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[Korbac]

It's all in the execution, I say!

[Donuts]

A big point of the character is that he's basically me, if I were a superhero.

I'm sorry, but to be brutally honest no one is going to want to read about a self-insert superhero.

Yeah, I know, but the point is that this isn't literally me where I do laundry and hang out. He's still doing the super hero jazz, but he also has the personality and beliefs of a scumbag.

Even then, it seemed as if you just attached personality traits to him that you'd think would be edgy or cool just for the sake of being edgy and cool.. I have no idea why being a chronic masturbator would be a main trait of his personality, refer to my first sentence for this. It frankly overall just doesn't seem interesting to me, and as if you just tried to funnel a bunch of ideas that you'd think would be gritty or edgy into one character and ran with it.

That's the point. I probably won't go with the masturbator thing because it would be weird and offputting, but once again, the entire point of the character is that he is ridiculously gritty and edgy because he is a parody of gritty superheroes.

Throwing a bunch of super edgy and gritty things onto a character doesn't instantly makes him a parody, it just makes him a poorly written character.

Poorly written character? It sounds dwarven.

[Monsieur Fish]

I've got a guy I know to do some preliminary sketches. If I like them I'll post them. And if they're awesome I'm gonna make this a short comic.

[Slayerhero90]

Wait so it's bad to have a cast of complete monsters and psychopaths? That's to edgy? Damn. Quite a few of my characters are of the mindset of wanting to burn families and cut elaborate designs into people's eyes.

[Monsieur Fish]

Wait so it's bad to have a cast of complete monsters and psychopaths? That's to edgy? Damn. Quite a few of my characters are of the mindset of wanting to burn families and cut elaborate designs into people's eyes.

I really don't get what people mean when they say something is too edgy. I can understand a poor attempt to be edgy (I.E. LOLOL I love hitler!) But having a cast of unhinged freaks is different.

[Korbac]

Wait so it's bad to have a cast of complete monsters and psychopaths? That's to edgy? Damn. Quite a few of my characters are of the mindset of wanting to burn families and cut elaborate designs into people's eyes.

I really don't get what people mean when they say something is too edgy. I can understand a poor attempt to be edgy (I.E. LOLOL I love hitler!) But having a cast of unhinged freaks is different.

LOL GRIMDARK EVERYTHING IS SHIT is a bit passe, I think is what is meant. I think it can still be done well.

[Slayerhero90]

Wait so it's bad to have a cast of complete monsters and psychopaths? That's to edgy? Damn. Quite a few of my characters are of the mindset of wanting to burn families and cut elaborate designs into people's eyes.

I really don't get what people mean when they say something is too edgy. I can understand a poor attempt to be edgy (I.E. LOLOL I love hitler!) But having a cast of unhinged freaks is different.

LOL GRIMDARK EVERYTHING IS SHIT is a bit passe, I think is what is meant. I think it can still be done well.

On Gelduzmorn, everything is horrible. Everything is wonderful. Society's corrupt. Society's pure. Nature's violent. Nature's peaceful. The skies are polluted. The skies are clear. The rain burns. The rain soothes...

[freeformschooler]

To a certain extent, people see it as worse when you just "tell" them how grimdark edgegritty your world and characters are. That makes it look as if you're trying to achieve that effect which can come off as amateur/immature. It's something a lot of bad fanfic authors fall prey to.

Here's a good reference: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Show,_don't_tell

[Korbac]

To a certain extent, people see it as worse when you just "tell" them how grimdark edgegritty your world and characters are. That makes it look as if you're trying to achieve that effect which can come off as amateur/immature. It's something a lot of bad fanfic authors fall prey to.

Here's a good reference: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Show,_don't_tell

Good points, good points!

[Slayerhero90]

SFNSN is a funny disease.