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[MonkeyHead]

Aha. I see. I initially had it written (typed?) in that manner, but it looked wrong.

Anyway...I'm sorry, I couldn't help myself.

Cleansed in sweet MAGMA
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA
For we have dug too deeply
A balrog is come

A balrog is come
Time to smash its foul head in
With my new hammer

[Cthulhu]

Come on guys, there's more to a haiku than the syllables!

I'm thinking about writing, or at least beginning to write, a semi-epic poem about some dorf hero.  That's probably more in line with what the OP was looking for.  I tried to do it in Homeric verse but it doesn't work that well in English.  You can either do it in quantitative (long-short-short) but that's almost impossible in English, or you can do it in accentuated (stress-unstress-unstress) but that doesn't preserve the beat.

So I'll just do it in god damned iambic pentameter I guess.

[Strife26]

Bow at the foot of English's poetic form! I'll try to piece something together in a more interesting meter, but might end up on iambic as well.

[Owlbread]

Who says it has to be in English?

[LittleJP]

The problem with non-english is that it becomes more difficult to set properly. I'm not familiar enough with other languages to set the stressed/unstressed syllables and I wouldn't be able to set it very well when I have no idea what each word means.

[Tsuchigumo550]

Here in the Dwarven Home of Axecrashed,
Nobles and necromancers ran free,
Yak hair and mandates came all the day,
"The fort will fall" as some elfy dwarves say.

But then a true dwarf clad in steel and blood
Took to himself in a workshop
When he emerged he was quite a sight
a dwarf, a legend of might.

He had made the fort's salvation
A finely crafted floodgate of bauxite
It was installed and the necromancer caught
That night, a banquet no money could have bought.

Copper cages as far as the eye can see
Today is the day that our fort could truly be
Nobles and Necromancers all in line
And the magma was right on time.

Glowing red vengeance flooded in freely...

Nobles and Necromancers no more.

[Cthulhu]

What's the meter on that?  I'm pretty bad at scansion but it feels like dactylic.  I like it, but you can sort of see what I was complaining about earlier, you kind of have to contort English to make it fit the meter; I bet things would work a lot better in iambic.

[Tsuchigumo550]

It's... not really in anything. Most of the words aren't spoken any differently, but I basically just hummed a tune to it when I typed.

The italics is supposed to be fast.

[Cthulhu]

So I've started some tentative work on a Dwarven Epyllion, just establishing the setting right now.  One stanza, and I want to know what people think, and if I'm not fucking up the meter or anything.  Italics denote things I'm not sure I like, please give me feedback on those parts especially.

Look to the North.  The chimneys smoke no more.
Empty and still is the old valley floor.
Nature reclaimeth her kingdom, and dwarven
stone by crawling root is untimely riven.
Lament!  Lament!  Shatteredglazes fell.
To time, to clime, to Stozu, come from hell.
Stozu, goblin foul, the devil, the dog.
Whose band of jackals struck from out the fog.

[LittleJP]

Here in the Dwarven Home of Axecrashed,
Nobles and necromancers ran free,
Yak hair and mandates came all the day,
"The fort will fall" as some elfy dwarves say.

But then a true dwarf clad in steel and blood
Took to himself in a workshop
When he emerged he was quite a sight
a dwarf, a legend of might.

He had made the fort's salvation
A finely crafted floodgate of bauxite
It was installed and the necromancer caught
That night, a banquet no money could have bought.

Copper cages as far as the eye can see
Today is the day that our fort could truly be
Nobles and Necromancers all in line
And the magma was right on time.

Glowing red vengeance flooded in freely...

Nobles and Necromancers no more.

I finally started setting this today. Busy semester.

If anyone's interested, I got around to uploading a bunch of non-vocal works.

https://soundcloud.com/littlejp

[wierd]

Ok.. I might try my hand at this.

It will take me a while to perculate something pleasing though.

[Xantalos]

I think this could count.
Also this.