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Shadowgandor

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Please listen to this song a friend made
« on: November 14, 2011, 11:24:20 am »

Hey all,

A friend of mine has made an attempt to create a dubstep track. It's his first attempt and he'd like to get some feedback ^^
You can listen to the song at this link: http://soundcloud.com/pep-soundz/pep-soundz-dark-evil

Please tell us what you think of it! :)
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #1 on: November 14, 2011, 11:37:56 am »

From about 0:40-1:25 the drums could sit a bit better in the mix. Maybe. That's my personal preference, to be honest, and he might not share my opinion.

It's better than most of my attempts to do dubstep, but it's still kind of light on the drop. Actually, I don't think it really has a distinctive drop. And the distinctive drop is sort of the hallmark of a dubstep song. Like at 1:03 on this song. Or 0:39 of this song.

Those would be the two points I would focus on.
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #2 on: November 14, 2011, 11:53:56 am »

The elements by themselves are not bad my themselves, but the song sounds to samey I would recommend trying to get all the elements in the song into it in a shorter time frame.
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #3 on: November 14, 2011, 06:46:40 pm »

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I'm not so much a follower of Dubsteb to offer critisism I'm afraid, but I'll say it sounds good for what it is! :D
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #4 on: November 14, 2011, 08:04:41 pm »

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I feel your pain brother.

What compels someone to start a song with pure earrape and then repeat it every bar for the entire first half?
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #5 on: November 14, 2011, 11:16:05 pm »

The elements by themselves are not bad my themselves, but the song sounds to samey I would recommend trying to get all the elements in the song into it in a shorter time frame.

Agree with this. Also, the song doesn't really have much of a drop, which is a fairly important component of dubstep. It sounds more like techno, currently.
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #6 on: November 15, 2011, 06:27:40 pm »

Thanks for the responses all! He's currently working on a new song, attempting to create a drop and make it less same'ish. ^^
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #7 on: January 03, 2012, 07:04:37 am »

Alright, it's been a while but here's a new track that he recently made and would like to get some feedback on ^^
http://soundcloud.com/pep-soundz/pep-soundz-transform
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #8 on: January 03, 2012, 07:27:07 am »

dubstep
NOPE NOPE NOPE
I hate dubstep, but that's personal taste. Best of luck!
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #9 on: January 03, 2012, 10:58:51 am »

First of all, let me say I'm not such a big fan of dubstep.
However, when I listened to the first song I instantly thought:
"I'd love to make a short movie to go with this music. Zombies. Panic, crowds, subway, darkness, filth, grime, black&white grainy film...yeah.

The second song did not "tell" me that much. *shrug*
I liked the first one better. I think those spoken phrases ruined the second song.
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Re: Please listen to this song a friend made
« Reply #10 on: January 05, 2012, 11:16:56 am »

Overall a great job for starting out.  But since we're going for criticism I will have to sing its shortcomings. :P

The first song the drum sounds a little too clear, almost like your sitting RIGHT next to the drum set but listening to the dubstep in another room.  Drums need to have some sort of a lowpass filter or something, maybe just a little touch with an equalizer would clear it up.  Also the song seems to consist of 4 parts and 4 parts only.  There is little variance in each of the four parts which almost makes you feel bored half way through a part.  Varying the parts up, even repeating some parts works just fine.  Many songs repeat their chorus and verse 2 maybe even 3 times in one song; if they just put it all in one stretch it would be boring to listen to.

For the second song it sounds...too happy?  Too many major keys and not enough minor.  The spoken words also seem to kill the momentum of the song, but they do add some flavor that I think would be lost if they were not there.  I've never worked with music with words so I can't really give much advice on that.

So that is all the criticism I have for it, besides that a fine job.
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