On the plus side, I was thinking about having the perspective and timing jump back to Nari from when they first met.
"Narissara looked like trouble from the first moment we met. She was a tall, voluptuous woman dressed in the traditional red-white Bodyweaver's robes with a hip-length braid of straight black hair that bobbed when she talked. It was as captivating as it was annoying. I studied her for a few seconds, trying to guess just what she was. I wouldn't buy human; she had to be at least a quarter fey to be that attractive. Her features were just too... artful, but shy of perfection.
"Centurion Deustrages."
Roaken clearly wasn't her first language - the accent was wrong. I still wondered why Consul Drusus had personally ordered me to escort the priestess, but orders were orders, regardless of our gods and her attitude. Still, it rankled me to have to be at the beck and call of Illeni and Vijer's servant. Lawful good types tend to be a real drag, and healers like her tended to look on soldiers like me as "uncultured murderers in uniform." Well, no, let me rephrase that: calling a Bodyweaver a 'healer' was something akin to calling a Wizard a 'person who dabbles in magic.'
"Take me to the rest of my escort."
"
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"Zane looked like trouble from the first moment we met. He was handsome but had the strangest eyes - no pupils, just hundreds of shifting colors. He was partially sideways to me, and I noticed with feline pleasure that he had an action butt. Which wasn't something you'd expect in a demigod, right?
"Centurion Deustrages, " I purred," take me to the rest of my escort. "
It took some effort to speak Roaken with my old Shasong accent, doubting that he'd think much aside from "She speaks Chi Meng." Which I did, but still. Lies within lies within lies; it's good for people to underestimate you. "
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