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Author Topic: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)  (Read 1972 times)

Strife26

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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #15 on: March 25, 2011, 12:39:29 pm »

   The dark dream-scape stretched to infinity. There was nothing to the left of him, nothing to the right of him. Nothing behind and nothing ahead. There was only the hero and the hero's soft footsteps as he continued on. It was either an ultimately unnatural or perfectly natural place. Just a black ground and a gray sky, with the flat land allowing a seemingly endless view. Was existence supposed to be full or empty? Could this place, one without any features, be the most interesting location of all?

   He was most certainly not out of his depth. Somewhere in the back of his head, thoughts of unease tried to stir. He couldn't remember anything. No name, no events, no purpose. However, it'd hardly do to have that little panic rat escape into his mind, so he kept it penned up and isolated. He was more than competent enough to deal with the situation, whatever it may be.

   Time stretched on like the terrain. One step after another. Movement was easy; thinking about the situation would be hard. He kept that panic rat in it's place but noted an interesting fact. Time was passing, sure as sure. However, something felt off about it. The hero wasn't getting tired or thirsty like he should be. Mobility was something that he was good at, but even so, he shouldn't feel like he could walk on forever. It felt like he could walk on forever.

   At some point in time, voices started in his ears. Imperceptible at first, they grew just loud enough to make themselves known. He responded by whipping his head around, looking for their source. Considering the area, it wasn't much of a surprise that they didn't have an obvious origin. Just whispers of speech, too quiet to understand. Pretty annoying, actually.

   Another endless instant of walking passed. The whispers continued while the hero did his best to ignore them. He wasn't successful and found himself increasingly annoyed at his situation. Instead of letting the panic rat free, he got angry. “Whoever the fuck is listening, you'd better god-damn get over here right the fuck now!”

   The outburst echoed in the darkness, with silence reasserting itself. Even more profound silence, as the voices had vanished along with the echos. The hero stopped, alone and disheartened. What the hell was going on?

   There was a change to the terrain in front of him, a sudden beam of illumination, not unlike a spotlight from some offstage catwalk. Not knowing what else to do, he moved towards the light at a jog. He regarded the lightened area as some great pool of radiance. The hero chided himself for the airy thought, presuming that the sameness of the plain must have affected his thinking somehow.

   The jog ended at the clearly defined edge of light and dark. Something metallic glinted inside. What could he do other than get closer? Five steps inward; the metallic something was a gun; its body was boxy and short. Although it lacked the buttstock of a rifle, his find was awfully oversized to be a handgun. In one motion, he secured the weapon, scooped up the magazine next to it, loaded it, and worked the bolt to chamber a round. The weapon was heavy, but lighter than it looked. As the clack of the mechanism echoed into silence, the light suddenly snapped out.

   The gunman found that it was most comfortable to have one hand on the pistol grip while the other went further up, holding the firearm roughly as if it was a rifle. It was a very comforting weight as he slowly turned, seeing if there was anything different. Sure enough, he saw another beam in the distance. He moved towards it at a fast pace, keeping his weapon at the ready.

   Taking long strides, the hero ate up the distance quickly. A very strange sight greeted him in the pool of light. A table and two chairs were set up in the center, made of polished jet. Facing him sat a middle aged man, wearing a suit with white shirt and dark blue tie. The man nodded, then spoke, “Hello Leon Alistair.”

   The name fit like a glove, and Leon somehow knew that it was his.
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #16 on: March 25, 2011, 04:18:53 pm »

Good so far, maybe a bit slow. I presume this is on some other plain than the main story will be.
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #17 on: March 25, 2011, 04:36:39 pm »

Yo leon, my man, my bro, my broheim, my broseph stalin, this is your conscience speaking to you, you should kill this guy, I don't like the look of him, I think he's gonna betray you at some point, you know, like in one of those video game things, come on man I gota wacked out feeling about him
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #18 on: March 25, 2011, 05:45:52 pm »

How about a system of ascendancy similar to The Malazan Book of the Fallen:

http://forum.malazanempire.com/index.php?showtopic=11092
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #19 on: March 27, 2011, 12:11:29 pm »

I've always been iffy about a direct followers=power relationship for the settings, just because I'd say that the main conflict is between those who claim that their status as plane-walkers gives them carteblanche to mess with mortals and claim to be gods vs those who don't. It's definitely in their that some gods believe that to be completely true.


We have one request that Leon flip out and kill the carefully crafted highly important probably ungodly powerful character before he can give any exposition. Any other requests? I'd rather not, as it'd just get Leon killed.
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #20 on: March 27, 2011, 12:16:01 pm »

How about he asks what the man has to say? Character build up is always good.


EDIT: And can we get a general alignment of this character?
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #21 on: March 27, 2011, 12:31:47 pm »

Leon's alignment isn't really set in stone, but I've been imagining him as roughly lawful good, just on the basis of him seeking power and being prideful. I'm sure that it can develop, what do you want?
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #22 on: March 27, 2011, 12:34:46 pm »

I dunno, maybe an Antihero type character? They resonate well with many storylines.
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #23 on: March 27, 2011, 04:57:22 pm »

seeking power and being pridefull sounds like lawfull evil not lawfull good.

And yea, antiheroes are fun.
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #24 on: March 27, 2011, 05:02:18 pm »

Depends on how you use that power and pride.


What if a simple nobody with no power except for pride wanted to get more power to stop the worldwide power struggle or to cure terminal diseases, would he be Lawful Evil?
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #25 on: March 27, 2011, 05:36:16 pm »

I interpreted it as wanting it for it's own sake not as a means to anything else.
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Re: Pride, Power, and Planes: input driven story (attempt two)
« Reply #26 on: March 29, 2011, 09:28:53 am »

Alright, the next section will be as quickly as possible. Movement tends to screw up my schedule for a few days. We're roughly going to be lawful evilish and are at least going to listen to the Charismatic Man (yeah, that's his name) before we do anything. Unless someone wants to input something else before I write the section, of course!
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