Hi there, folks. I bring you a simple story in the shape of a song I'm writing. It started while I was bored at work and then everyday I wrote some new lines. At first I just had eight verses and I did not know what the story was about. Then it started to unravel by itself and now I have the idea of what I want to tell. This here is just the first part of the full song. It will have three long parts and a fourth short part. The music, maybe, will change with every part, I'm not entirely sure. I'd appreciate all criticism, suggestions, changes to the lyrics and such. I'm not a native English speaker so I'm subject to my limited vocabulary and as such the words I use are very simple. If you find better rhymes I'd like to read about them. About the refrain, I still don't know if I will leave it like that or I will change something to avoid too much repetition. Anyway, you can check the idea for the song here:
The Dwarven Lady.
P.S.: by the way, I need help with the red line, I checked and it does not mean what I was trying to say. I need to find a line that rhymes and fits. Thanks to all.
There was this dwarven lady
who only had a son.
His father died of hunger,
his brother by a troll.
And then she thought 'twas time
to change of life and all
so they took their belongings
and moved to another fort.
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See the dwarven lady go.
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
She only had one son.
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
Her husband climbed a tree alone.
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
Her first son was enroled.
In all the way they happened
to find no one at all
but just a pair and couple
that looked and smelled like trolls.
The boy jumped in the bushes
and hid like rabbits know
his mother just charged forward
and yelled Blood for Armok!
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See the dwarven lady go.
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
How coward is her son.
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
This one lady is no joke.
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
Her blood belongs to Armok.
During the fight she strangled,
she bit and punched and more.
The trolls then took her shoes off
and tried to reach her socks.
She was however faster
and grabbed her right foot's sock
and back and forth she smacked them
wight mighty pig tail cloth.
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See the dwarven lady go.
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
She's not afraid of trolls.
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See her fighting all alone.
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
With mighty pig tail cloth.
After the trolls were beaten
to teeth, to bones and gore,
she searched about the bushes
to find her chicken son.
Indeed the lad was lying,
his face full of remorse,
"You couldn't help me fighting,
you ungrateful elven dog!"
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See the dwarven lady go!
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
she scorned her spineless son!
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
"It's not time for crying, boy."
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
"You'll cry when I am gone!"
Alas there was no resting
for mother nor for son,
as noise of metal marching
was coming from the north.
"A vile force of the darkness!
Now run, you hear me? Go!"
They soon put well behind them
all goblins, bats and trolls.
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See the dwarven lady go!
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
now running with her son!
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
"There, there, I see a dwarf!"
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
"Just kill him! Kill them all!"
Along three miles of grassland,
of bushes, trees and rocks,
the goblin army chased them
and tried to kill them both.
And when the lady was sure
they had nowhere to go,
she spied some tall structures
of sturdy polished stone.
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See the dwarven lady go!
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
the goblins were too slow!
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
there are dwarves behind those walls!
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
Just open the damned door!
The soldiers who were watching
soon called the mayor forth.
"For Armok what's this cursing!
I hear it from my loft!"
And then he saw the goblins,
the lady and her son.
"I guess today we're fighting.
To war, it is, we go."
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See the dwarven lady go!
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
the mayor went to war!
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
Flew the bats over the moat!
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
And trolls soon climbed the walls!
The courtyard was all bloody,
with corpses all around.
Some gobs, some dwarves, some cattle.
The bats were fierce and foul.
And there there was the lady,
her boy fighting beside.
"I think my mother's crazy,
please, gods, don't let us die!"
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See the dwarven lady go!
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
how proud is of her son!
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
"Grind them goblins to the bones!"
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
"Tonight your beard has grown!"
No sooner it had ended,
more people came in flock.
The mayor saw the lady
and then her bloodied sock.
"She killed a dozen goblins
and wounded three or four.
Her look is otherworldly,
I better fool her not."
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o
See the dwarven lady go!
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
She doesn't care at all.
And tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
"This will be our grand new home."
Tweedlee taddle laddle lady-o,
"We'll start just like before."
"Those goblins had it coming,
we're a superior force!",
the mayor said it loudly
as he approached them both.
"I thank you for your helping,
be welcomed to my fort.
Those walls will guard you safely.
The name is Hammercall."
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