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Askot Bokbondeler

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Re: I need a good critique for a contest
« Reply #15 on: February 10, 2012, 05:22:45 pm »

i like the overal design of the creature, but it could be more cutely proportioned

here's my revision:
                                         before                                                                     after
         

list of changes:
eyes placed lower in the face and more widely spaced
smaller nostrils
smaller, thiner arms
shorter body, increasing the perceived size of the head
larger incisives make it look stupider

i like the navel
« Last Edit: February 11, 2012, 08:24:06 pm by Askot Bokbondeler »
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Re: I need a good critique for a contest
« Reply #16 on: February 10, 2012, 06:23:50 pm »

You know, a lot of it's that the shading on the navel is black, so it looks like a hole rather than an indented space in green skin.
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Re: I need a good critique for a contest
« Reply #17 on: February 10, 2012, 10:29:35 pm »

i like the overal design of the creature, but it could be more cutely proportioned

here's my revision:
your revision is broken.

Also the contest limits me to 7 colors so that kind of kills a lot of little tone changes that I would normally make
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Re: I need a good critique for a contest
« Reply #18 on: February 10, 2012, 10:31:51 pm »

also this is the original sketch in case you were wondering.  http://whitmer08.deviantart.com/gallery/#/d4p2k6l
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Re: I need a good critique for a contest
« Reply #19 on: February 11, 2012, 04:05:14 am »

Doesn't look cute to me. Personally, I think his nostrils utterly remove the cuteness factor, but that's just me.
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Askot Bokbondeler

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Re: I need a good critique for a contest
« Reply #20 on: February 11, 2012, 08:24:27 pm »

is it fixed now?

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Re: I need a good critique for a contest
« Reply #21 on: February 11, 2012, 10:26:41 pm »

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