer the other 2 above Rex, as they have much more stuff that distances them from their archetype.

Then again, who am I to judge?

Someone who has the same opinion as the guy who created them, as it happens.

[Xantalos]

Holy balls I just realized how long my application is.
Uh. I'll put a tl;dr version in there.

[Zanzetkuken The Great]

Holy balls I just realized how long my application is.
Uh. I'll put a tl;dr version in there.

I'm going to read through it anyway, so leave up the full thing as well.

[Xantalos]

Yeah, just for convenience.

[Zanzetkuken The Great]

Yeah, just for convenience.

You know, based upon the way the formatting is, I am slightly wondering if you were bit by the Henderson bug when you wrote that.

[Xantalos]

Kinda?
Anyhow, longass TL;DR has been implemented, which kinda explains it in game terms.

[Playergamer]

Hey, what do you people think about mine?

[GreatWyrmGold]

(Quick quick quick.

Pretty vague and nondescript, really.