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Montopolis

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My First Poem
« on: June 02, 2012, 05:44:34 pm »
Here's a poem of dubious quality that I scribbled down late last night. Constructive criticism is welcome; I would love to have someone give me feedback.

The Feast
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And yes, I know that there is a lack of lava.
« Last Edit: June 03, 2012, 07:35:50 am by Montopolis »
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Re: My First Poem
« Reply #1 on: June 03, 2012, 09:26:41 am »
I suppose I should've thought about putting a poem about Elves on Bay12...
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Re: My First Poem
« Reply #2 on: June 03, 2012, 03:07:56 pm »
lol, it's not bad
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Re: My First Poem
« Reply #3 on: June 03, 2012, 04:26:21 pm »
Quote from: Sentientdeth on June 03, 2012, 03:07:56 pm
lol, it's not bad
Thanks! That just made my day.
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Re: My First Poem
« Reply #4 on: June 04, 2012, 12:40:34 am »
;)
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