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Dwarfu

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[39b] Small Grammar Fix
« on: July 16, 2008, 09:04:42 pm »

After speaking with a High Priestess, her parting words were:

"At this juncture in your life, even a child would give yourself to hospitality."

That's wrong on many levels.
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Re: [39b] Small Grammar Fix
« Reply #1 on: July 17, 2008, 02:17:31 am »

Yeah, the "even a child would" construction isn't really built to play with the others.  I've scrapped it.  "The wisest among us" too.
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Re: [39b] Small Grammar Fix
« Reply #2 on: July 17, 2008, 07:07:40 pm »

Having them say "do as X and" would work as well...

At this juncture in your life, do as even a child would and give yourself to hospitality.
When you wake in the morning, do as the wisest among us and consider pain.
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